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- 寫作品質
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- 人物形象設計
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Sorry but you Rushed the story too much, on the side of the plot little to nothing, rushed the development it strange to have max level Pokémon when he isn t even at the 3rd gym and practically more than half of is Pokémon are robbed and they never make a problem they like it? Strange{ I like the robbing bit there should be moderation in many works it s a interesting point but you used it not in the best way}... Some ideas are not bad like I said it s rushed... there is the start of the story where he should train develop and raise the pokemon but bam in like 7 chap he is master trainer already with no badge fully evolved Pokémon even semi legend that should get maxed with more difficulty and have starter Pokémon more powerful than mega evolved one
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Continue writing ,I will read it all and support you so don't be discouraged by anyone.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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absolutely ridiculous but I recommend reading until chapter 7 and you will understand why, I say this because there are so many things wrong and simply annoying about this ff that it's easier to understand if you read it yourselves..... or just take my word for ir
Sorry but you Rushed the story too much, on the side of the plot little to nothing, rushed the development it strange to have max level Pokémon when he isn t even at the 3rd gym and practically more than half of is Pokémon are robbed and they never make a problem they like it? Strange{ I like the robbing bit there should be moderation in many works it s a interesting point but you used it not in the best way}... Some ideas are not bad like I said it s rushed... there is the start of the story where he should train develop and raise the pokemon but bam in like 7 chap he is master trainer already with no badge fully evolved Pokémon even semi legend that should get maxed with more difficulty and have starter Pokémon more powerful than mega evolved one
揭示劇透 Continue writing ,I will read it all and support you so don't be discouraged by anyone.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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absolutely ridiculous but I recommend reading until chapter 7 and you will understand why, I say this because there are so many things wrong and simply annoying about this ff that it's easier to understand if you read it yourselves..... or just take my word for ir