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I haven’t read that far into it but its great, the story is going at a good pace [img=coins][img=exp][img=fp][img=coins][img=update][img=update][img=exp]
who is the s/o of or adorable mc its hard to tell lol . . . . . . . . . . . . , , , , , , , , , , ,, , , , , , , , , , , s d d d
really like it.......,,,the mc is evil and good at the same time not some selfish and ungratefull mc i've reading for a while.....really recomended[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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I love this fanfic!!! Unfortunately the release schedule is very slow. Posting on fanfictionnet might be a good idea, webnovel is not very suitable for slow release novels like this. It's a very good fanfic, but the beginning is its weak point. Before mc starts sailing the seas the story is kind of bad, sometimes characters like luffy and garp don't seem right which makes sense as we haven't had much screen time in the nime/manga with kid luffy so it's normal to look weird. However as soon as the mc starts her adventure, the story goes off and becomes amazing!!! Honestly, if it weren't for the bad beginnings and the fact that female mc is simply not that popular, fanfic would definitely attract a lot of readers. My advice to the author is to rewrite the first chapters and upload the fanfic again completely to enter the monthly rankings, maybe an increase in popularity is what the author needs to motivate himself to write more. It's kind of sad to see such a good fanfic with only 3 or 4 chapters per month.
Personally, I think this is a great read. The pace of the story isn't slow to the point of getting the feeling of being drug out, and it also isn't blowing through everything. It takes the time it has and makes it work. Despite short interactions between characters within the crew, we can still somewhat get a grasp of how they generally feel about their fellow crewmates. The story also glosses over some things, like how exactly Ban and Shinobu were transported from their worlds. It does show some consequences of these characters being introduced into the world of One Piece in comparison to cannon events, small things like Luffy and Ace knowing Sabo's alive. The boys may even have learned a little about haki from what Akane could teach them from what she picked up from Kuma while with the Revolutionaries in the time preceding her departure.. given how much this kind of effect could impact the story you think it would be relevant to mention in some manner. Although.. I get the feeling that some of it is not being revealed for plot purposes, other times omitted details is simply a manner of having been forgotten in favor of going ahead with the story. I'd give this 5 stars, but the current lack of background information leaves me feeling at a loss for what is going on and why they are going where when they do.
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Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii!
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I have oly one thing to say, this fan-fic is really good, keep the good work author!
I don't know about the Update stability, but the book is very good, iit snrefreshing to see good mc(girl). I like her very much and want to see how the story will go, it has very good potential!
Good Novel!! nothing much to say, nothing much to say, nothing much to say, nothing much to say, nothing much to say, nothing much to say, nothing much to say, nothing much to say, nothing much to say, nothing much to say,
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Loving the way it’s going. was sceptical when you added ban to the story, as I wasn’t sure if that would end up wrecking what you had going or not. Have to say that you made it work and I am looking forward to what else you might do
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Not Yuri, YEY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
It is an excellent story, the only thing that would make it better is instead of her having an affair with a man, do it with a woman, yuri would improve the story.
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I love the story it is good but the updaiting stability is no so good I wold like if you wold make more chapter in a week. this maseg is not to afend you I just want more chapter. good luck.
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Very good story and interesting plot, I can't wait to see what will happen in the future and who're going to be her crewmates. It would be interesting if from the portals that keep popping open all around would also come out some villain/monster/pet or that she find some characters from other anime roaming around and doing their thing, it would be hilarious seeing a member of night raid killing celestial dragons or a Midoriya becoming a marine.
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It have a good beginning and the author put a lot of effort on the developing the main character I can't say what will happen in the future but please don't drop it you have my support and I love to read more😃😃😃😃😃
It's soooooo good... This is the first op fanfiction I have seen with a female mc... I love It, I love the characters, the story... Please never drop this 🥺❤️❤️❤️😍😍😍😍
It is a good idea to hold the story for 2 years and then resume it, because in those 2 years one piece story was advancing so fast that can help you gain more insight to write. overall good 5 stars
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I haven’t read that far into it but its great, the story is going at a good pace [img=coins][img=exp][img=fp][img=coins][img=update][img=update][img=exp]
who is the s/o of or adorable mc its hard to tell lol . . . . . . . . . . . . , , , , , , , , , , ,, , , , , , , , , , , s d d d
really like it.......,,,the mc is evil and good at the same time not some selfish and ungratefull mc i've reading for a while.....really recomended[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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I love this fanfic!!! Unfortunately the release schedule is very slow. Posting on fanfictionnet might be a good idea, webnovel is not very suitable for slow release novels like this. It's a very good fanfic, but the beginning is its weak point. Before mc starts sailing the seas the story is kind of bad, sometimes characters like luffy and garp don't seem right which makes sense as we haven't had much screen time in the nime/manga with kid luffy so it's normal to look weird. However as soon as the mc starts her adventure, the story goes off and becomes amazing!!! Honestly, if it weren't for the bad beginnings and the fact that female mc is simply not that popular, fanfic would definitely attract a lot of readers. My advice to the author is to rewrite the first chapters and upload the fanfic again completely to enter the monthly rankings, maybe an increase in popularity is what the author needs to motivate himself to write more. It's kind of sad to see such a good fanfic with only 3 or 4 chapters per month.
Personally, I think this is a great read. The pace of the story isn't slow to the point of getting the feeling of being drug out, and it also isn't blowing through everything. It takes the time it has and makes it work. Despite short interactions between characters within the crew, we can still somewhat get a grasp of how they generally feel about their fellow crewmates. The story also glosses over some things, like how exactly Ban and Shinobu were transported from their worlds. It does show some consequences of these characters being introduced into the world of One Piece in comparison to cannon events, small things like Luffy and Ace knowing Sabo's alive. The boys may even have learned a little about haki from what Akane could teach them from what she picked up from Kuma while with the Revolutionaries in the time preceding her departure.. given how much this kind of effect could impact the story you think it would be relevant to mention in some manner. Although.. I get the feeling that some of it is not being revealed for plot purposes, other times omitted details is simply a manner of having been forgotten in favor of going ahead with the story. I'd give this 5 stars, but the current lack of background information leaves me feeling at a loss for what is going on and why they are going where when they do.
揭示劇透 Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii! Akane is Kawaii!
Good fanfiction, i already love it, oGood fanfiction, i already love it, Good fanfiction, i already love it, Good fanfiction, i already love it, Good fanfiction, i already love it, Good fanfiction, i already love it, Good fanfiction, i already love it, Good fanfiction, i already love it,
I have oly one thing to say, this fan-fic is really good, keep the good work author!
I don't know about the Update stability, but the book is very good, iit snrefreshing to see good mc(girl). I like her very much and want to see how the story will go, it has very good potential!
Good Novel!! nothing much to say, nothing much to say, nothing much to say, nothing much to say, nothing much to say, nothing much to say, nothing much to say, nothing much to say, nothing much to say, nothing much to say,
揭示劇透 Loving the way it’s going. was sceptical when you added ban to the story, as I wasn’t sure if that would end up wrecking what you had going or not. Have to say that you made it work and I am looking forward to what else you might do
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Not Yuri, YEY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
It is an excellent story, the only thing that would make it better is instead of her having an affair with a man, do it with a woman, yuri would improve the story.
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I love the story it is good but the updaiting stability is no so good I wold like if you wold make more chapter in a week. this maseg is not to afend you I just want more chapter. good luck.
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Very good story and interesting plot, I can't wait to see what will happen in the future and who're going to be her crewmates. It would be interesting if from the portals that keep popping open all around would also come out some villain/monster/pet or that she find some characters from other anime roaming around and doing their thing, it would be hilarious seeing a member of night raid killing celestial dragons or a Midoriya becoming a marine.
揭示劇透 It have a good beginning and the author put a lot of effort on the developing the main character I can't say what will happen in the future but please don't drop it you have my support and I love to read more😃😃😃😃😃
It's soooooo good... This is the first op fanfiction I have seen with a female mc... I love It, I love the characters, the story... Please never drop this 🥺❤️❤️❤️😍😍😍😍
It is a good idea to hold the story for 2 years and then resume it, because in those 2 years one piece story was advancing so fast that can help you gain more insight to write. overall good 5 stars