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Me encanta como va la historia, espero una actualización pronto 🙏🥹🙏 Me muero por saber que pasa después 🧐🤩🥰..............................................................
pretty good writing quality, and the romance with rosalie is also written well enough. i just dont like the story at all. author adds too many random things that dont make sense for the twilight world. also, the authors comments about not reviewing if is negative because he dosent care.. thats not the point of the reviews really, its for other people mostly, although some might give advice the review section is just that. its not a positive affirmation section.
don't let your ki... anyone with self or any other kind of respect read this unless your trying to show a thirty year old delinquent how they messed
How disappointing. Made the MC super OP only for him to get absolutely slammed by 3 vamps.
Author san please start updating the chapter of this novel it been 1 year up till now no update progression has been made so please hurry up and update it
Well to be perfectly honest, in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, and by considering each and every one's valid opinion, without offence I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say
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yesssir don't drop and don't change too harem and keep the story pace going, I like the story so far plus twilight is a good story and a good movie but the change the plot a little bit.
I hate to say it but it’s good, this heresy is good. May God have mercy on my soul for I have sinned. The rest is just filling Up Up Up Up Up
so gooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood
This is such a let down for me, I was enjoying this fanfic a lot but Chapter 13 ruined the entire story. The MC gets three wishes and years of training but he can't defeat three vampires and they didn't even use their gifts. THREE FUCKING WISHES, I don't want to hear this shit about them being over a thousand years old, he has three wishes and he got treated like a bitch. Why do so many authors make an amazing story just to nerf the MC in the first fucking fight? If the author did it to make the MC a vampire, you could have waited and made him a vampire later so in a romantic way by making Rosalie bite him on their wedding day or something. I'm sorry author, I genuinely loved this novel but watching an MC with three wishes get bitch slapped like a pussy is terrible writing.
This is amazing book. And the grammar is pretty goo I was a little worried at first but it is safe to say that this book will leave you wanting more. [img=recommend] ...................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
I hope the reader keeps writing because this is a good story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
please don't drop this. I am a really really picky reader about fanfic but this is honestly really good. I have been waiting for you to update so I can read more.
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Please dont drop. Please more updates, updates, updates, updates, updates, updates updates, updates, updates, updates, updates and finally more updates
This is a pretty interesting take on twilight. Now the powers of the mic might seem op but the author did a good job giving him a reality check even if he does have powers he is still vulnerable so it keeps him in check with I like because sometimes story’s get boring and repetitive when they get op hella quick I just hope the author posts more but if u got personals reasons I’m chill but u should read this fanfic it’s worth it
excellent chapter dude, keep goingggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggg
Pretty good story so far it’s kinda different but not really op in a way but I just hope the author would post more chapters 🙏🏽🙏🏽.......
Another author giving MC with white hair and red eyes at rebirth. Powers are also pretty stupid for the Twilight world. I knew it was going to be bad when the book cover is an anime character for a non-anime world. I hate it. If you are one of those that likes these types of story, then cool. You do you.
Update please 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻
I have Read a few twilight fan fics but this is one of my top favorites and i cant wait for more🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰😍😍😍🥰😍
You should really update new chapters man. It's such a waste for a great book to be stuck in 11th chapter for a month or be dropped. I give you 5 stars in all except the updating stability.
honestly, love this book I want even more of it.............................................................................................
Sup, this a simple message to any futur reader or hater. For you to write dropped. Or how I disappointed you in some way during your read. Means nothing to me. I don’t really give a flying **** about what you think. I write the type of story I like to read if you don’t like it. Fine good for you. But I don’t need to know about it keep it to yourself. I didn’t ask about your opinion or your feelings or anything of the sort. I’m not your friend, not your family and not your therapist. So before commenting or leaving a dumb review ask yourself this question.
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Me encanta como va la historia, espero una actualización pronto 🙏🥹🙏 Me muero por saber que pasa después 🧐🤩🥰..............................................................
pretty good writing quality, and the romance with rosalie is also written well enough. i just dont like the story at all. author adds too many random things that dont make sense for the twilight world. also, the authors comments about not reviewing if is negative because he dosent care.. thats not the point of the reviews really, its for other people mostly, although some might give advice the review section is just that. its not a positive affirmation section.
don't let your ki... anyone with self or any other kind of respect read this unless your trying to show a thirty year old delinquent how they messed
How disappointing. Made the MC super OP only for him to get absolutely slammed by 3 vamps.
Author san please start updating the chapter of this novel it been 1 year up till now no update progression has been made so please hurry up and update it
Well to be perfectly honest, in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, and by considering each and every one's valid opinion, without offence I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say
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yesssir don't drop and don't change too harem and keep the story pace going, I like the story so far plus twilight is a good story and a good movie but the change the plot a little bit.
I hate to say it but it’s good, this heresy is good. May God have mercy on my soul for I have sinned. The rest is just filling Up Up Up Up Up
so gooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood
This is such a let down for me, I was enjoying this fanfic a lot but Chapter 13 ruined the entire story. The MC gets three wishes and years of training but he can't defeat three vampires and they didn't even use their gifts. THREE FUCKING WISHES, I don't want to hear this shit about them being over a thousand years old, he has three wishes and he got treated like a bitch. Why do so many authors make an amazing story just to nerf the MC in the first fucking fight? If the author did it to make the MC a vampire, you could have waited and made him a vampire later so in a romantic way by making Rosalie bite him on their wedding day or something. I'm sorry author, I genuinely loved this novel but watching an MC with three wishes get bitch slapped like a pussy is terrible writing.
This is amazing book. And the grammar is pretty goo I was a little worried at first but it is safe to say that this book will leave you wanting more. [img=recommend] ...................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
I hope the reader keeps writing because this is a good story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
please don't drop this. I am a really really picky reader about fanfic but this is honestly really good. I have been waiting for you to update so I can read more.
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Please dont drop. Please more updates, updates, updates, updates, updates, updates updates, updates, updates, updates, updates and finally more updates
This is a pretty interesting take on twilight. Now the powers of the mic might seem op but the author did a good job giving him a reality check even if he does have powers he is still vulnerable so it keeps him in check with I like because sometimes story’s get boring and repetitive when they get op hella quick I just hope the author posts more but if u got personals reasons I’m chill but u should read this fanfic it’s worth it
excellent chapter dude, keep goingggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggg
Pretty good story so far it’s kinda different but not really op in a way but I just hope the author would post more chapters 🙏🏽🙏🏽.......
Another author giving MC with white hair and red eyes at rebirth. Powers are also pretty stupid for the Twilight world. I knew it was going to be bad when the book cover is an anime character for a non-anime world. I hate it. If you are one of those that likes these types of story, then cool. You do you.
Update please 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻
I have Read a few twilight fan fics but this is one of my top favorites and i cant wait for more🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰😍😍😍🥰😍
You should really update new chapters man. It's such a waste for a great book to be stuck in 11th chapter for a month or be dropped. I give you 5 stars in all except the updating stability.
honestly, love this book I want even more of it.............................................................................................
Sup, this a simple message to any futur reader or hater. For you to write dropped. Or how I disappointed you in some way during your read. Means nothing to me. I don’t really give a flying **** about what you think. I write the type of story I like to read if you don’t like it. Fine good for you. But I don’t need to know about it keep it to yourself. I didn’t ask about your opinion or your feelings or anything of the sort. I’m not your friend, not your family and not your therapist. So before commenting or leaving a dumb review ask yourself this question.