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im re reading this its really good i like it im just wondring when are u going to counune this or are u done. when will u make more chapters......................................................
Hello, I would like to talk to you about your book. Can you please contact me via Instagram. I am there as @penetratingoutlook
dude, rwby arc is too long. also, mc lack of character development even after 300 chapter. it feel like rwby arc is a filler arc (naruto term)
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this is a cool story with smutt.I like that theygo into the dangerbeast like never before and it makes one think that Akame ga kill verse has a lot of potensial.
i just started reading this and its pretty interesting. I like it? also what other worlds will he travel 2. also do u have any idea where he will he go after rwby world
The book is really good with a good story. The detailed explanation of the words are fantastic and the power ups Parc gets are spot on. The release on chapters is very little though
Great story, some typos but they are getting fixed. Seen some problems with mobile app version that is the fault of Webnovel. Author has been doing his best to tell an amazing story.
I don't have much ti say i love this story ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
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Can someone have some pity and spoil the current/future harem members for me, fellow gentlemen? Need to write some more to be able to post...
this is very good ...................................................................................................................................................
Please Author, can I have the link to the picture/Art please 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺
I think the story is amazing and very interesting. It has been a very fun read so far and I can't wait to read more. I would recommend to others, but this is just my opinion. Also have a great day everyone.
https://youtu.be/gKVwYoNYp2g https://youtu.be/hu46pxr-OM0 https://youtu.be/JY9sC9gcUPE https://youtu.be/0gTqgLoXRlc https://youtu.be/Q4OCSNP5nVM https://youtu.be/dxNXpISsCyQ https://youtu.be/1crYIqCO5Hc https://youtu.be/m6y3PRPmq0s https://youtu.be/ZxoKUVBUfCQ https://youtu.be/602fFZur8fU https://youtu.be/VtX_9bAFIyA https://youtu.be/4HlN4FPdi2w https://youtu.be/KrnHlCvlL3E https://youtu.be/jm5cRtcnlS4 https://youtu.be/EtjsIz0ocUU https://youtu.be/3Yuar0DZ8sM https://youtu.be/ygbGgBeGpOk https://youtu.be/ghU6PbZzfSI https://youtu.be/ghU6PbZzfSI https://youtu.be/JK3D0FCrDpA https://youtu.be/hyMPdcPh8yk https://youtu.be/hDMXOSFixHc https://youtu.be/lw4oNXCYznM https://youtu.be/9bDNEuoejsc
I'm still really lost and kind of disappointed with transition between worlds. There was not any exploration of Terrarium not actual conclusion with girls, like settling in to terrarium. Basically it feel like everything that happened was just brushed to the side and forgotten. I mean after he left the akame world, there has not been any thought or word spared to what has happened and mc's relationships. There isn't even any explanation what happened to them, can mc bring them to RWBY? Are they still cards? Are they living in terrarium? Does time actually move for them when he's in RWBY and is akame world in stasis when he's not there? It's kind of important things to know, and it's not even part of some mystery being built up, this is just not telling basic things to a reader. Especially considering we just ended "book 1" some conclusion and explanation would have been nice -.- Otherwise really nice fiction, it's just felt like author reset their brain at when Akame ga Kill was finished and forgot about all the chapters before.
Voy por el capitulo 68 y quiero decir que me encanta la serie como va y debo decir que lo que dijiste de que si por casualidad la gente se pasaba con criticas estúpidas lo veo bien, por lo menos eres un autor que lo ve por el lado constructivo, me gusta mucho eso
Very enjoyable , looking forward to more ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Ok, so I read a lot of books and fanfics, and I really mean a lot. But even so this fanfic remains one of my favourite ones. It's just so dynamic, and the characters are actually really well thought, something that the majority of modern fanfics lack. I can confidently say that this is in my top 10 favourite novels, and I don't really understnad why it has such a low rank on webnovel... I hope it gets more mainstream as it is a really good pass-time. By the way, thanks for making a nice Akame ga kill part, these are even rarer than a non-generic and decent chinese mc.
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its's been two years since an update has dropped making me wonder when this story shall ever be finished.
im re reading this its really good i like it im just wondring when are u going to counune this or are u done. when will u make more chapters......................................................
Hello, I would like to talk to you about your book. Can you please contact me via Instagram. I am there as @penetratingoutlook
dude, rwby arc is too long. also, mc lack of character development even after 300 chapter. it feel like rwby arc is a filler arc (naruto term)
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this is a cool story with smutt.I like that theygo into the dangerbeast like never before and it makes one think that Akame ga kill verse has a lot of potensial.
i just started reading this and its pretty interesting. I like it? also what other worlds will he travel 2. also do u have any idea where he will he go after rwby world
The book is really good with a good story. The detailed explanation of the words are fantastic and the power ups Parc gets are spot on. The release on chapters is very little though
Great story, some typos but they are getting fixed. Seen some problems with mobile app version that is the fault of Webnovel. Author has been doing his best to tell an amazing story.
I don't have much ti say i love this story ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
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Can someone have some pity and spoil the current/future harem members for me, fellow gentlemen? Need to write some more to be able to post...
this is very good ...................................................................................................................................................
Please Author, can I have the link to the picture/Art please 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺
I think the story is amazing and very interesting. It has been a very fun read so far and I can't wait to read more. I would recommend to others, but this is just my opinion. Also have a great day everyone.
https://youtu.be/gKVwYoNYp2g https://youtu.be/hu46pxr-OM0 https://youtu.be/JY9sC9gcUPE https://youtu.be/0gTqgLoXRlc https://youtu.be/Q4OCSNP5nVM https://youtu.be/dxNXpISsCyQ https://youtu.be/1crYIqCO5Hc https://youtu.be/m6y3PRPmq0s https://youtu.be/ZxoKUVBUfCQ https://youtu.be/602fFZur8fU https://youtu.be/VtX_9bAFIyA https://youtu.be/4HlN4FPdi2w https://youtu.be/KrnHlCvlL3E https://youtu.be/jm5cRtcnlS4 https://youtu.be/EtjsIz0ocUU https://youtu.be/3Yuar0DZ8sM https://youtu.be/ygbGgBeGpOk https://youtu.be/ghU6PbZzfSI https://youtu.be/ghU6PbZzfSI https://youtu.be/JK3D0FCrDpA https://youtu.be/hyMPdcPh8yk https://youtu.be/hDMXOSFixHc https://youtu.be/lw4oNXCYznM https://youtu.be/9bDNEuoejsc
I'm still really lost and kind of disappointed with transition between worlds. There was not any exploration of Terrarium not actual conclusion with girls, like settling in to terrarium. Basically it feel like everything that happened was just brushed to the side and forgotten. I mean after he left the akame world, there has not been any thought or word spared to what has happened and mc's relationships. There isn't even any explanation what happened to them, can mc bring them to RWBY? Are they still cards? Are they living in terrarium? Does time actually move for them when he's in RWBY and is akame world in stasis when he's not there? It's kind of important things to know, and it's not even part of some mystery being built up, this is just not telling basic things to a reader. Especially considering we just ended "book 1" some conclusion and explanation would have been nice -.- Otherwise really nice fiction, it's just felt like author reset their brain at when Akame ga Kill was finished and forgot about all the chapters before.
Voy por el capitulo 68 y quiero decir que me encanta la serie como va y debo decir que lo que dijiste de que si por casualidad la gente se pasaba con criticas estúpidas lo veo bien, por lo menos eres un autor que lo ve por el lado constructivo, me gusta mucho eso
Very enjoyable , looking forward to more ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Ok, so I read a lot of books and fanfics, and I really mean a lot. But even so this fanfic remains one of my favourite ones. It's just so dynamic, and the characters are actually really well thought, something that the majority of modern fanfics lack. I can confidently say that this is in my top 10 favourite novels, and I don't really understnad why it has such a low rank on webnovel... I hope it gets more mainstream as it is a really good pass-time. By the way, thanks for making a nice Akame ga kill part, these are even rarer than a non-generic and decent chinese mc.
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its's been two years since an update has dropped making me wonder when this story shall ever be finished.