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Sad that the story is dead. It was actually a very good story that I enjoyed when it had still been updated back on RR. Writing: Good Stability of updates: It was stable Story: really interesting Character: Loved it World Background: Yeah, interesting
so this is dropped right?? so this is dropped right?? so this is dropped right?? so this is dropped right?? so this is dropped right?? so this is dropped right??
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Probably the only good novel out there featuring (proper) arcane magic. I'm yet to read another one that manages to express the meaning of the arcane so clearly - as the origin/foundation of all magic (and not just some of it as other stories try to portray it)
I really enjoyed this story, been waiting for chapter 194 on royal road for a really long time though. I hope you come back to this story eventually.
This novel is amazing with an amazing quality, amazing story, and it just hooks you in with the different characters and magic involved so yeah 10/10
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I really love this novel so you guys should give it a try .I wonder when will there be a next update????? And the mc needs more harem members that what I think
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what a great promising novel... storyline great.... cant wait for another new chapter.............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................GOOD
man this is such a good novel that leaving a negative review seems like blasphemy, unfortunately though I've been feeling quite frustrated about this for a while now, so much so that I had to stop reading it several times already, something that rarely happens to me. First of all, the story is very good, that said, it's almost completely ruined by the mc's character. By that I mean that, while it's fine being kind and overprotective, being so kind that he's making everyone else stronger at his own expenses with them contributing next to nothing, is no different from being stupid. And that's exactly what he's doing, not to mention his overall stupid choices but we'll get to that later. In short what happens in this novel is him getting several friends and carrying them the whole way so much so that to make them stronger he's wasting most of his training time, while they, obviously weaker and not adept at anything of any real use to him, demand him to make them stronger (because that's what's happening, excluding Gunthar, I love that guy) and he agrees, going above and beyond even wasting rewards from advancements and repayment from talvara (this one was seriously ridiculous). Not to mention the fact that he's got such an overpowered class and he's still weak as **** because he's too focused making everyone stronger without thinking about ways to fix his glaringly obvious weaknesses, this also caused by his apparent lack of both ambition and reason. He is fully aware of his weak body, to the point that without that ridiculous overcoat he would have died ten thousand times over, thus him blatantly basing his every chance of survival on external help and not even considering a warrior type subclass (this after acknowledging at the beginning to this not being a game and that maximizing a single class type would have been stupid), and even with that stupidly overpowered coat he almost got killed by someone on a slightly higher level who managed to get close to him, saving himself purely through luck and help from kara who can amazingly still help in such a situation (mostly because of the element of surprise of course), not to re-mention the fact that with that body he's completely unable to satisfy Kara who's barely getting half a **** each time (man seriously it's like getting interrupted in the middle of it I can't even imagine the frustration that girl is feeling). And that's not even the worst of his weaknesses, HIS MANA for ****'s sake, he's barely stronger than someone at the same level as him with somewhat rarer classes despite being able to do so much because he barely has a ****stain worth of mana and he's not even trying to find a solution fully knowing there are ways to do so, he's even got his sister and a fire touched as a reference, even aware of the downsides if he doesn't try to search a way he'll never find one goddamnit, he's even started to rely on one time use pre-prepared spells to fix his physical and mana weaknesses... it's pathetic man. Now the last thing.... the girls are so fucking overpowered that they are way stronger than he was before reaching the second rank (luna apparently included judging by how things are going), and he's helping them get even stronger, the moment kara breaks through she'll basically be stronger than him seeing how she can still strangely contribute to his fights, sarah's talent and power are litterally unlimited even if she doesn't break through, luna has a flame strong enough to burn litterally anything and none of their classes comes even close to the arcanist or archon one, AND YET he's trash... and they are too since without him they would be nothing, despite it being so, however, they still feel no shame in wasting his time, slow his progress, just to make them stronger, and kara even told him not to waste time on improving his close combat ability, ergo close quarters survivability (in a world that is not a game, with a class that would allow him to do so without too much trouble). I'm sorry man, I feel guilty for what I said 'cause it's a really good novel, but this is a failure in character design, even overlooking his hypocrisy, I've only reached chapter 86 so I don't know if it will keep being so stupid. I don't think I'll be reading it for a while, the part of the void will has seriously broken me man, I was trembling in outrage. If you read this author know that it's a really well made novel and I don't mean to offend, also if anything I said gets fixed in the near future and you feel like telling me I'll keep reading immediately and eventually change my feedback.
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Loved it cant say anything else much. I usually dont like world traveling mc (who can travel worlds at will) but rhis story did it remarkably well so no complaints. .........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
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Or you can go to Royal Road (the original site that this was uploaded to) and read up to chapter 193 for free. Dont get me wrong i love the novel. Very creative and well written. I just hope this wont be locked behind a paywall in the future.
I can't say how happy I am this is on Webnovel, you're one of my greatest inspirations. Because you and this novel convinced me to take the dive and start writing my own stories, though I doubt I've reached your level, I'm still grateful for this. Thanks for being such a great writer and being behind the push for me to better myself and share the craziness that's slumbers in my imagination.
Grossly underestimated, understated, and over looked book. Yeah the first few chapters are a bit slow and cheesy but the more you read the more it’s worth sticking around. The best thing about this book is that the chapters are ACTUALLY chapters🙃🙃🙃 Not some short 2 paragraphs chapters, and that it has game elements as well as incorporation of our planet Earth and there world/plane. Another awesome thing about this book is the fact the it’s not grossly raunchy with its female main, side, and background characters, on top of the fact that he may have a group of females around but they’re honestly not all lovers, except 2, and the rest are not sexualize and portrayed as those stupid stereotypical annoying, bimbo, dumb females you see/read in other novels and mangas/manwahs plus having well incorporated male side characters . This novel has honestly a good chance being adapted into a manwah/webtoon/comic.
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Solid work of fiction so far. Read the reviews on RR if interested for more. Solid work of fiction so far. Read the reviews on RR if interested for more. Solid work of fiction so far. Read the reviews on RR if interested for more. Solid work of fiction so far. Read the reviews on RR if interested for more.
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Followed this book for a long time, all time favorite novel here. I used to wake up in the morning and go to work every day just waiting for the moment of its next release. I reread it at least half a dozen times. Rainer and Aternus... I'm looking forward to your adventure!!!!
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I really enjoyed this book when I first read part of it on royal road. I think this deserving of alot of attention and this book will probably get alot of attention.. ........................................................ . . ......... ...................... ... ..... Bbbbbbbbbbb. Bbbbbbbbbbbbbbvvbvvvvvv"vvvvvvvvv
This story is very engaging with good fantasy elements and world building. The harem element is not too exaggerated like is common in the genre and provides actual personality to the characters. I recommend giving this a read and to expect great things to come as there is already over 100 chapters on royalroad and i hope this helps the author and fans to keep going with the story.
helloooooooo. Author are you still around . It's been 3yrs since your last debut. were is the promised chapter 194. faithful readers are still waiting
Sad that the story is dead. It was actually a very good story that I enjoyed when it had still been updated back on RR. Writing: Good Stability of updates: It was stable Story: really interesting Character: Loved it World Background: Yeah, interesting
so this is dropped right?? so this is dropped right?? so this is dropped right?? so this is dropped right?? so this is dropped right?? so this is dropped right??
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Probably the only good novel out there featuring (proper) arcane magic. I'm yet to read another one that manages to express the meaning of the arcane so clearly - as the origin/foundation of all magic (and not just some of it as other stories try to portray it)
I really enjoyed this story, been waiting for chapter 194 on royal road for a really long time though. I hope you come back to this story eventually.
This novel is amazing with an amazing quality, amazing story, and it just hooks you in with the different characters and magic involved so yeah 10/10
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I really love this novel so you guys should give it a try .I wonder when will there be a next update????? And the mc needs more harem members that what I think
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what a great promising novel... storyline great.... cant wait for another new chapter.............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................GOOD
man this is such a good novel that leaving a negative review seems like blasphemy, unfortunately though I've been feeling quite frustrated about this for a while now, so much so that I had to stop reading it several times already, something that rarely happens to me. First of all, the story is very good, that said, it's almost completely ruined by the mc's character. By that I mean that, while it's fine being kind and overprotective, being so kind that he's making everyone else stronger at his own expenses with them contributing next to nothing, is no different from being stupid. And that's exactly what he's doing, not to mention his overall stupid choices but we'll get to that later. In short what happens in this novel is him getting several friends and carrying them the whole way so much so that to make them stronger he's wasting most of his training time, while they, obviously weaker and not adept at anything of any real use to him, demand him to make them stronger (because that's what's happening, excluding Gunthar, I love that guy) and he agrees, going above and beyond even wasting rewards from advancements and repayment from talvara (this one was seriously ridiculous). Not to mention the fact that he's got such an overpowered class and he's still weak as **** because he's too focused making everyone stronger without thinking about ways to fix his glaringly obvious weaknesses, this also caused by his apparent lack of both ambition and reason. He is fully aware of his weak body, to the point that without that ridiculous overcoat he would have died ten thousand times over, thus him blatantly basing his every chance of survival on external help and not even considering a warrior type subclass (this after acknowledging at the beginning to this not being a game and that maximizing a single class type would have been stupid), and even with that stupidly overpowered coat he almost got killed by someone on a slightly higher level who managed to get close to him, saving himself purely through luck and help from kara who can amazingly still help in such a situation (mostly because of the element of surprise of course), not to re-mention the fact that with that body he's completely unable to satisfy Kara who's barely getting half a **** each time (man seriously it's like getting interrupted in the middle of it I can't even imagine the frustration that girl is feeling). And that's not even the worst of his weaknesses, HIS MANA for ****'s sake, he's barely stronger than someone at the same level as him with somewhat rarer classes despite being able to do so much because he barely has a ****stain worth of mana and he's not even trying to find a solution fully knowing there are ways to do so, he's even got his sister and a fire touched as a reference, even aware of the downsides if he doesn't try to search a way he'll never find one goddamnit, he's even started to rely on one time use pre-prepared spells to fix his physical and mana weaknesses... it's pathetic man. Now the last thing.... the girls are so fucking overpowered that they are way stronger than he was before reaching the second rank (luna apparently included judging by how things are going), and he's helping them get even stronger, the moment kara breaks through she'll basically be stronger than him seeing how she can still strangely contribute to his fights, sarah's talent and power are litterally unlimited even if she doesn't break through, luna has a flame strong enough to burn litterally anything and none of their classes comes even close to the arcanist or archon one, AND YET he's trash... and they are too since without him they would be nothing, despite it being so, however, they still feel no shame in wasting his time, slow his progress, just to make them stronger, and kara even told him not to waste time on improving his close combat ability, ergo close quarters survivability (in a world that is not a game, with a class that would allow him to do so without too much trouble). I'm sorry man, I feel guilty for what I said 'cause it's a really good novel, but this is a failure in character design, even overlooking his hypocrisy, I've only reached chapter 86 so I don't know if it will keep being so stupid. I don't think I'll be reading it for a while, the part of the void will has seriously broken me man, I was trembling in outrage. If you read this author know that it's a really well made novel and I don't mean to offend, also if anything I said gets fixed in the near future and you feel like telling me I'll keep reading immediately and eventually change my feedback.
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Loved it cant say anything else much. I usually dont like world traveling mc (who can travel worlds at will) but rhis story did it remarkably well so no complaints. .........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
揭示劇透 Or you can go to Royal Road (the original site that this was uploaded to) and read up to chapter 193 for free. Dont get me wrong i love the novel. Very creative and well written. I just hope this wont be locked behind a paywall in the future.
I can't say how happy I am this is on Webnovel, you're one of my greatest inspirations. Because you and this novel convinced me to take the dive and start writing my own stories, though I doubt I've reached your level, I'm still grateful for this. Thanks for being such a great writer and being behind the push for me to better myself and share the craziness that's slumbers in my imagination.
Grossly underestimated, understated, and over looked book. Yeah the first few chapters are a bit slow and cheesy but the more you read the more it’s worth sticking around. The best thing about this book is that the chapters are ACTUALLY chapters🙃🙃🙃 Not some short 2 paragraphs chapters, and that it has game elements as well as incorporation of our planet Earth and there world/plane. Another awesome thing about this book is the fact the it’s not grossly raunchy with its female main, side, and background characters, on top of the fact that he may have a group of females around but they’re honestly not all lovers, except 2, and the rest are not sexualize and portrayed as those stupid stereotypical annoying, bimbo, dumb females you see/read in other novels and mangas/manwahs plus having well incorporated male side characters . This novel has honestly a good chance being adapted into a manwah/webtoon/comic.
I like it but didn't you quit writing this novel? 140 characters yadayadayadayadayadayadayadayadayadayadayadayadayadayadayadayadayadayadayada
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Solid work of fiction so far. Read the reviews on RR if interested for more. Solid work of fiction so far. Read the reviews on RR if interested for more. Solid work of fiction so far. Read the reviews on RR if interested for more. Solid work of fiction so far. Read the reviews on RR if interested for more.
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Great story so far 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
Followed this book for a long time, all time favorite novel here. I used to wake up in the morning and go to work every day just waiting for the moment of its next release. I reread it at least half a dozen times. Rainer and Aternus... I'm looking forward to your adventure!!!!
Thank u so much for coming to webnovel hope u keep posting love your book, 💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚💚
I really enjoyed this book when I first read part of it on royal road. I think this deserving of alot of attention and this book will probably get alot of attention.. ........................................................ . . ......... ...................... ... ..... Bbbbbbbbbbb. Bbbbbbbbbbbbbbvvbvvvvvv"vvvvvvvvv
This story is very engaging with good fantasy elements and world building. The harem element is not too exaggerated like is common in the genre and provides actual personality to the characters. I recommend giving this a read and to expect great things to come as there is already over 100 chapters on royalroad and i hope this helps the author and fans to keep going with the story.
helloooooooo. Author are you still around . It's been 3yrs since your last debut. were is the promised chapter 194. faithful readers are still waiting