下載應用程式
8.33% The Rise of a Warrior: Naruto / Chapter 2: 2/2

章節 2: 2/2

"Exactly. Here, let me demonstrate." he turned towards a tree "Watch closely, after the first two steps of training you get this." he held out his hand, formed a Rasengan, and shot it into the tree, leaving a large spiral mark "Then, once you've mastered the third step, you'll get something like this." he formed another Rasengan, only this time it grinded against the tree and left a hole in it bigger than Tatsu's head "If you can keep that small typhoon the size of your palm then the energy won't be able to disperse, it'll spin faster and faster and it's power will be more and more compressed and its destructive power will reach its max."

'Well, I'll give it a shot.' he focused on the balloon and generated his chakra 'Okay, this feels about right.' he rotated it a bunch of different ways 'Now keep it going Tatsu, keep it going, keep it going, almost got it, almost got it…' then it popped "Well f*ck."

"No cutting corners on this one, get your power and rotation to 100% and then maintain them."

'This is insane, unless I can control my power perfectly it's impossible. I see now, this third step is on a whole other level from the others.'

"I told you before, this technique is A-rank for a reason, a highly advanced ninjutsu."

"Let me give it another shot." Tatsu formed another Rasengan with both hands and slammed it into a tree, but found that it would only leave the spiral mark "Dammit!"

"Good for only your second try, but this is as complex as it is for a reason. Just give it time, you'll get it. Well, gonna screw with the others some more. Later." and he disappeared in a puff of smoke.

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

5 days passed.

Tatsu looked at the whole in the boulder before him 'Finally, I've got it!'

"Looks like you've made some progress."

Tatsu looked and saw Kakashi behind him "Kakashi."

"Mind showing me?"

"Sure, but first, Shadow Clone Jutsu!" he summoned a Shadow Clone.

"Shadow Clones? Alright, I admit I'm curious. Go on."

"Right." he had the clone rotating chakra in his right hand with both of the clone's hands.

'So that's it. He made the clone to gather up his chakra. Ingenious.'

'Compress the chakra… keep it going… focus… Rasengan!" Tatsu let the clone disappear and slammed it into the boulder in front of him, obliterating it "There…" he let out a heavy and exhausted sigh "I'm gonna take a little nap now…" and he passed out.

'You've really come a long way in the past 4 years, I'm proud of you kid and I know your parents and brother would be too.'

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

Another week passed, and the Chunin Exams were coming soon.

Iruka and Mizuki received a report from Kakashi "Alright, thanks for the report Kakashi-sensei. How's Naruto doing? Is he getting along okay with the others?"

Kakashi shrugged "He and Sasuke are getting along alright thanks to Tatsu, but Sakura is a fangirl at heart and worships Sasuke like a god and despises Naruto and Tatsu for being stronger than him."

"It's been so busy around here, we haven't seen him since he got back from the mission to the Land of Waves. I'm a little worried about him."

"Seriously though, Sakura concerns me. At this rate, she'll end up doing something stupid that'll drive the team to alienate her or kick her out entirely."

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

At the same time, Naruto, Sasuke, and Konohamaru's gang had run into trouble with two genin, Kankuro and Temari, from the Hidden Sand.

Kankuro grabbed Konohamaru by his scar "Does this hurt punk?"

"Put him down Kankuro, or you know you'll pay for it later." Temari warned.

"Take your hands off of him right now." Naruto warned, crimson chakra charging in his fingertips.

Kankuro smirked 'So these are the Leaf Village genin. We've got a few more minutes before he gets here, let's mess with these punks huh?"

"Put him down!" Naruto charged.

Kankuro moved his fingertips, causing Naruto to fall to the ground.

"What the- What was that?"

"You're a Leaf genin too? Looks like your village is full of wimps."

"That's it, drop the kid now or I'll tear you apart! You've got that fool?!"

Sasuke covered Naruto's mouth "You're the fool, making threats isn't going to help."

Kankuro was losing patience "You're annoying, all of you. I don't like runts or any other scrawny weaklings, so when a wimp like this starts shooting off his mouth I just wanna break him in half."

Temari sighed "Fine, I'm not involved in any of this okay?"

"First, I'll take care of this little squirt and then I'll waste the other one." he drew back his fist, only to drop it and grip his other hand, which was bleeding rather heavily.

A rock had bounced off of his hand hard, courtesy of Tatsu in a tree above them "You guys are a long way from home and way out of your league, any one of us three could take you out if we put our minds to it."

Kankuro scowled 'Showoff.'

Temari smirked with a pink tinge on her cheek 'Well well, local hottie.'

"Oh great, another wimp to tick me off."

"I should be saying that about you."

Kankuro whipped around and saw Tatsu behind him, shooting him a cold glare 'When did he-?'

"Only warning, get lost and don't mess with my friends again."

"You know something punk, you're the kind of pesky little snot I hate the most, all attitude and nothing to back it up." yeah, Kankuro had more arrogance than brains, and he prepared to unleash something called the Crow.

"Kankuro, back off." a new voice cut in "You're an embarrassment to our village."

Tatsu looked and saw a red-headed figure with a gourd on his back standing upside down on a tree next to him 'This guy's on a whole other level from these two, from what I can sense his power's off the charts. I didn't even notice him show up, he didn't make a sound. From what I know, only jonin like Kakashi are that smooth.'

Kankuro was sweating bullets "Hey Gaara."

The figure, now known as Gaara, glared coldly at Kankuro "Have you forgotten the reason we came all the way here?"

"I know. I mean they challenged us, they started the whole thing really. See, here's what happened-"

"Shut up, or I'll kill you."

"Right, I was totally out of line, I'm sorry Gaara."

Then Gaara turned to Tatsu and the others "I'm sorry for any trouble he caused."

Tatsu studied Gaara for a moment 'This guy has an evil look in his eye.'

Gaara studied Tatsu in return 'He stopped Kankuro and broke his hand with only a pebble and made it look easy, this guy is someone to keep an eye on.' Gaara suddenly de-materialized into sand and rematerialized on the ground "Let's go, we didn't come here to play games."

"Hold up." Tatsu appeared on the ground in front of Naruto and Sasuke "From the look of your headbands I'd say you're from the Hidden Sand Village in the Land of Wind, am I correct in assuming you're here for the Chunin Exams?"

"Yeah, see for yourself." Temari held up a passport "We have the permission slips right here, see for yourself. Of course you're correct, we are Hidden Sand genin. Our home is the Land of Wind and we are here for the Chunin Exams."

"Good to know. Now then, identify yourself."

"You mean me?" she sounded rather hopeful.

"Your name's Temari, it said so on your passport. I'm talking about the guy with the gourd on his back and no eyebrows."

Gaara stopped and turned to face him "My name is Gaara of the Desert, these are my brother Kankuro and my sister Temari. I'm curious about you too, who are you?"

"My name is Tatsu Kamikaze, the blonde with the stupid look on his face is Naruto Uzumaki and the one with the blue shirt and duckass hair is Sasuke Uchiha. I look forward to seeing you all in the exams." he turned around "Alright guys, let's go."

"Come on." Gaara took off, with Temari and Kankuro in tow.

"I'm sure you guys sensed it." Tatsu shot looks at Naruto and Sasuke looks "Temari and Kankuro are alright, but Gaara's power is off the charts. At this rate, even I might not be able to beat him."

Naruto and Sasuke shared a look.

"That said, I'd definitely give him a good fight. After all, I've got a few tricks and surprises up my sleeve. Speaking of which…" he looked up in a tree "You guys can come out now, I know you're there."

Sure enough, three ninja appeared, each with a music note on their headbands "So you noticed us. Impressive."

"Judging by your headbands I'd say you're from the Hidden Sound Village."

"That's right." the girl in the team held up a permission slip.

"Okay then, welcome. I'm Tatsu Kamikaze, this is Naruto Uzumaki and Sasuke Uchiha."

The bandaged figure stepped forward "I'm Dosu Kinuta, these are my teammates Kin Tsuchi and Zaku Abumi. I look forward to seeing you in the exams, it might be a good challenge." and they left.

"Well it looks like this exam is gonna be pretty interesting."

"I haven't heard of the Hidden Sound Village." Naruto commented.

"Not surprising, they're a new village that formed not long ago." Sasuke told him "Anyway, I'm gonna go practice my Sharingan. You guys do whatever." and he walked off.

"Okay, now that he's gone…" Tatsu leaned in to Naruto "I wanna talk to Kyuubi about something."

Naruto blinked "But he's-"

"In your gut, I know. But there's a way to do it; meditating into Limbo, the plain of existence between this world and the next. We'll do it tonight."

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

Through meditating, Tatsu appeared in Limbo, a black void with only a single light.

Kyuubi soon appeared before him "So you've come…"

"Naruto is your jinchuuriki." Tatsu pointed out "He's your shield against enemies who'd want your power, and you're his sword."

Kyuubi was actually caught off guard by this "Yes…"

"I think for that purpose, it would suit you best if Naruto becomes strong and doesn't fall under anyone's influence or else your power would simply become someone else's tool."

Kyuubi studied Tatsu for a moment, trying to uncover his aim "So that's it… Protect my jailer, is that it? If he falls under a genjutsu then I can dispel it, if someone enters his mind like your little Yamanaka girl then I can drive them out, if he's in danger then I can give him chakra, and all of this is for my own self-interest. But that's not all is it? It's not just that. I could tell the boy things to turn him against the village, against you, but what would be the benefit of that? Humans are weak alone, the more allies he has like you and the Uchiha boy the more people to stand between us and people who desire my power. Well, that's what you're betting on. Alright, I'll help the kid out. You've got guts I'll give you that. Now then, onto important business."

"For starters, Gaara."

"That boy is a jinchuriki like Naruto, he holds the one-tailed Shukaku inside of him. Be weary of him, there's a chance that even your level of power would be unable to defeat him."

"There's more to a fight than power."

"True, but be weary nonetheless. Next, onto the Tenseigan. You awakening the Tenseigan that day on the bridge has granted you a boost in power when they're active, but there's a drawback when using their full power."

"Absolute power corrupts absolutely."

"Exactly. The longer you keep your Tenseigan Chakra Cloak active or the more emotionally distressed you are when using it, the greater the risk, so don't keep it up for more than 5 minutes at a time, or even all of my power might not be enough to stop your rampage. If it gets out of control, I'll have the kid use just enough chakra to match it."

"Alright, fair enough."

"Now then, there's one more thing you should know, but I'll leave that up to him."

"Up to who?"

"Me." a new voice cut in.

Tatsu turned to see a blond figure wearing a white haori with red flames "Hold shit… the Fourth Hokage…"

"Language, and call me Minato."

"Alright, so what'd you want to tell me?"

"Well first off, I'd like to thank you for looking after my son."

Tatsu blinked, then formed a Shadow Clone "Give it a minute…" the ball of chakra appeared and the clone vanished "For the father of the year!" and he shoved it into Minato's gut, sending him spiralling into a random boulder "What the f*ck man! Why the f*ck would you seal that gigantic mutt in your own son?"

Minato got up and spat out some blood "First of all, language. Second, great job on mastering my Rasengan and the Shadow Clone's a nice touch. To answer your question, I thought it would save him against powerful opponents. I believed he would be able to overcome the worst enemies to ever attack Konoha."

"You don't know what the hell Naruto's been through, everyone in the Leaf was a complete and utter ******."

"I know, it was selfish on stupid."

"Emphasis on stupid." Kyuubi said dryly "Also, am I the only one who's going to deal with the fact that you said "Language"?"

"...Deal with that later." Tatsu said slowly "Anyway, I'm guessing that since Naruto's your son you thought he could do it."

Minato nodded "Exactly."

"So why are you here anyway?"

"Because there's something I'm going to trust you with: the true reason behind the Kyuubi's attack. That night, it didn't attack of its own free will."

"Hey! I'm not an it, I'm a he!"

"Sorry. Anyway, he was being controlled by someone."

"Better!"

"Who's strong enough to control the Kyuubi?" asked Tatsu.

"Madara Uchiha." was all Minato said.

"Wait, as in the Madara Uchiha? Founder of the Leaf? The one who fought Hashirama Senju at the Valley of End all those years ago?"

"That's the one."

"But that was over 100 years ago, how could he still be alive?"

"I wish I knew. Anyway, a masked man claiming to be Madara managed to sneak into the Hidden Leaf. He attacked while my wife Kushina was giving birth to Naruto, and he managed to separate me from her and broke the seal holding the Kyuubi inside her. Then he unleashed him on the Hidden Leaf while controlling him with his Sharingan. Fortunately, I was able to use a contract seal to break his control over the Kyuubi. Then, with no other options, I used the Reaper Death Seal and used an 8-signed seal to seal half of the Kyuubi inside me, and the other half inside Naruto."

"Wait, you're talking to me from the Reaper's stomach?"

"Yep."

"What's it like?"

"A lot roomier than you'd imagine."

"Anyway, why tell me all this?"

Minato put a hand on Tatsu's shoulder "Undoubtedly, Madara will try again to get Kyuubi. When he does, I want you and your friends and allies to do everything you can to make sure he doesn't get Naruto."

"You have my word. Me, Sasuke and everyone will make sure of it."

"Good. Also, can you not tell Naruto about me being his father just yet? I want to tell him myself when the time is right."

"I understand, you have my word."

"Thank you." and with that, he vanished.

"You know the 4th Hokage took 3 years to master the jutsu you perfected in a week, if this were in Limbo it would've been a mere fraction of the time. 6 hours in here is actually 1 minute in the real world."

Tatsu blinked "Cool, Kazuma never told me that."

"He probably didn't know it himself."

"Alright, and Kyuubi… thanks."

"Call me Kurama. Anyways, get out."

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

At the same time, Sarutobi had gathered all of the village's jonin to announce the Chunin Exam and the participants.

Kakashi recommended Naruto, Sasuke and Sakura for the exams, and put Tatsu in as a 4th member, to which Sarutobi agreed.

Kurenai recommended her squad.

Asuma recommended Ino and the others.

Guy even recommended his squad, which wasn't much of a surprise since he held them back a year to give them a better chance to prepare.

Iruka was still skeptical, so Sarutobi decided to hold a pre-test.

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

Sakura finally lost her temper "Why why why?! It's always the same, he sets the time and then we have to wait hours for him! What about my feelings? I rushed here so fast I didn't even have time to blow-dry my hair!"

"Shut up Sakura." three voices chorused simultaneously- wait, three?

They looked and saw Tatsu sitting atop one of the red torii gates above them "Hey guys, what's up?"

"Tatsu, what're you doing here?" asked Naruto.

"Well the short version is that Kakashi recommended you three for the Chunin Exams, and I'm with you guys as an extra member." he held out three pieces of paper "Here's your application forms but this is all voluntary. You don't have to do it, you can wait until next year if you want. I know another guy's squad who did that."

"Alright!" Naruto wrapped Tatsu in a hug "You rule man!"

"No, Kakashi rules. He's the one who recommended you- Don't slobber on me! Anyway, whoever wants to take the exam sign the application and come to room 301 at the academy at 3:00 PM 5 days from now. Later." and he vanished in a puff of smoke.

"Yeah!" Naruto cheered "One step closer to becoming Hokage!"

Sasuke inwardly smirked, while a chibi-version of him was jumping for joy in his head 'One step closer to killing Itachi.'

"YES! IT'S ALL THANKS TO SASUKE!" Sakura screeched.

Naruto and Sasuke sweatdropped at Sakura's stupidity.

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

Nightfall came.

Tatsu looked back at a cloaked figure behind him "Alright, how'd it go?"

"They all did like you said." the cloaked figure disappeared in a puff of smoke, revealing Mizuki in his place "Although Ino has one hell of a right hook. She, Naruto and Sasuke are all definitely the most impressive. You're a good influence on them. So how'd your test go?"

"I saw through Iruka the moment he tried a pathetic sneak attack from behind and punched him out."

"I told him a sneak attack was a bad idea. Still though, the Chunin Exams can break just about anyone."

"I know I can take it no sweat, and Naruto, Sasuke and Ino shouldn't have much of a problem either. As for the others, it could go either way."

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

Guy's genin team, Neji, Tenten and Lee, were in the middle of training.

"Did you hear?" asked Lee "We're getting 3 squads of rookies in the exams. First year genin, that hasn't happened in 5 years."

Tenten scoffed "No way, I bet it's just some jonin trying to boost their egos."

"No, there's more to the story than that. 3 of them are from Kakashi's squad, along with an extra tag-along."

"Interesting." Neji admitted.

"But not very." Tenten hurled a kunai at a target.

"Either way, it's too bad for them."

"I wouldn't be too sure Neji." said Lee "I know one of them that might give even you a run for your money."

"Please, as if fate would let me lose to an underclassmen."

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

The day came.

Sakura met the group outside the academy "Hey Sasuke."

"You're late." came the chorus.

"Sorry."

Sasuke studied her for a moment 'What's with her? She's different.'

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

Apparently there was a ruckus outside the exam room.

Two genin were pushing around Guy's team, who were pulling an act "You're taking the Chunin Exams but you can't even get past us? Why don't you just give up now before you get hurt? I think I hear your mommy calling you."

"Please let us through, we're supposed to go in there." Tenten pleaded.

They knocked her down too "Get real punk, the exams are going to make this look like a picnic. Some of you won't survive the exams, others will be wrecked for life, and some of you may go crazy. For Chunin, it's always like and death. You think it's a joke? Chunin are qualified to lead missions. The lives of your squad members are in your hands, so you better be tough enough to take the heat. Delicate little girls don't belong here. We're just thinning out your herd, you won't pass anyway so go home and play with your dolls."

"Real nice speech assholes." Tatsu led the group to the front "Now if you wouldn't mind stepping aside and letting us through. Should've known these guys would try and weed out the weaklings-'

"And release the genjutsu while you're at it." Sasuke blurted out "We can see through your illusion anyway. We're going to the third floor but we've only gone up one flight of stairs. We're only on the second floor."

'Dammit! Well, might as well go along with it. Alright guys, drop the transformations too. You're supposed to be proctors not actors, and for the record Kotetsu there's no way that's your real nose."

"So you guys noticed." they released the genjutsu, revealing that they were in fact only on the second floor "Well aren't we the smart ones? So you noticed an illusion. Now let's see you deal with this!" Kotetsu aimed a kick.

Lee blitzed in and blocked it, as well as Tatsu's counterattack "Now's not the time to fight with each other."

'He stopped Tatsu's kick, he must have some chakra in his arm.' Sasuke noted.

"Hey, what happened to the plan?" asked Neji "I thought you were the one who said to keep a low profile and don't let anyone see our skill level."

Lee shrugged "Sorry, but I couldn't let this one do anything stupid before I could get my shot at him."

"I see." Neji looked over to Tatsu "Hey you over there, what's your name?"

Tatsu remained unfazed "It's common courtesy to give your own name before asking for someone else's."

"You're a rookie aren't you, how old are you anyway?"

"About 6 months younger than you guys, not that it's any business of someone like you. A prodigy with a stick up his ass, you're like how Sasuke used to be." then he looked back "Alright guys, let's go." and he led his team up the staircase 'Well it looks like Lee is as fiery as ever.'

Neji studied Tatsu intently 'Tatsu, the last of the Kamikaze clan. So he's the one Lee was talking about.'

"He's pretty bold, you gonna challenge him?" asked Tenten.

Neji just walked without a word.

Tenten was about to follow, but noticed that Lee wasn't moving "Lee, what're you waiting for? We're supposed to check in."

Lee shook his head "You two go, I'll catch up in a minute. I've got something to check on." and he left.

"What's that about?"

"I have no idea." Neji kept walking without looking back.

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

Tatsu led the group on their way "Remember guys, no matter what you can't underestimate the team from back there."

"Hey you, with the blue gi. Hold on." a voice cut in.

Tatsu looked and saw Lee above them "Well you're as fiery as ever Lee, so what's up?"

"You know what, I want you and I to fight right here and now."

"Fine, but first, introductions. These are my boys Naruto Uzumaki and Sasuke Uchiha, and the banshee is their teammate Sakura Haruno."

"A pleasure, my name is Rock Lee." he turned back to Tatsu "Co-Rookie of the Year Tatsu Kamikaze, my old friend and rival, let's see just how much you've improved." he got into his combat stance "Come on."

Tatsu got into his own combat stance "Alright, let's go."

"Very well." Lee disappeared faster than Sasuke or the others could see.

Tatsu followed him easily and blocked a kick to the face.

Lee retreated and broke away, and then he charged.

Tatsu kept up with him easily, despite gaining some minor bruises from the occasional punch or kick that landed.

Lee jumped back, then ran up again in an attempt to kick Tatsu in the face.

Tatsu dodged by leaping upwards, falling right into Lee's trap.

Lee suddenly appeared behind him "You have improved Tatsu, but you still let your guard down."

"Dancing Leaf Shadow, eh? Not bad, I should've expected as much."

"Now then, it's over." he was about to unravel the bandages on his arms.

"Alright, that's enough!" a pinwheel stuck the bandages to the wall "Lee? Get down here!"

Lee dropped to the ground, revealing his heavily bandaged hand, and bowed to a turtle with a Leaf headband. "You were watching us the whole time?"

"Of course. That last technique is forbidden, you know that."

"I'm sorry, I didn't mean to…" he flinched under the glare "I wasn't planning to use a forbidden jutsu, but I was in the middle of a fight and-"

"You're a disgrace! You think you'll get away with a bunch of lame excuses like that? A shinobi never reveals his techniques unless it's absolutely necessary. It's such a basic rule, you should know it by now."

"Forgive me sir."

"Are you prepared to take the punishment for your actions?"

"Yes sir."

"Alright then, please come out Guy-sensei!"

Then Guy came out "Hey, what's shakin' everybody? How ya doing, like treating ya good?"

"N-O." Tatsu appeared in between guy, cut Lee's bandages with his sword, then grabbed Lee's hand and led him away "Alright Sasuke, Naruto, let's go."

"Right." they followed, with Sakura in tow.

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

They soon arrived at 301, Lee having gone ahead to meet his teammates.

Kakashi stood outside the door waiting for them "Glad you came Sakura, for your sake and the others. Now you can all formally register for the Chunin Exam."

"Why, what do you mean?" asked Sakura.

"You see, no groups of less than 3 are allowed to apply for and take the exam. That's the way it's always been, and it's why Tatsu joined your squad for it."

"But sensei, you said the decision to take the exam was up to the individual."

"That's right, I did."

"Was that a lie?"

"Sort of, it is an individual decision but it affects all of you, and I didn't tell you before because I didn't want the other guys pressuring you. At the same time, I didn't want you feeling obliged to participate, because of any feelings you might have for Sasuke, or for Naruto or Tatsu. I wanted you to come to a decision of your own free will."

"Wait, do you mean that if the others had decided to show up but I decided not to come with them-"

"It would've been the end of the line, if you hadn't come along I couldn't have let the others in. but it's a moot point, you're all here and for the right reasons. Sakura, Naruto, Sasuke and Tatsu. I'm proud of you, I couldn't ask for a better team." he stepped aside "Good luck."

"We won't let you down Kakashi, and a Kamikaze never goes back on his word." and with that, Tatsu led the team through the door.

Kakashi found himself alone 'They'll be something great, I know it. Tatsu, give them guidance and all of you please be careful.'

A/N:

Why did I give Tatsu the Rasengan? Well it was an idea that I recycled from the previous version of this fic, and I didn't exactly want to part with that idea in this one either.

See, I mentioned in the summary that there would be Sakura bashing involved, and this is where that truly begins, but this is nothing in comparison to what I plan to do with her in the next chapter.


章節 3: Chapter 5: Chunin Exams Begin, Sakura's Downfall 1/3

KeybladeMasterRiku: You'll just have to wait and see what I come up with.

Dai sennin kurosaki d Naruto: I didn't see any reason not to, and I wouldn't say it's copied from canon. It's just him going through the steps of learning the jutsu. And I wouldn't say everyone who knows it is directly linked to him, I mean Konohamaru learned it and he isn't connected to the Fourth Hokage.

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

Naruto and company froze at what they saw "Wh-What's this? I guess we're not alone."

"Hey Tatsu, where've you been?" Ino leapt onto Tatsu's back "I haven't seen you since you were training to-"

"Easy." Tatsu cut her off "I'm waiting until the right moment to unveil it."

"Oh right, sorry. Still, I knew you'd show up, but with these guys?"

"They wouldn't let me enter solo."

"Hey porker, back off him!" Sakura screeched.

"Oh great Miss Forehead, they let you in? Still got those big frown lines on your billboard brow I see."

"Oh, it's you guys." that was when Shikamaru and Choji showed up "I knew this was gonna be a drag, but I didn't know it was gonna be this lame. Hey Tatsu."

"Hey Shika, hey Choji." Tatsu waved.

"Well well, what do you know?" then Kiba came up with his squad "It looks like the whole gang's back together again. Here we all are, all 10 rookies. This is gonna be fun, at least for those of us good enough to make the cut, right Tatsu?" he failed to noticed the angry glare Ino shot at him "Just wait, we're going to blow you guys away."

"More like get your crotch blown away for barking up the wrong tree, now keep that mutt on a leash."

"Hey don't talk about Akamaru like that!"

"I was talking to Akamaru and I was talking about you."

"Yeah? Well, we've been training like crazy."

"And you think we haven't? I know for a fact that me, Naruto, Sasuke and Ino are the 4 best our generation's got and we've all got the best chances of becoming chunin. Oh, and there's a good chance of Shino too. Hey Shino."

"Tatsu." Shino gave a stoic nod.

"Hey you guys." then another genin came over "You might want to try keeping it down a little. I mean no offense but you're the 10 rookies right? Fresh out of the academy? I wouldn't go making a spectacle of yourselves. Just cool it, this isn't a class field trip."

"You should give your name before criticizing others." Tatsu pointed out "The name's Tatsu Kamikaze."

"I know who you are, the genin who took on Zabuza 1-on-1 and lived to tell about it. Anyway, the name's Kabuto Yakushi. But really, look around you. You've all made quite an impression."

Sasuke and the others looked and noticed the glares they were getting from a certain group.

"See those guys? They're from the Hidden Rain Village, very touchy all of them. This exam makes everyone tense, and you don't want to rub them the wrong way right now. Not that you could help it, after all how would you know how things work? You're just rookies, you remind me of myself a while back."

"Your name's Kabuto right?" Tatsu guessed "How many times have you taken this exam?"

"Well, it's… my 7th. They're held twice a year, so this will be my 4th year."

"With as much experience as you have, maybe you're willing to give us some tips?"

"Sure I could help you guys out a little, with my Ninja Info Cards." he pulled the cards out of his belt "It's hard to explain, but these cards have been chakra encoded with everything I've learned over the past 4 years. I've got more than 200 of them, so I haven't been completely wasting my time. They may not look like much to the naked eye, in fact they appear blank. Don't want just anyone seeing this stuff." he started spinning one of the cards.

"What are you doing?" asked Sakura.

"You see, I'm using my chakra to reveal their secrets, like this for example." he summoned a map on one of them "This shows the geographical distribution of all the candidates who've come to take the Chunin Exam. What villages they come from, and how many from each village. Why do you guys think they all come here to take the exam together at the same time?"

"To foster friendship between nations, international brotherhood and all that." Tatsu pointed out.

"Exactly, and it's true enough as far as it goes."

"But there's another reason."

"Yeah. You see, the important thing is that this way they can carefully regulate the total number of shinobi that end up in each village, thereby maintaining the balance of power. If the balance isn't maintained then one nation could wind up with many more shinobi than its neighbors and it might be tempted to attack them, so they try to maintain the status quo. Makes sense, I suppose."

"Do those cards of yours have any info on any individual candidates?"

"They might, do you have someone special in mind?"

"Two actually, Gaara of the Desert from the Hidden Sand and Rock Lee from the Hidden Leaf."

"Man that's no fun, you even know their names. That makes it easy." he swiped out two cards in an instant "Here they are."

"Lee first."

"Okay, first up is Rock Lee. Looks like he's about a year older than you guys, or 6 months older than you Tatsu. Mission experience, 11 C-rank and 20 D-rank. His squad leader is Might Guy, in the last 12 months his taijutsu has radically improved but his other skills are pretty shaky."

"I expected as much."

"Last year he got a lot of attention as a genin, but for some reason he chose not to participate in the Chunin Exam. This will be his first time as a candidate, same as you guys. His teammates are Tenten and Neji Hyuga. Okay, now for Gaara of the Desert." he pulled up Gaara's card "Mission experience, 8 C-rank and- get this, one B-rank as a genin. There's not a lot more information on this guy, he was a rookie from another land originally, but there is this. He survived every mission without getting a scratch on him."

Shikamaru finally spoke "The dude's done a B-rank as a genin, and has never even been injured?"

"That's right. Anyone else?"

Then Sakura stepped up "Pull up Tatsu Kamikaze."

Naruto, Sasuke and the others stared at him incredulously "What the hell Sakura?"

"If he reads Tatsu's card then everyone will know how much of a loser he is."

"Alright then." Kabuto pulled up the card "Tatsu Kamikaze. He's from the Leaf, as I'm sure you're already aware. He's a One Man Team, something that hasn't been seen in several years in this village. Taijutsu is somewhat above average, the same with her stealth. Genjutsu is below average. Ninjutsu is way above average. He's performed 22 D-rank, 2 C-rank and 1 A-rank, and is notable for taking on Zabuza Momochi, the Demon of the Hidden Mist, and winning single-handedly."

Sakura was left jaw-dropped that he wasn't the loser she thought he was, mainly since her brain deleted the part about him beating Zabuza and Sasuke dying, and switched around their roles for some reason.

Kabuto pulled the card with the countries back out "Leaf, Sand, Rain, Grass, Waterfall, Sound. From the looks of it, they've all sent exceptionally skilled candidates to the exam this time around. Of course, the Hidden Sound Village is small and sprang up recently, and no one knows anything about it. Those guys are a mystery." he put the cards away "Well, you get the point. The competition's going to be intense this year. In the 4 years I've been coming, I've never seen a crop of candidates with as much potential as this bunch. Yep, we've got our work cut out for us."

Then Naruto did something stupid and pointed at every other genin in the room "My name's Naruto Uzumaki, and I'm gonna beat every one of you! Believe it! Yeah, I feel a lot better now."

"Good to know." Tatsu said dryly "Because now they're all gonna go apeshit on us the first chance they get." he nonchalantly blocked a punch from Zaku "I mean, what the hell is wrong with you?" he blocked a kunai with his own and caught Dosu's fist aimed for Kabuto's face and grabbed the gauntlet on his arm while still talking "I mean it's great to have confidence and all, but think about how it impacts the rest of them, particularly the other 6 of them over there." then he looked at Dosu "Oh hey, you want something?"

Dosu stared intently at him 'He blocked all our attacks without breaking a sweat, and he may play the idiot but he knew exactly where to grab the Sound Gauntlet on my arm to cancel out my jutsu. He's definitely a league above the rest, I knew he was good but he's hiding his true strength.'

That was when the proctor showed up in a puff of smoke "Alright you baby-face degenerates, pipe down and listen up. It's time to begin, I'm your proctor Ibiki Morino, and from this moment your worst enemy. First, you candidates from the Hidden Sound Village, knock it off. Who told you you could fight? You wanna be failed before we've even begun?"

"Sorry, it's our first time." Dosu told him "Guess we're a little jumpy… sir."

"I'll say this once so listen up, there will be no combat between candidates, no attacking each other without the permission of your proctor and even then the use of fatal force is strictly prohibited. Anyone who even thinks of messing with me will be disqualified immediately. Now if we're ready, we'll proceed to the first stage of the Chunin Exams. Hand over your paperwork, in return you'll each be given a number. This number determines where you sit, we'll start the written test once you're all seated."

Naruto froze "Written? F*ck f*ck f*ck!'

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

Naruto wasn't comfortable with the test at all 'I don't even know where the others are sitting, I'm all alone. This is already a disaster!'

"Everyone, eyes front." Ibiki got their attention "There are a few rules you need to be aware of, and I won't answer any questions so you'd better pay attention the first time around. Alright, rule #1 is this. The written part of the exam is conducted on a point reduction system. Contrary to what some of you may be used to, you all begin the test with a perfect score of 10 points. 1 point will be deducted for each answer you get wrong. So if you miss 3, your final score will be 7. Rule #2. Teams will pass or fail based on the total scores of all 3 members. I have my reasons, so shut up and listen. Rule #3. The sentinels you see positioned around the room are there to watch you carefully for any signs of cheating, and for every incident they spot they will subtract 2 points from the culprit's score. Be warned, their eyes are extremely sharp and if they catch you 5 times you'll be dismissed before the tests are even scored. Anyone fool enough to be caught cheating by the sentinels doesn't deserve to be here, if you want to be considered shinobi then show us what exceptional shinobi you can be. One more thing, if any candidate should get a 0 and fail the test then the entire team fails. The final question won't be given out until the 15 minutes before the end of the testing period. You'll have one hour total. Begin!"

And cue everyone taking the written portion.

Tatsu pondered for a moment without even picking up his pencil 'These questions are loads of crap only a bookworm like Sakura could answer, and even I can only answer about half of them. It's like they're expecting us… to… cheat… Dammit, why didn't I think of it before?! My brother told me something about having to cheat on the written test, it must be meant for subtly gather intel! How did I not think of it before? My Tenseigan can't copy people's hand movements and writing like Sasuke's Sharingan, and I'm not a bookworm like Sakura, so how am I gonna go about it? Wait… yeah, I've got one that nobody would notice!' he prepared to make a Shadow Clone, there was a poof but nothing appeared.

'So that's it.' Ibiki thought 'He incorporated a Shadow Clone and a transformation so fast that nobody could even notice. Not bad.'

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

45 minutes, lots of cheating and several idiots and jackasses getting thrown out had passed.

Ibiki finally addressed them 'Now that we've weeded out most of the hopeless cases, 15 minutes to go. Time for the main event. Alright, listen up. Here's the 10th and final question. But before I give you the 10th question, there are some more rules that you need to be aware of. These rules are unique to question 10, listen carefully and try not to let them frighten you. Rule #1, each of you is free to choose not to be given the final question. It's your decision."

"So what's the catch then?" asked Tatsu "Say we chose not to do it, what then?"

"If you choose not to take the 10th question regardless of your answers to the other 9, you'll get a zero. In other words you fail, and that means of course that both your teammates fail as well. Next, if you do accept the question but answer it incorrectly then you will not only fail, you will be barred from taking the Chunin Exam ever again!"

"Hey that's bull man, that's ridiculous!" Kiba barked "What kind of bogus rule is that? There's lots of people here who've taken the test before."

Ibiki let out a very unsettling chuckle "I guess you're just unlucky, I wasn't making the rules before but I am now. Of course if you don't want to take it you don't have to, if you're not feeling confident then by all means skip it. You can come back and try again next year. Now then, if you're ready, the 10th question. If you don't want to take it then raise your hand, your number will be recorded and then you're free to go."

A few teams gave up.

Tatsu studied his team intently for a moment 'This is your moment of truth guys, do you have the resolve.' then he saw Naruto raise his hand 'Well f*ck everything I know.'

Naruto suddenly slammed it down on the table in front of him "Screw you and your question, I don't quit and I don't run! You can act like this ballsy tough guy all you want, but you won't scare me off! I don't care if I do get stuck as a genin for the rest of my life, I'll still be Hokage someday!"

'And everything I know isn't a lie. Good for you Naruto, good for all of us.'

Ibiki looked and saw nobody else was gonna drop out 'Remarkable, that little outburst has given the others some backbone. He's inspired them into staying. 78 left, more than I expected. But I don't see anyone wavering, I think that's it. Well then I admire your determination if nothing else, for those of you remaining there's only one thing left to do and that's for me to tell you that you've all passed the first exam."

Tatsu knew why, but decided to ask for anyone else "I don't think they get it, what do you mean we passed, and what about the 10th question?"

"There never was one, not a written one at least. Actually-"

"The decision to stay was the answer to the 10th question, it was testing if we had the determination and resolve to back up that decision, and the first 9 were to test our ability to gather information under difficult circumstances."

"Exactly. Also, never interrupt me again. Those who remain have successfully answered the 10 questions I put to you. You have earned the right to continue on to the next step. You have passed through the first gate. I hereby declare this part of the Chunin Exams completed, there's nothing left but to wish you all good luck."

"Alright, we did it, that's one down!" Naruto started cheering like an idiot.

'He's a funny one, that kid. And that other one Tatsu, he's a smart one.'

Then a bundle crashed through the window, revealing Anko as the next proctor, and put up a banner complimenting herself.

'Jumped the gun as usual.'

"Heads up boys and girls!" Anko barked "This is no time to be celebrating. I'll be your next proctor, Anko Mitarashi. You ready for the second test? Good! Then let's go, follow me!"

"...You're early. Again."

Anko blushed angrily 'Dammit! How many are there? Ibiki, you let all these guys pass? Your test was too easy, you must be getting soft."

"Or it could be a stronger crop of candidates this year."

"They sure don't look it. Trust me, before I'm done with them more than half will be eliminated."

Tatsu's eyes narrowed 'Like Kazuma said, next up is the Forest of Death.'

"Alright, you maggots have had it easy so far but things are going to be different starting first thing in the morning. I'll let your squad leaders know where you're to meet me. Dismissed."

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

After that, Ibiki took note of how Naruto didn't answer a single question.

Naruto was definitely a funny one.

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

Morning came.

Naruto and the others looked at the forest ahead of them "Woah nice place, what is it?"

"The Forest of Death." Tatsu told him.

"This is the location for the second phase of the exam. It's the 44th Battle Training Zone, but we call it the Forest of Death." explained Anko.

"This whole place just completely creeps me out." Sakura muttered.

"It should, they call it the Forest of Death and soon you're going to find out what that reason is."

Naruto then proceeded to act like a tough jackass "Do your worst, you're not gonna scare me away! I can handle anything!"

"So, look like we've got ourselves a tough guy." she chucked a kunai that whizzed past his face, grazing it, and then appeared behind him "You tough enough to handle this? You're not afraid are you? Tough guys like you usually leave their blood all over this forest." she was about to whip out another kunai when she sensed something behind her.

A Hidden Grass ninja suddenly held out her kunai with her tongue "I was just returning your knife."

"Why thank you grass ninja. You know, I really only recommend you stand this close behind me if you wish to meet a premature end."

"My pardon. With the sight of blood and your blade slicing through my hair, I'm afraid I just became a little excited. I meant you no harm." and then she walked away.

"Likewise. Seems like everyone here today is quick tempered, must be something in the air. This is gonna be fun."

Naruto didn't take very kindly to that 'Quick tempered?! You're the one who threw the kunai at me!'

Anko made her way back to the front "Now before we begin this test, I have something to hand out to you all. It's just a standard consent form. Before the test, all of you are going to have to read over this form and then sign it."

"What for?" asked Sasuke.

"Some of you may not come back from this test, and I have to get your consent to that risk, otherwise it would be my responsibility. Now I'll explain what you'll be doing on this test. Here, pass these out." she handed them out "The first thing you need to know is that this test will tax every one of your survival skills. First, I'll give you all a description of the terrain on the practice field. The 44th Battle Training Zone has 44 locked entrance gates, there are rivers and a forest inside. In the center is a locked tower, located 10 kilometers from each gate. It's in this confined area that you'll undergo the survival test, the test consists of an anything-goes battle to get your hands on these scrolls."

"Both of them?" asked Tatsu.

"Yes. You'll be fighting to get both a Heaven scroll and an Earth scroll. All together, 26 teams will be taking part in this test, so half of those teams will be going after the Heaven scroll and the other half will be trying to get the Earth scroll. I'll hand over one kind of scroll to each team, and that's what you'll be vying for."

"So how do we pass the test?"

"Your entire squad must bring a Heaven and Earth scroll to the tower."

"So at least half of the teams here will fail."

"No one ever said it would be easy. Oh and one more thing, the test has a time limit. You must finish it within 5 days."

"Just asking for others, what're we supposed to do for food?"

"Just look around, the forest is full of things to eat. There's plenty to feed all of you."

"Yeah but that's not all the forest has plenty of, there are plenty of beasts and poisonous plants in there. With these circumstances, there's no way half the teams will make it. And since we're completely surrounded by enemies. There won't be any time to rest, we'll have to keep a constant watch."

"Right, this test also measures endurance behind enemy lines. This is designed to be a grueling test, and I'm sure some of you won't be up to the challenge. There are also some ways you can get disqualified. The first is simple, if all 3 members of a team can't make it to the tower with both scrolls after 5 days. #2, if a team loses a member of if a member becomes incapacitated and cannot continue. But most important, absolutely none of you may look at the contents of the scrolls until you've reached the tower. There are times when a ninja will be asked to carry secret documents, the scroll is to test your integrity. Okay we're done, each team take your consent form and exchange them over there for your scrolls. After that, each team pick a gate and will be led inside. Oh, and I have one more word of advice: Just don't die."

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

After signing his form, Tatsu watched as a curtain was hung over the stand where the scrolls were given out 'So that's it, we won't know which team has which scroll and we won't know which team member is carrying the scroll. Stealing information is really a matter of life and death. It's just like Ibiki said, everyone is equally determined to pass and all of them are our enemies.'

Anko watched and smirked 'It looks like they're starting to understand what's really involved in this test.'

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

Soon everyone had handed their consent forms and received a scroll.

Naruto smirked as he took one 'We are so gonna win this!'

Tatsu sighed 'If only they weren't so arrogant.'

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

"Listen up!" Anko called "All the teams had received their scrolls, so everyone go to your gate and wait there. When the gates open, the test is on!"

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

Tatsu, Naruto, Sasuke and Sakura were stationed at Gate 12 "Alright guys, just be sure to be cautious."

Sakura scoffed "Shut up loser, who put you in charge?"

"Anyone with a brain." the guys chorused simultaneously.

Soon one of the proctors unchained the gate "It's time."

"Right!" and they ran inside.

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

Ino's team was being stalked by a group of Hidden Rain ninja, who were promptly attacked by a pack of leeches.

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

Tatsu quickly stopped his team "I guess someone found the leeches?"

"What leeches?" asked Naruto.

"They sense body temperature and movement and drop down from above in groups, if they suck your blood for a full 5 minutes you're screwed."

"...Good to know. Alright, be right back."

"Where're you going?"

"Take a leak."

"Go do it somewhere else!" Sakura screeched.

"Can you say that again, I don't think the other 20 teams that want to kill us heard you!" and he walked off into the bushes.

"Worthless asshole."

"Oh shut up Sakura, like you're one to talk." Tatsu and Sasuke chorused simultaneously.

Naruto came back after a few minutes "Oh man, that was a lot. I wrote my whole name-"

Tatsu cut him off by slugging him in the gut and pinning him to the ground "Not bad, but you're missing a couple of things. Naruto can't piss that much to save his life, I speak from experience, and Naruto isn't left-handed. Also, there's no cut on your cheek. Who are you?"

Naruto broke free and disappeared in a puff of smoke, revealing a Hidden Rain ninja by the name of Oboro "Alright you got me, so what? I'm still gonna take your scroll, now hand it over or else."

Tatsu just drew the new sword Asuma and Hayate gave him to make up for losing the other one in the fight with Zabuza.

"So which one of you has it?" no response "Fine then, I guess I'll just have to take all of you out first!" and he charged.

"Fire Style: Crimson Moon Dance!" Tatsu summoned 2 Shadow Clones and all charged with their swords drawn.

Oboro fired 2 kunai, dispelling the clones "Sorry, but this is one test you won't be coming back from!" he fired another kunai with a paper bomb, sending Tatsu tumbling back, only for him to disappear in a puff of smoke "Another clone?!"

"Take this!" Tatsu slashed him down the back from behind, leaving serious burn marks running down his back, then looked down to the others "Naruto! Sasuke! Chances are this guy isn't alone, the others could strike any second now!"

"I wish, I came alone as not to arouse suspicion." Oboro told them "Big mistake…" and he limped off into the trees.

"Well so much for that guy, for now anyway." then he leapt back down and huddled the others into a small group "That little incident proved that we can't just trust appearances, we've gotta come up with a way of knowing each of us is who we say we are instead of some imposter with a transformation."

"What's your plan?" asked Sasuke.

"I was thinking along the lines of a secret password known only to the 4 of us and don't trust anyone who doesn't know it. I'm only gonna say this once, so listen closely. The question is "When does a ninja strike?" the answer will be "A ninja waits until the time is right, when the enemy sleeps and drops his guard. When his weapons lie forgotten in the stillness of the night, that is the moment for a ninja to strike." Got it?"

Sasuke nodded "Got it."

"Good. Naruto?"

"You've got one a little shorter?" asked Naruto.

"It'll work out I promise, I actually picked that password with you in mind."

"Yeah but I thought it was gonna be a password, not a pass-speech."

"Good. Now then, I think Sakura should take the scroll."

They shared a look "Wha-?"

"Because she's the weakest out of all of us and doesn't stand out, that way nobody will expect her to have it."

"Wait a minute-" Naruto was cut off when he felt something cut him "What was that?"

Tatsu blitzed in front of them as a massive gust of wind hit them "Brace yourselves!"

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

It was actually a Hidden Grass ninja named Shiore and her teammates "Alright, you two fan out into the woods and keep your eyes open. I'll handle this alone."

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

Sasuke found himself hiding alone in a bush 'Dammit, whatever that blast was it separated all of us.'

"Sasuke."

He suddenly bolted out and pulled out a kunai, only to see Sakura there "Sakura."

"Sasuke, what was that?"

"Don't move, answer the question first. When does a ninja strike?"

"Oh right. A ninja waits until the time is right, when the enemy sleeps and drops his guard. When his weapons lie forgotten in the stillness of the night, that is the moment for a ninja to strike."

"Good, it's really you."

"Hey!" then Naruto came over "You guys okay?"

"Don't come any closer. What's the password? When does a ninja strike?"

"Okay, a ninja waits until the time is right, when the enemy sleeps and drops his guard. When his weapons lie forgotten in the stillness of the night, that is the moment for a ninja to strike."

Sasuke quickly fired a kunai.

Naruto quickly ducked out of the way "What was that?! You could've killed me."

"Now I get what Tatsu's plan was, and I've gotta admit it was pretty genius all things considered. He designed that password so that there was no chance of Naruto getting it right, that way we'd know for sure that it was the real one. You'd have a better chance teaching that password to a hamster. Or Sakura. Besides, the way you dodged that attack was definitely not a Naruto-style move. Alright come on out already whoever you are, party's over."


Load failed, please RETRY

每周推薦票狀態

批量訂閱

目錄

顯示選項

背景

EoMt的

大小

章評

寫檢討 閱讀狀態: C2
無法發佈。請再試一次
  • 寫作品質
  • 更新的穩定性
  • 故事發展
  • 人物形象設計
  • 世界背景

總分 0.0

評論發佈成功! 閱讀更多評論
用推薦票投票
Rank 200+ 推薦票榜
Stone 0 推薦票
舉報不當內容
錯誤提示

舉報暴力內容

段落註釋

登錄

tip 段落評論

段落註釋功能現已上線!將滑鼠移到任何段落上,然後按下圖示以添加您的評論。

此外,您可以隨時在「設置」 中將其關閉/ 打開。

明白了