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I hate it because it was so good. I've had to face this lesson on webnovel several times now, but I don't learn. Only read completed novels, people. The pain from a bad now hurts less than a good, incomplete one.
A slow story with an interesting mc. Great world building but the updating stability is meh. Everyone who cares about a good and developed Story should give this piece of work a try.
The story is different from what I usually see and has interesting unexpected plot twists. The addition of the mystery about the mutation inside the MC's body is interesting too. I also like the idea of having wives instead of team members. I feel there is a reason why the author has chosen this route for his story because usually harem novels have dense main characters without an actual story, unlike this story.
I have read this to the harem part. And I dont like it. Maybe beacause I dont like harems, but review's a review. 140 characters I just need-
General Verdict: The story is a good read (Rating: 4.8) Negative points: The first few dozend chapters should be revised - the writing quality is considerably worse than later chapters (which probably makes new readers frustrated). Writing Quality (4*) gets better in later chapters - but expect spelling and or grammar mistakes from time to time. Update Stability (5*), Story Development(5*), Character Design (5*) as well as World Background (5*) is solid (and growing) so all in all the story is quite enjoyable!
I personally have fallen in love with this book. The plot, the visual descriptions, the words used, and the AMAZING characters( and author, of course ) make this book one of the best I’ve ever read, & for that I thank you. The book is perfect in every way! ^^ Wait - did I just take up almost 3 lines writing this? Plus what I’m writing right now is 4 lines - I guess that’s just how much I love this book! - Potato <3 P.S. That part in chapter 88 or 87 where Vincent asks if Kazumi ‘wants popcorn with that’ is gold 👌
So I'm at chapter 81 and I can safely say that the concept behind the story is top notch, but it's written poorly, not the grammar but the characters and their interactions. They feel a bit too 2 dimensional with lacking personality. The harem is way to forced, no girls actually want to share a man irl. And so if you decide on a harem then atleast make it realistic. Otherwise the speech must parents made when defending him was cringe and unrealistic. I doubt anyone would ever speak like that, especially to someone unconscious. The story is written in a childish way and his ability to just create any ability is just lazy writing. To the author, May your skills improve. I wish you the best of luck.
I hate it. the dialouge between characters is rushed and seems very forced. cliché after cliché to boot. plot Armour is massive and the same tricks are used repeatedly.
I don't understand the 5 star reviews. The book is a one trick pony so to speak. Story progression goes basically as follows; Characters cry over trauma, comfort each other, basic survival and travel, desperate fights involving plot armor, weak-willed characters, and the same fight gimmicks such as hammering a weapon in multiple times, stupid mobs, and supposedly "clever" outwits that honestly shouldn't work on anything that thinks things through even just a bit. Rinse and repeat.
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A really well made novel. Even if the story is not the best, it is still up there and the quality is much higher than usual novels you can find everywhere. There are some cheesy lines hwre and there but the story is mostly original. The MC starts as a weakling and it contiunes for a long time but this is mostly because the suitable knowledge and the conditions were not met for MC to train and grow strong.
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All I have to say is that this is amazing. The plot is great and every character is unique. There's never a dull moment or chapter so the author worked hard to make the story interesting and unique. Keep up the great work.
Mind-blowing! Nice writing style and story idea Also a page-turner Every chapter is an addictive drug. It is worth it Thumbs up to the author The book is longgg
The story is so complex I must say. The story is well planned and the author carefully made it into a masterpiece. Even I failed to be compared to the author's imagination. Now, grammar wise, it was superb. I haven't seen too obvious grammar mistakes and kudos for that. Characters are realistic. A hidden gem for me 😍
I thought it was an interesting take on a popular niche. I haven't finished the story yet but it looks promising. There's a lot to take in at the start but the author gradually builds the worlds and characters up. Good job author!
Great story so far. Well designed characters that grow up as they experience new things and different situations. I suggest anyone giving this a try and see for themselves. The story felt a bit slow at first, but I think I can understand why the author decided to make the first parts noticeable from the MC's perspective rather than he did this, than that, then they banged.
Don't stop writing, you can do it. Don't stop expressing, or you'll dull the skill. Don't stop improving, writer fever makes us ill. Don't stop having fun, story must be told and seen.
I hope readers of this story enjoy the journey as I do while constantly evolving the story based on the character's personalities. Something about this story. Harem tag is more like teammates rather than the eye candy type, and this tag will make sense later in the story. Romance tag is to show the interaction with the characters rather than "Hi." and "You're in." If you have any questions that aren't considered spoilers, I will try to answer them. Thank you, and have a great day.
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The synopsis sounds interesting keep it up!!!! ill be reading once it hits 100 chapters or 50 ................The synopsis sounds interesting keep it up!!!! ill be reading once it hits 100 chapters or 50
I'm just trying to figure out if the authors all right. I loved the story while he was releasing chapters and an hoping he starts again at some point.
I hate it because it was so good. I've had to face this lesson on webnovel several times now, but I don't learn. Only read completed novels, people. The pain from a bad now hurts less than a good, incomplete one.
A slow story with an interesting mc. Great world building but the updating stability is meh. Everyone who cares about a good and developed Story should give this piece of work a try.
The story is different from what I usually see and has interesting unexpected plot twists. The addition of the mystery about the mutation inside the MC's body is interesting too. I also like the idea of having wives instead of team members. I feel there is a reason why the author has chosen this route for his story because usually harem novels have dense main characters without an actual story, unlike this story.
I have read this to the harem part. And I dont like it. Maybe beacause I dont like harems, but review's a review. 140 characters I just need-
General Verdict: The story is a good read (Rating: 4.8) Negative points: The first few dozend chapters should be revised - the writing quality is considerably worse than later chapters (which probably makes new readers frustrated). Writing Quality (4*) gets better in later chapters - but expect spelling and or grammar mistakes from time to time. Update Stability (5*), Story Development(5*), Character Design (5*) as well as World Background (5*) is solid (and growing) so all in all the story is quite enjoyable!
I personally have fallen in love with this book. The plot, the visual descriptions, the words used, and the AMAZING characters( and author, of course ) make this book one of the best I’ve ever read, & for that I thank you. The book is perfect in every way! ^^ Wait - did I just take up almost 3 lines writing this? Plus what I’m writing right now is 4 lines - I guess that’s just how much I love this book! - Potato <3 P.S. That part in chapter 88 or 87 where Vincent asks if Kazumi ‘wants popcorn with that’ is gold 👌
So I'm at chapter 81 and I can safely say that the concept behind the story is top notch, but it's written poorly, not the grammar but the characters and their interactions. They feel a bit too 2 dimensional with lacking personality. The harem is way to forced, no girls actually want to share a man irl. And so if you decide on a harem then atleast make it realistic. Otherwise the speech must parents made when defending him was cringe and unrealistic. I doubt anyone would ever speak like that, especially to someone unconscious. The story is written in a childish way and his ability to just create any ability is just lazy writing. To the author, May your skills improve. I wish you the best of luck.
I hate it. the dialouge between characters is rushed and seems very forced. cliché after cliché to boot. plot Armour is massive and the same tricks are used repeatedly.
I don't understand the 5 star reviews. The book is a one trick pony so to speak. Story progression goes basically as follows; Characters cry over trauma, comfort each other, basic survival and travel, desperate fights involving plot armor, weak-willed characters, and the same fight gimmicks such as hammering a weapon in multiple times, stupid mobs, and supposedly "clever" outwits that honestly shouldn't work on anything that thinks things through even just a bit. Rinse and repeat.
揭示劇透 A really well made novel. Even if the story is not the best, it is still up there and the quality is much higher than usual novels you can find everywhere. There are some cheesy lines hwre and there but the story is mostly original. The MC starts as a weakling and it contiunes for a long time but this is mostly because the suitable knowledge and the conditions were not met for MC to train and grow strong.
揭示劇透 All I have to say is that this is amazing. The plot is great and every character is unique. There's never a dull moment or chapter so the author worked hard to make the story interesting and unique. Keep up the great work.
Mind-blowing! Nice writing style and story idea Also a page-turner Every chapter is an addictive drug. It is worth it Thumbs up to the author The book is longgg
The story is so complex I must say. The story is well planned and the author carefully made it into a masterpiece. Even I failed to be compared to the author's imagination. Now, grammar wise, it was superb. I haven't seen too obvious grammar mistakes and kudos for that. Characters are realistic. A hidden gem for me 😍
I thought it was an interesting take on a popular niche. I haven't finished the story yet but it looks promising. There's a lot to take in at the start but the author gradually builds the worlds and characters up. Good job author!
Great story so far. Well designed characters that grow up as they experience new things and different situations. I suggest anyone giving this a try and see for themselves. The story felt a bit slow at first, but I think I can understand why the author decided to make the first parts noticeable from the MC's perspective rather than he did this, than that, then they banged.
Don't stop writing, you can do it. Don't stop expressing, or you'll dull the skill. Don't stop improving, writer fever makes us ill. Don't stop having fun, story must be told and seen.
I hope readers of this story enjoy the journey as I do while constantly evolving the story based on the character's personalities. Something about this story. Harem tag is more like teammates rather than the eye candy type, and this tag will make sense later in the story. Romance tag is to show the interaction with the characters rather than "Hi." and "You're in." If you have any questions that aren't considered spoilers, I will try to answer them. Thank you, and have a great day.
Is this a huge harem? Is this a huge harem? Is this a huge harem? Is this a huge harem? Is this a huge harem? Is this a huge harem? Is this a huge harem? Is this a huge harem?
Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem
The synopsis sounds interesting keep it up!!!! ill be reading once it hits 100 chapters or 50 ................The synopsis sounds interesting keep it up!!!! ill be reading once it hits 100 chapters or 50
I'm just trying to figure out if the authors all right. I loved the story while he was releasing chapters and an hoping he starts again at some point.