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I'll give this 5 stars because I can--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
at least its new kind of reincarnation and not some kind of boring OP and plot destroying fan-pic. also when you almost read every fan pic of one piece its the first one to do 3 people to reincarnate so its not so boring . if the story became forced i will drop it (>'0')> 5 star for now😇
I find this story interesting, but the grammar, and constant switch between which character the story focuses on, gives me quite the headache. I get that the Author wants to have 3 MC's, but a proper story should only have 1 MC, while other characters can have major parts. Word of advice, pick one character, and make the story revolve around him, while the other two should only be major part side characters. Don't try to juggle 3 MC's, as you will lose readers when they read from one perspective, only for it to change all of a sudden. Also, re run all your chapters through Grammatical checker, as you are either someone who doesn't speak English well, or you are a child still in grade school. Sorry if I hurt your feelings... Good Luck Author-kun!!!!
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Honestly the first few chapters were chaotic. It made everyone so OP at the start. Then it reaches the differential worlds where they just seal off all their powers. But in the later chapters it became better, the relationships are elaborated nicely, better development of the story, and no huge harem, just a good number of girls. But there still isn’t any plot so maybe the author can add in some plot? To maybe motivate or encourage them to do something. But its ultimately up to the author. All in all not bad and nice to read in free time when looking for some bull**** and happy stuff to read.
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Bro this is a lot novel my guy, never a dull moment, the character design is lit and also how u use the knowledge from other manga and anime to create your own series. I hope u get the recognition, my guy(Please use them punctuations)
honestly, it was a bit hard to read, probably makes more paragraphs but on the other hand it was pretty fun to read and very refreshing (the names of the companions are very confusing). but overall very good
I got so confused when I read this story. I mean it really confused the hell out of me. It is just like a new idea every chapter that was inconsistent with a nonexisting plot.
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I'll give this 5 stars because I can--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
at least its new kind of reincarnation and not some kind of boring OP and plot destroying fan-pic. also when you almost read every fan pic of one piece its the first one to do 3 people to reincarnate so its not so boring . if the story became forced i will drop it (>'0')> 5 star for now😇
I find this story interesting, but the grammar, and constant switch between which character the story focuses on, gives me quite the headache. I get that the Author wants to have 3 MC's, but a proper story should only have 1 MC, while other characters can have major parts. Word of advice, pick one character, and make the story revolve around him, while the other two should only be major part side characters. Don't try to juggle 3 MC's, as you will lose readers when they read from one perspective, only for it to change all of a sudden. Also, re run all your chapters through Grammatical checker, as you are either someone who doesn't speak English well, or you are a child still in grade school. Sorry if I hurt your feelings... Good Luck Author-kun!!!!
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Honestly the first few chapters were chaotic. It made everyone so OP at the start. Then it reaches the differential worlds where they just seal off all their powers. But in the later chapters it became better, the relationships are elaborated nicely, better development of the story, and no huge harem, just a good number of girls. But there still isn’t any plot so maybe the author can add in some plot? To maybe motivate or encourage them to do something. But its ultimately up to the author. All in all not bad and nice to read in free time when looking for some bull**** and happy stuff to read.
揭示劇透 Bro this is a lot novel my guy, never a dull moment, the character design is lit and also how u use the knowledge from other manga and anime to create your own series. I hope u get the recognition, my guy(Please use them punctuations)
honestly, it was a bit hard to read, probably makes more paragraphs but on the other hand it was pretty fun to read and very refreshing (the names of the companions are very confusing). but overall very good
I got so confused when I read this story. I mean it really confused the hell out of me. It is just like a new idea every chapter that was inconsistent with a nonexisting plot.
PLEASE CONTINUEPLEASE CONTINUE PLEASE CONTINUE PLEASE CONTINUE PLEASE CONTINUE PLEASE CONTINUE PLEASE CONTINUE PLEASE CONTINUE PLEASE CONTINUE PLEASE CONTINUE PLEASE CONTINUE PLEASE CONTINUE PLEASE CONTINUE PLEASE CONTINUE PLEASE CONTINUE PLEASE CONTINUE PLEASE CONTINUE PLEASE CONTINUE PLEASE CONTINUE