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i see why this was dropped, it is boring you are deliberately keeping the mc weak despite have a way to get stronger its super annoying
I just found your stuff recently and it really helped cheer me up the writing quality in the beginning was a little rough but it kept getting better every chapter so i hope you’re doing alright and everything gets better for you it would be great to be able to read more of your great stories. Hope your doing well and everything works out for you!
The author talks more than Hermione! You don't know what scores mean! There are no commas, full stops or paragraphs in the first chapters. He asks Rob for powers, which NEVER work! Most of the story is the speaker (author) narrating... There are no decent interactions with the main characters. He NEVER made it clear if he revealed his identity to his parents in HP, but he told God and the world, "And everyone accepted it perfectly fine", that doesn't make sense! The MC steals things for the sake of stealing, but he is ALWAYS poor! But out of nowhere he buys expensive things from the system. He has no connection!!!! The author keeps breaking the 4th wall! Then he decides to go to the Twilight Universe and completely changes the MC's personality and transforms him into Bella, ipsis litteris, making a defenseless princess who keeps being saved from danger like an idiot! But how can someone who took down Voldemort, with his eyes closed, be so pathetic, when he's still been trained for months by Scáthach??? Yes!!! The author summoned Scáthach to train the stupid MC and he continues with his Bella identity crisis, being saved as a helpless little princess!!!! For those who have read this far, if you want to read it because you have nothing to read, like me, I'm sure you're going to be very angry! Because the story is done amateurishly, looking more like a chunni diary than a fanfic. CONGRATULATIONS author for this gooseberry!
As a die-hard fan of the Harry Potter saga, I was eagerly anticipating diving into the magical universe. Unfortunately, I can't find a single redeeming quality in this novel. From the uninspired plot to the shallow characterization of the characters, this work falls flat in every aspect.
so hard to read. author doesn't use commas, quotations, and periods. the paragraphs are too long too.
Too many perks and custom made things. Waste of time, it's name should be a god of the Harry Potter world with that many advantages. It has touch of Chinese novel, now you can get it from this it too cranky.
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The story is quite good to say the least and does not follow the standard HP fanfics. This is a fun read with it's unique concept and comedic parts. The story is specially good as the mc is overpowered while not being overpowered
It was fine up until about chapter 100 then upon jumping to a new world the MC developed a split personality disorder and started acting completely out of character.
Just, To hard at learn, go write with some space, really your story is a cobblestone xD
Let me be honest , the MC is confusing . I mean really how do you have literally the key to be well as amazing as you want be but still end up so stupid? I will tell you this the MC acts almost unnatural for some of his decisions are just stupid . I get wanting to have a challenge but really there are so many better options
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solid text without a paragraph in the GP killed, but read with the hope that it would be next ... something ... hopes did not come true ((
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I'm still in the early parts. Harry Potter seems to be copy pasted from somewhere with another format and little add-ons added. It's an unedited, headache inducing read. Hopefully it gets better.
Overall really good but chapter 57 and onwards for a good while is literally cruel torture to read just summary of events no dialogue no character interactions the whole section needs rewrite man. It comes as a shock as it's brilliant until this point and take a a massive nosedive. you come to care for the mc and the quirky interactions with the original characters then the summary style shift just takes you right out of it. If you can get through it gets better again however repeats of the same summary writing show up from then on which with the poor spacing and paragraphing makes it brutal to read through these sections. However don't let this deter you well worth the read.
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This has to be the best thing I've read yet. I didn't like most of the anime/novel you wrote about, but you "fixed" all the problems I had such as them being way to long with way too much filler. I love that you changed through the stories fast enough that nothing was boring. The jokes have to be the best part it works perfectly I never went more than a few chapters without laughing.
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Writer is just writing for shits and giggles. And not even trying to write decently just wringing it which he admitted himself. Even after that it would have been readable to just pass the time if it was in readable format. The author claims to write on mobile phone and is too lazy to edit after posting. There are not even full stops(.) let alone comma. It's just non stop words, no uppercases, no paragraphs, no space. Webnovel readers are used to shitty grammar but at least try to do minimal formatting. Waste time at your own peril.
i see why this was dropped, it is boring you are deliberately keeping the mc weak despite have a way to get stronger its super annoying
I just found your stuff recently and it really helped cheer me up the writing quality in the beginning was a little rough but it kept getting better every chapter so i hope you’re doing alright and everything gets better for you it would be great to be able to read more of your great stories. Hope your doing well and everything works out for you!
The author talks more than Hermione! You don't know what scores mean! There are no commas, full stops or paragraphs in the first chapters. He asks Rob for powers, which NEVER work! Most of the story is the speaker (author) narrating... There are no decent interactions with the main characters. He NEVER made it clear if he revealed his identity to his parents in HP, but he told God and the world, "And everyone accepted it perfectly fine", that doesn't make sense! The MC steals things for the sake of stealing, but he is ALWAYS poor! But out of nowhere he buys expensive things from the system. He has no connection!!!! The author keeps breaking the 4th wall! Then he decides to go to the Twilight Universe and completely changes the MC's personality and transforms him into Bella, ipsis litteris, making a defenseless princess who keeps being saved from danger like an idiot! But how can someone who took down Voldemort, with his eyes closed, be so pathetic, when he's still been trained for months by Scáthach??? Yes!!! The author summoned Scáthach to train the stupid MC and he continues with his Bella identity crisis, being saved as a helpless little princess!!!! For those who have read this far, if you want to read it because you have nothing to read, like me, I'm sure you're going to be very angry! Because the story is done amateurishly, looking more like a chunni diary than a fanfic. CONGRATULATIONS author for this gooseberry!
As a die-hard fan of the Harry Potter saga, I was eagerly anticipating diving into the magical universe. Unfortunately, I can't find a single redeeming quality in this novel. From the uninspired plot to the shallow characterization of the characters, this work falls flat in every aspect.
so hard to read. author doesn't use commas, quotations, and periods. the paragraphs are too long too.
Too many perks and custom made things. Waste of time, it's name should be a god of the Harry Potter world with that many advantages. It has touch of Chinese novel, now you can get it from this it too cranky.
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The story is quite good to say the least and does not follow the standard HP fanfics. This is a fun read with it's unique concept and comedic parts. The story is specially good as the mc is overpowered while not being overpowered
It was fine up until about chapter 100 then upon jumping to a new world the MC developed a split personality disorder and started acting completely out of character.
Just, To hard at learn, go write with some space, really your story is a cobblestone xD
Let me be honest , the MC is confusing . I mean really how do you have literally the key to be well as amazing as you want be but still end up so stupid? I will tell you this the MC acts almost unnatural for some of his decisions are just stupid . I get wanting to have a challenge but really there are so many better options
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solid text without a paragraph in the GP killed, but read with the hope that it would be next ... something ... hopes did not come true ((
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I'm still in the early parts. Harry Potter seems to be copy pasted from somewhere with another format and little add-ons added. It's an unedited, headache inducing read. Hopefully it gets better.
Overall really good but chapter 57 and onwards for a good while is literally cruel torture to read just summary of events no dialogue no character interactions the whole section needs rewrite man. It comes as a shock as it's brilliant until this point and take a a massive nosedive. you come to care for the mc and the quirky interactions with the original characters then the summary style shift just takes you right out of it. If you can get through it gets better again however repeats of the same summary writing show up from then on which with the poor spacing and paragraphing makes it brutal to read through these sections. However don't let this deter you well worth the read.
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揭示劇透 This has to be the best thing I've read yet. I didn't like most of the anime/novel you wrote about, but you "fixed" all the problems I had such as them being way to long with way too much filler. I love that you changed through the stories fast enough that nothing was boring. The jokes have to be the best part it works perfectly I never went more than a few chapters without laughing.
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Honestly enjoyed the chaos and want to see/read more of it. MUAHAHAHAHAHA [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Writer is just writing for shits and giggles. And not even trying to write decently just wringing it which he admitted himself. Even after that it would have been readable to just pass the time if it was in readable format. The author claims to write on mobile phone and is too lazy to edit after posting. There are not even full stops(.) let alone comma. It's just non stop words, no uppercases, no paragraphs, no space. Webnovel readers are used to shitty grammar but at least try to do minimal formatting. Waste time at your own peril.