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寫檢討For exp I can do anything..... For exp I can go to any lengths..... For exp I can create many useless reviews..... Because exp is my life.... It is my love.... And it is my dream.....
Okay good read amusing and decent power grade only problem I have is lack of balance on one hand good op story on another it would be fun or better if he set up restrictions/ power level for any fight that is weaker then him to enjoy the fight and pull a this isnt even my final form bs for funnies
I feel disappointment after reading. This work had a good potential but unfortunately it became worser and worser till the last chapter....................
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Bruh, I got hella laughs out of this story and I can’t wait for more, really hope this continues to be made, Zed is so blunt about his actions that I have to double take everything, after reading so many serious and over calculating mcs, this is definitely refreshing.
The story is like a text of a history book, it's a narrative type of story. Not much talking, too much info dump. Mc is like.. Well I can't tell if he's an semi-stupid, arrogant or just had a gamer mind set. The characters is just plain blank or is it just me that think of it. Well I'm not a writer so I will stop. Good luck wish this story a success :)
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I'm gnna say it here cause feel like author won't see it otherwise. MC has gamer mind, he can't fall in madness with his power. So a few chapters make no sens.
5⭐ for you.. i like the story.. i like how he not helping everyone he knew with his system.. i like how he's OP.. and please stay like that.. the OP'ness that we people irl always wish to be.. we are already weak ass irl.. and it will be a LOT depressing if you let us see/read someone (MC) struggle in your story.. actually i have depressed a lot after reading a lot of nerfed MC~~ 😣😣 So......... STAY OP!!!!! 😤😤😤😤
One of the most awesome fanfiction on this site. I recommend this fic to anyone that like naruto fanfics. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌
A Cool story so far with good mc. Just don't soften up the mc just to appease some pussy idiots. The mc has trust issues and such thing as 'morals' shouldn't stop him putting seals and other precautions. After all, you wrote his past background like this. I hate it when writers write mc backstory as some tough badass mother fu*ker but then he acts like a bi*ch and restricts himself and allows everyone walks over him because apparently he is 'CHANGED' LOL!
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One of the best naruto fanfics! Faster updates pls!🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥
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The MC is idiot but i love Him! It's so hilarious how he behave hahahaa Anyway thank you for your hard work ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
Aahahah gimme more, its the best Naruto fanfic atm, and it will be the best whatever fanfic of the show it will be next. We just need more chapters and it will be golden
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a really good soap opera, I loved how you built things. just want more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
well the start is good uptil ch9 just waiting for few more chapters.........................................................................................
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The story isn’t that long so far but I find it interesting and I can’t wait till chapter 9 comes out good story though now I just need more words
A very good start to an OP fic. You have a MC who gets things done in a quick pace through out his childhood. He's a sand ninja and manages takes over as the leader at 13yrs old. This is due to his gamer abilities, but this doesn't make sense considering his goal was to train naruto as a father figure by being five years older. Guess that was brushed under in favor of the fix-it attitude the MC is starting to develop. Right now it's a bit early to see if this will follow cannon religiously, but I hope it doesn't. Otherwise this fic will lose its current positive momentum.
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For exp I can do anything..... For exp I can go to any lengths..... For exp I can create many useless reviews..... Because exp is my life.... It is my love.... And it is my dream.....
Okay good read amusing and decent power grade only problem I have is lack of balance on one hand good op story on another it would be fun or better if he set up restrictions/ power level for any fight that is weaker then him to enjoy the fight and pull a this isnt even my final form bs for funnies
I feel disappointment after reading. This work had a good potential but unfortunately it became worser and worser till the last chapter....................
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Bruh, I got hella laughs out of this story and I can’t wait for more, really hope this continues to be made, Zed is so blunt about his actions that I have to double take everything, after reading so many serious and over calculating mcs, this is definitely refreshing.
The story is like a text of a history book, it's a narrative type of story. Not much talking, too much info dump. Mc is like.. Well I can't tell if he's an semi-stupid, arrogant or just had a gamer mind set. The characters is just plain blank or is it just me that think of it. Well I'm not a writer so I will stop. Good luck wish this story a success :)
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I'm gnna say it here cause feel like author won't see it otherwise. MC has gamer mind, he can't fall in madness with his power. So a few chapters make no sens.
5⭐ for you.. i like the story.. i like how he not helping everyone he knew with his system.. i like how he's OP.. and please stay like that.. the OP'ness that we people irl always wish to be.. we are already weak ass irl.. and it will be a LOT depressing if you let us see/read someone (MC) struggle in your story.. actually i have depressed a lot after reading a lot of nerfed MC~~ 😣😣 So......... STAY OP!!!!! 😤😤😤😤
One of the most awesome fanfiction on this site. I recommend this fic to anyone that like naruto fanfics. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌
A Cool story so far with good mc. Just don't soften up the mc just to appease some pussy idiots. The mc has trust issues and such thing as 'morals' shouldn't stop him putting seals and other precautions. After all, you wrote his past background like this. I hate it when writers write mc backstory as some tough badass mother fu*ker but then he acts like a bi*ch and restricts himself and allows everyone walks over him because apparently he is 'CHANGED' LOL!
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One of the best naruto fanfics! Faster updates pls!🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥
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The MC is idiot but i love Him! It's so hilarious how he behave hahahaa Anyway thank you for your hard work ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
Aahahah gimme more, its the best Naruto fanfic atm, and it will be the best whatever fanfic of the show it will be next. We just need more chapters and it will be golden
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a really good soap opera, I loved how you built things. just want more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
well the start is good uptil ch9 just waiting for few more chapters.........................................................................................
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The story isn’t that long so far but I find it interesting and I can’t wait till chapter 9 comes out good story though now I just need more words
A very good start to an OP fic. You have a MC who gets things done in a quick pace through out his childhood. He's a sand ninja and manages takes over as the leader at 13yrs old. This is due to his gamer abilities, but this doesn't make sense considering his goal was to train naruto as a father figure by being five years older. Guess that was brushed under in favor of the fix-it attitude the MC is starting to develop. Right now it's a bit early to see if this will follow cannon religiously, but I hope it doesn't. Otherwise this fic will lose its current positive momentum.
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