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Beta MC .. .. Hmm. .. Still beta MC. ... .. Naive MC. .. .. .. .hmmm. .. .really naive beta MC. .. .. Hmmm. .. .. I guess author is beta and naive too? ?? ?
The romance is forced and they love each other at 4 years of age. You forget about the system forever. He’s weak. 20 chapters and there is no increase in abilities.
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The only good thing about this story is the number of chapters, the chapters are short though. The system went on a vacation right after reincarnation. His house is a duke house, yet everyone aside from the MC is tr*sh, the dude got poison and no one notice, where the fcking doctor? The guy the poison him is dumb, but apparently the Duke house is dumber....After he recover, they got him train in order to rehabilitate, next chapter he got train till he faint from exhaustion, look like the word "rehabilitate" got a different meaning there. Also the reason his house survive again ambush is because MC help fight against them and pass out again. After capture their assailant instead of interrogate right away, they wait for the MC to regain consciousness to join them, did I mention that the MC is 4 yo? 4years old!!!! The dad was super proud of him for wanting to fight assassin instead of feeling ashamed of how useless him and his house is, they're a fcking duke house not duck house, how the fck did they survive till now? And don't give me that cr*p about don't read if I don't like it, the review session is here for a reason so that new readers know what to be expected.
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The only reason I gave this story 3* is not to get the review deleted. This story does not even deserve 1*. The dialogue is so fake that it makes you curse the author. Logic in the story is non existent. For example Mc is crying for leaving his family and next chapter is speaking how happy he is with harem. Killer breaks his cover not wanting to eat poison and next sentence kills himself by taking poison and more examples like that. The style of writing is like a primary school kid. Grammar sucks, a lot of mistakes in sentences. World is the same like in the anime and there is nothing new. So to make it clear this story sucks and I would not recommend anyone to read it even for leisure as God is my witness I tried but just managed to get to chapter 5 or 6.
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the quality of writing looks a little rushed but still understandable to read and for that i am grateful to you for creating such a wonderful novel. the idea was an interesting choice but none the less amazing in my eyes.
Alright ima say two things: First: this is one of the very few novel that don't get me bored on the first 5 chapters, has good writing quality, interesting plot, and you somehow know what to do with it unlike the other authors that mess up any multiverse traveling novel they write, so it's excellent in all ways, and i hope you come back to continue it. Second: i need to be harsh on this one, but it's for your own good, listen you weak-willed fvcking piece of of sh1t, if you think life is all fun and rainbows, and expect people to throw praises at you all the time and never meet any of those annoying pricks that like to make other people's life hell, then you don't even deserve to breath the same air as us, you disgust me, people like you who give up on the slightest hardships are nothing but trash, grow yourself a backbone and stand up for yourself for fvck's sake! Tell those people who bad mouth you and your novel without reasons to fvck off! You think all those people who their novels, their social standing, and all the success they made are just given on a silver plate?! Grow up! The world is harsher than you think it is. Now that I'm done, i will have to say sorry, I'm not really skilled at encouraging someone, but i can give a somewhat good scolding to people, it mostly gets them to man up, so i guess it's kind of the same? Tehe~ 😇😄
I'm not gonna lie to you, this is bad. Like really, REALLY bad on most accounts. I'd write a list of what's wrong with it, but that would be putting in more effort than author did (when he wasn't having hysterical all-caps fits of how "meaniepoo everyone is to him" and blackmailing peeps into stroking his ego with stones and good reviews or he'll drop the novel).
I love your work dont quit because of uncultured and jelous people keep up the good work.
i just started 2 day ago, i like the way you introduce your character and the way the character communicates, the way plot progress and the whay information was given. well idk what next to say but i'll be staying till this fic finished (っ'-')╮=͟͟͞͞💌 (づ￣ ³￣)づ (≚ᄌ≚)ℒℴѵℯ❤
I was enjoying the storyline. Who knew that you could actually change the stories just enough to make it interesting again, to bad there were so many trolls.
Great novel...................................👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍..................................................................
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Beta MC .. .. Hmm. .. Still beta MC. ... .. Naive MC. .. .. .. .hmmm. .. .really naive beta MC. .. .. Hmmm. .. .. I guess author is beta and naive too? ?? ?
The romance is forced and they love each other at 4 years of age. You forget about the system forever. He’s weak. 20 chapters and there is no increase in abilities.
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The only good thing about this story is the number of chapters, the chapters are short though. The system went on a vacation right after reincarnation. His house is a duke house, yet everyone aside from the MC is tr*sh, the dude got poison and no one notice, where the fcking doctor? The guy the poison him is dumb, but apparently the Duke house is dumber....After he recover, they got him train in order to rehabilitate, next chapter he got train till he faint from exhaustion, look like the word "rehabilitate" got a different meaning there. Also the reason his house survive again ambush is because MC help fight against them and pass out again. After capture their assailant instead of interrogate right away, they wait for the MC to regain consciousness to join them, did I mention that the MC is 4 yo? 4years old!!!! The dad was super proud of him for wanting to fight assassin instead of feeling ashamed of how useless him and his house is, they're a fcking duke house not duck house, how the fck did they survive till now? And don't give me that cr*p about don't read if I don't like it, the review session is here for a reason so that new readers know what to be expected.
揭示劇透 The only reason I gave this story 3* is not to get the review deleted. This story does not even deserve 1*. The dialogue is so fake that it makes you curse the author. Logic in the story is non existent. For example Mc is crying for leaving his family and next chapter is speaking how happy he is with harem. Killer breaks his cover not wanting to eat poison and next sentence kills himself by taking poison and more examples like that. The style of writing is like a primary school kid. Grammar sucks, a lot of mistakes in sentences. World is the same like in the anime and there is nothing new. So to make it clear this story sucks and I would not recommend anyone to read it even for leisure as God is my witness I tried but just managed to get to chapter 5 or 6.
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the quality of writing looks a little rushed but still understandable to read and for that i am grateful to you for creating such a wonderful novel. the idea was an interesting choice but none the less amazing in my eyes.
Alright ima say two things: First: this is one of the very few novel that don't get me bored on the first 5 chapters, has good writing quality, interesting plot, and you somehow know what to do with it unlike the other authors that mess up any multiverse traveling novel they write, so it's excellent in all ways, and i hope you come back to continue it. Second: i need to be harsh on this one, but it's for your own good, listen you weak-willed fvcking piece of of sh1t, if you think life is all fun and rainbows, and expect people to throw praises at you all the time and never meet any of those annoying pricks that like to make other people's life hell, then you don't even deserve to breath the same air as us, you disgust me, people like you who give up on the slightest hardships are nothing but trash, grow yourself a backbone and stand up for yourself for fvck's sake! Tell those people who bad mouth you and your novel without reasons to fvck off! You think all those people who their novels, their social standing, and all the success they made are just given on a silver plate?! Grow up! The world is harsher than you think it is. Now that I'm done, i will have to say sorry, I'm not really skilled at encouraging someone, but i can give a somewhat good scolding to people, it mostly gets them to man up, so i guess it's kind of the same? Tehe~ 😇😄
I'm not gonna lie to you, this is bad. Like really, REALLY bad on most accounts. I'd write a list of what's wrong with it, but that would be putting in more effort than author did (when he wasn't having hysterical all-caps fits of how "meaniepoo everyone is to him" and blackmailing peeps into stroking his ego with stones and good reviews or he'll drop the novel).
I love your work dont quit because of uncultured and jelous people keep up the good work.
i just started 2 day ago, i like the way you introduce your character and the way the character communicates, the way plot progress and the whay information was given. well idk what next to say but i'll be staying till this fic finished (っ'-')╮=͟͟͞͞💌 (づ￣ ³￣)づ (≚ᄌ≚)ℒℴѵℯ❤
I was enjoying the storyline. Who knew that you could actually change the stories just enough to make it interesting again, to bad there were so many trolls.
Great novel...................................👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍..................................................................
Love it keep it going, never drop plz. ❤💚💙💜💛❤💛💚💜💙💛❤💚💜💚💙💛❤💜💚💛💙💜❤💛💚💜💙❤💛💚💜💙❤💛💚💜💙❤💛💚💜💙❤💛💚💜💙❤💛💚💜💙💛❤💜💚💙💛❤💜💚💙💛
boring... I mean literally,................