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45.08% Reincarnated as a dragon egg in DxD with a Fate System! / Chapter 133: Has Valina challenged Mordred?

章節 133: Has Valina challenged Mordred?

Drako and Raynare's training continued for the next few hours. Actually, more than training, one could consider that Drako was beating Raynare's brains out. And, although the training was supposed to last about four hours, Raynare lost consciousness before he reached two hours.

Once she fell unconscious, Raynare had the same nightmare again. Every time she entered the dream world, the same evil voice came back to haunt her. Raynare didn't know what this person looked like, but it sounded like a woman because of her voice. Still, Raynare couldn't turn around and look at this person.

No, Raynare knew she could do it. She knew she could escape those nightmares. But... she was afraid.

"Come on, Raynare. Say my name, call me..."

Raynare woke up shaken. Cold sweat ran down her entire body, causing her discomfort.

"You finally woke up."

Raynare didn't need to look to know it was Drako who had spoken.

"How long have I been sleeping?" Raynare asked as she got up.

As she performed this action, she realized she felt different somehow. Like something had changed, but she couldn't tell exactly what it was.

"A little over two hours."

Raynare stood and finally looked up at Drako, who was leaning against the wall with his eyes closed. She noticed an abnormality again, and that was that her body did not hurt at all. After the brutal beating she had taken from Drako, she felt as if her body was a new one.

"Drako..."

"You want to know why your body doesn't hurt, don't you?"

Raynare nodded her head.

"You should know since this is not the first time I've applied this treatment on you."

"You're talking about the Azazel cream, right? But... wasn't it just a simple massage cream?"

"That's right, it's the cream created by Azazel. Did you really think that a cream created from the most expensive and legendary materials in each mythology served only as a simple massage cream?"

"Ugh..."

Now that Raynare thought about it, it was a real waste to use such a precious cream in massages. Still, she couldn't say that out loud since the cream belonged to Drako. Since he signed the contract with Azazel, all of this guy's cream that Grigori created ended up in Drako's hands, so he was free to do whatever he wanted with it.

And even though it was such a valuable cream, Drako was willing to spend it to heal her wounds...

Wait, how did he apply the cream if she had her clothes on?

Oh...

Raynare felt her cheeks warm at the thought of Drako stripping her naked to apply the cream. It was normal for her to feel something was out of place. Had Drako taken advantage of her while she was unconscious?

"I have to go home and prepare for the girls' lunch. Why don't you come with me?"

"Won't I be a nuisance?"

"No, your presence is always welcome."

Hearing that, Raynare nodded shyly and decided to follow Drako into the human world.

Before returning to the human world, they passed by the place where Baraqiel was teaching. Apparently, the training had ended long ago, and the Cadre was teaching Natsume and Akeno the knowledge of the supernatural world.

"Sacred Gears, also known as God's Artifacts, which are items that have powerful abilities bestowed upon humans by the God from the Bible. The God of the Bible created the Sacred Gears as a part of his system to enact miracles on Earth and appeared in other factions around the Human World.

Influential figures from the past and present are carriers of Sacred Gears, although the vast majority of them do not have Sacred Gears for combat.

Within the Sacred Gears, there are 13 who are considered superior and who has the power to kill Maous and Gods. These are called Longinus.

The Sacred Gears of Tobio, Lavinia and Valina, are Longinus."

Baraqiel was teaching Natsume and Akeno a lesson about Sacred Gears. This information was more intended for Natsume than for Akeno since for the latter, it was just a review of what his parents had already taught her.

"Sacred Gears can have various effects and abilities, such as Canis Lykaon, which can manifest a small black dog that can summon blades from itself. Sacred Gears can also adapt and evolve based around their wielder's thoughts, needs, and feelings, gaining abilities or qualities as time pass first seen by Jin who had become able to grow distorted blades from shadows.

To make the lesson better understood, Baraqiel was giving an example that Natsume knew personally.

"Sacred Gears has an ultimate state of activation referred to as the Balance Breaker and Forbidden Move, which is the most powerful manifestation of the Sacred Gear. Once reached, the Balance Breaker can be entered again far more easily than the first time.

Balance Breaker is a "bug" in the system created by the God of the Bible, which can alter the balance of the world, and that is why it is called Balance Breaker.

It is currently considered a forbidden power by the Three Bible Factions. It is known as the final activation state of a Sacred Gear.

Balance Breaker is often activated by high emotions combined with a change in the heart or spirit of the wearer.

Balance Breakers can be divided into three categories. Most Balance Breakers, including the subspecies, could be placed under the Crest Side. The Crest Side is classified under strengthening, evolving to the point of transformation. By pursuing the arrogance of themselves and Sacred Gear, the Balance Breaker can further evolve by creating a state of fusion with their Sacred Gear to produce the Abyss Side. The third type, Ex Side, consists of the Balance Breaker that could not be classified in the two previous categories due to its sudden variation. It is considered an exception among the exceptions. "

"In your case, Natsume, your Sacred Gear is an Independent Avatar type. The Independent Avatar Sacred Gear are Sacred Gears that create an avatar, in the form of an animal most of the time. They can act independently while protecting their owner or joining them in combat."

With this, Baraqiel's lecture ended, and Natsume and Akeno left the class. On their way out, they met Drako and Raynare. They were waiting for them to leave so they could go home.

"What a surprise, Drako-kun! I didn't expect to see you here." Natsume said.

"Drako always picks us up after training, so I'm used to it." Akeno added.

It seemed that Natsume and Akeno were getting along quite well. Suddenly, something flew in the direction of the group. It speed was impressive! At least it speed was at the level of a High-Class Devil. The object slowed down and landed on Natsume's shoulders. It was none other than Hawk-chan, Natsume's Sacred Gear!

"Good boy, Hawk-chan!"

Natsume stroked the soft fur of the falcon with her cheek.

"By the way, where is Valina?" Drako asked.

"Oh, she left when we finished our physical training. Since she couldn't train with Azazel, she said she was going to find Mordred to have a little sparring with her."

Baraqiel left the classroom and locked the door while answering Drako's question.

"Has she gone to fight Mordred? Shit, this is bad."

"Something wrong with that, Drako? It doesn't look like Mordred's a bad person. She's got a bit of a childish attitude, and that surprised me. Since she's named after King Arthur's incestuous son with his sister Morgan, I thought she'd be evil or something."

"She is the daughter of King Arthur," Drako muttered when he heard Natsume.

"Did you say something?"

"Forget it, I didn't say anything. I just hope Mordred didn't inadvertently kill Valina. She's not the best person to control her strength, so I wouldn't be surprised if she got overexcited and ended up causing a disaster."

Perfect, one more problem for Drako. At least he knew that Mordred hadn't killed Valina since he hadn't received any experience points.

It was the first time Drako was relieved of not receiving any experience points.

The girls and Drako said goodbye to Baraqiel, as they had to return to the human world and would not see him again until the next day.

"It must be nice to be able to eat Drako's food every day. I'm jealous of you, Akeno. His food is definitely one of the best I've tasted in over 2,000 years of my life."

Baraqiel spoke as he stroked his daughter's head.

"You shouldn't say such things, Otou-san. Okaa-san will be angry if she hears you say that, and I'm sure she'll punish you."

"Shit, it's true."

Baraqiel looked like he was going to suffer a lot, but he was probably going to enjoy it. After all, the red dye on his cheeks betrayed him.

.........…..

Once they arrived at Drako's house, they found Valina lying on the couch. Her body was covered in bruises that she had earned by defying Mordred.

Before the girls could do anything, Drako ordered them to go take a shower. They had been working out for much of the morning, so the smell they gave off was not the most pleasant.

"How are you?"

Drako approached Valina.

"I'm a wreck. That monster has shown me no mercy, and I have been unable to do anything about it. Even using [Divide] I couldn't stand up to her, she just crushed me with brute force."

"That's Mordred's style. Although she excels in the use of the sword, she will not hesitate the moment she has to abandon her sword to achieve victory."

"Ugh... she hasn't even used her sword against me."

For Drako, it was no surprise that Valina was defeated by Mordred. It was no exaggeration to say that there were very few in Grigori who could fight Mordred, let alone none at all. Perhaps Azazel using his Balance Breaker, and Baraqiel with his Holy Lighting could do something against Mordred. Drako also understood that Shemhazai was of a similar level to Azazel, but did not know to what extent.

Had Mordred reached the level of the gods thanks to the old man's system? Drako wasn't sure. What level was she compared to Fate's Servants?

The Servants of the Holy Grail War and the Servants of the system took on strength in different ways.

They both start from the same base. That is, at level one, they are the same. But their way of gaining strength is different from that of the system.

The Servants of the Drako system gain strength from Drako's experience. The more experience he gets, the stronger they are. Unlike the Servants of the Holy Grail War, they are not dependent on the magical energy of their Master, Drako.

The Servants of the Holy Grail War are based on three factors in which their strength is either increased or decreased.

The first one is the Cultural Sphere. The [Land] and the [Recognition] they receive there are factors that play a role in their strength. The closer they are to the stage of their legend, a geographical boost, and the more that they are known makes them "stronger", bringing them closer to the strength they had in their legend and providing them with more of their equipment displayed in their legend. Depending on the circumstances, it is possible it can bless them with additional Noble Phantasms. The boost from recognition alone is not that large in making a difference in power as when Rin Tohsaka is speculating on Gilgamesh's ability to overwhelm other Servants. Land plays a greater factor with Cú Chulainn, Heracles, and King Arthur being three heroes around the same level of strength when summoned in Europe. Each would be strengthened in Europe and benefit most greatly in battle in their home country, though Heracles' fame would allow him to display excellent power throughout all of western Europe. Cú Chulainn, gaining zero influence from not being known as well in Japan, does not fully display his "shining existence" on par with them while in Fuyuki, but would anywhere else in the world.

The second one is the Magical Energy of the Master. The more powerful the magical energy of the Master, the greater the Servant will be able to reach the strength they displayed in their legend. If they cannot provide proper energy or if the Servant lacks a Master for a time, their parameters lower in proportion. If it is a lack of energy, unknown factors will lower parameters and Skills with some Servants, while the Master's way of life may affect others. King Arthur, serving under several different Masters, displays a number of different sets of parameters due to fluctuating levels of energy. Under Shirou Emiya, she receives no energy because his Magical Paths are obstructed and cannot display her full strength. Kiritsugu Emiya is able to supply energy to have her be stronger than when under Shirou, but her luck is affected by his personality due to still not providing enough energy. Rin Tohsaka is an excellent magus that allows her to unleash her full abilities without being affected. Two Servants who would be balanced differently under other circumstances may find the balance tipped when one has better Master support.

The last one are the Container Parameters. Unmodified by the strengths and weaknesses of specific Heroic Spirits, the containers of the seven standard Servant classes of the Fuyuki Grail War possess known base parameters. The parameters of the containers have not been shown to affect summoned Servants, allowing for parameters higher and lower than those of the containers. If the hero should be utterly weak to the point of defenselessness like Stheno and Euryale, the containers can increase their strength far beyond their regular selves.

.........

Author Note!!!

I've been reflecting these last days, and I've also reread the latest DxD novels. As you know, in those novels the DxD group fights against many gods.

Notably, the battle of Apollon, Vidar and Typhon against Issei's team caught my attention. Mainly because it was the first time that Ddraig was actively involved in a battle.

But what made me think was Apollon's fight against the group made up of Ouryuu Nakiri, Xenovia Quarta and Irina Shidou.

That group of three, formed by two exorcists who had just had their first menstruation five years earlier and a boy who still didn't have hair on his balls, had fought against the Chief God of Greek mythology at that time since Zeus was on the barrier fighting against the Trihexa.

This is a little spoiler, so I'm sorry.

They were obviously defeated, but not before giving the God a hard fight.

Now, what I'm wondering is this.

If those three can stand up to a God just by having a pair of Holy Swords and a dragon spirit, couldn't a first-class Servant like Karna or Heracles stand up to him too?

Personally, I doubt very much that the weapons these guys use that are the main source of their power are more powerful than many of the Noble Phantasm.

Well, that's my personal opinion, and it's not going to change anything about this Fanfic. I just wanted to share it with you.

Greetings and thank you very much for your support.


章節 134: Valina's thougths

"Can you at least move?"

Valina was lying on the couch, and it looked like she was resting and slacking off. But Drako doubted that this was the case, as Valina was not one of the girls who wasted her time in this way.

"Sigh... seems I can't hide it from you, Big Brother. The truth is, I don't think I can move in the next few hours. At least Mordred has been kind and hasn't broken anything, but I feel like my muscles have been completely destroyed."

Just as Drako thought, Valina was too hurt to make even the slightest movement. She had even given up on turning her head!

What had Mordred done to Valina that she couldn't even move her neck? Drako didn't even want to think about it.

"Sigh... you can't go on like this all day, you'll worry the others."

Drako approached Valina.

"W-What are you doing?"

Valina was surprised when Drako placed one hand below her knees and the other on the back of her neck. Ignoring Valina's shout of surprise, Drako carried her in his arms princess style and led her out of the room.

"Drako? Let go of me! What do you think you're doing?"

Normally, the girl would be kicking and screaming her head off. However, Valina had no strength at this point, so the slightest gesture was impossible for her.

It was strange. This same Valina was the one who had proposed to Drako to have sex the day before, why did she mind being carried by him?

"I'm helping you, you idiot. What are you gonna do if I put you down?"

"I don't need your help! I can fend for myself!"

Drako realized that Valina wasn't ashamed of him carrying her in his arms. She did not want to depend on anyone, and that Drako had to help her move was an embarrassment to her. She didn't want to depend on anyone.

It was not that she did not trust him, but that she wanted to be strong in front of him.

"It's not bad to depend on others from time to time, Valina."

"You... can't understand it."

Drako continued to carry Valina quietly through the house. Valina realized that Drako was not going to let her go, so she gave up trying to convince him. For some reason, she felt comfortable being held in Drako's arms. She felt happy... and a little frustrated.

"I don't understand why you're so desperate for power, and I'm not going to force you to tell me. However, you have to keep in mind that there are people who care about you. You... you're not alone anymore. You have me, Kuroka, Lavinia, Azazel... you're someone important to many people. Even if it's only a little, let us help you with that burden on your shoulders.

Whether or not Drako's words had reached Valina's ears was unknown to the young dragon. She had decided to close her eyes, and her face was showing no emotion at all.

Finally, Valina opened her mouth to ask.

"Where are we going?"

"To my room."

Valina didn't say anything else, but she started to blush. She remembered the proposal she made to Drako the day before. Now that she thought about it, hadn't she been too forward at the time? Drako had rejected her at once, but now he was taking her to his room while she was completely helpless. Was he going to devour her? Surely that talk he had given her about friendship was some nonsense he had concocted to make her relax.

Don't misunderstand her, she didn't mind giving her virginity to Drako. In fact, she doubted there was a better match than him. But... she didn't want this to happen when she was helpless.

But she was a strong girl. Even if she was going to be raped, she wasn't going to complain. If Drako did something bad to her, Valina was going to take revenge with her own hands.

Just like Drako had said, he took Valina to his room. When he entered, he gently put her to bed, trying to make her suffer as little pain as possible.

"Can you wait here for a moment? I won't be long." Drako asked with a smile.

Valina nodded, and followed Drako's figure with her eyes as he left the room.

Well, now that he was gone, Valina could think of different ways to escape this situation.

The simplest way would be to get someone's attention.

Akeno, Natsume and Raynare where in the large indoor baths on the first basement floor. There was no chance that Valina's voice could get there without being discovered by Drako.

Valerie and Lavinia had gone somewhere again today, though Valina did not know what the place was. Drako probably knew something, but it wasn't like Valina was going to ask him.

Shirone and Kuroka were training Senjutsu on the rooftop, the same place Drako used to train. Mordred was watching them, as she had nothing better to do.

Valina could try to escape on her own, but it was going to be very difficult. Any movement she made hurt like a thousand termites were eating away at her body. It was by far the worst state Valina had been in in a long time.

Valina had had that training fight on the first basement floor, as of the various training rooms there are, one is made specifically for fighting. Of course, it's nowhere near the level that Drako and Raynare were using that morning.

Before, she reached the sofa taking advantage of the adrenaline in her body and her sheer willpower. But, once she lay down on the sofa, she became unable to move any muscles.

In other words, she couldn't do anything. She could only leave her fate in the hands of Drako.

"Are you sure about that? You can still use the forbidden movement." A voice sounded in Valina's mind.

This voice didn't surprise Valina at all. She had been hearing it for a long time.

Yes, she had probably heard Albion's voice since her father discovered that she was the bearer of the Longinus.

"No, it's too dangerous. You know I can only use it for ten seconds, more than that and the effects could be irreversible."

"It's true, wearing the armour is not something you can handle at this time. Your body is... too weak and small to do so. For that small body that cannot withstand my power as the Hakuryuukou, I would put your life in danger."

Valina, who had not yet developed, was unable to use the power of Albion due to her lack of physical maturity.

"Yes... and I don't want to die yet. Not when I still have to finish off Rizevim and his son."

Razevan Lucifer and Rizevim Livan Lucifer, Valina's father and grandfather.

They were Valina's main target, they were the source of Valina's hatred and the people she wanted to kill personally. But... Valina could not face them at this time, as they were too strong for her.

The main problem was Rizevim. His demonic power exceeded that of the original Maou, and he was considered one of the 3 "Superdevils" or "Transcendental Devils" along with Sirzechs Gremory and Ajuka Astaroth.

But, Rizevim was not as powerful as the other two Super Devils, as they can overpower him easily. Still, he was a much more difficult opponent for Valina than the other two "Superdevils". The reason for this is that he possessed an extraordinary power called "Sacred Gear Canceller".

Yes, he had the power to cancel the Sacred Gears created by the God of the Bible.

For Valina, who was quite dependent on her Sacred Gear, it was a big problem.

"But... why do you distrust Drako so much? I don't think he's the kind of man who would do this."

"It's not that I distrust him! All men are like that! Don't you remember what that bastard Razevan was doing with my mother? Don't you remember the beatings he gave her just because she healed my wounds, and then raped her in front of me?"

Valina knew that remembering Razevan and Rizevim, along with the intense pain she was suffering, had affected her thinking. In her right mind, Valina would never have doubted Drako.

Albion knew this, but he had decided to play along with Valina. It was at times like this that all the resentment a person carried inside her came to the surface, and it was also the best time to try and heal the wounds a person carried deep within their soul.

"You can't judge all men like that, Valina. You can't put that bastard as a reference for all men."

"I know... and I don't."

"So... why do you think Drako is going to do something bad to you?"

"Because... I offered him my body the other day, he must have regretted rejecting my offer. I am the descendant of Lucifer and Lilith, my body has all the attributes to attract the opposite sex."

Even in this situation, Valina could not put aside her haughty attitude.

"Besides, Drako is a dragon. Your race has been known to have an uncontrollable libid."

Valina's cheeks blushed a little.

"Hahaha, you're not wrong at all! That's engraved in our instincts. Our birth rate is among the lowest of all races, even lower than that of the devils. But... it was you who offered Drako sex in the first place, why are you so afraid now?"

"I..."

Valina didn't know how to answer Albion's question.

"I think I understand... you're scared."

"Impossible! I am the descendant of Lucifer and the bearer of the Divine Dividing! Something like this can't frighten me!"

"No, it's obvious you're scared. You're afraid the man you've fallen in love with is a scumbag like your father."

Although Valina wanted to deny it almost desperately, deep down, she knew that Albion was right.

If Drako had accepted her proposal the day before, it would be a completely different matter. First, because she would only see it as a requirement for a strength boost, and second because it would be consensual sex.

But now that she knew that she could not increase her strength through sex, the feelings she had discarded for the sake of increasing her power came back into the equation.

As Valina talked to Albion and lost herself in thought, the door to the room opened. Noticing this, Valina tensed up mentally, as she couldn't do it physically.

To Valina's surprise, Drako did not enter the room alone but was accompanied by Kuroka.

"Va-nyaa, I heard you took a severe beating. But don't worry, because I'm here!"

"What nonsense are you saying, Kuroka?"

"It's not silly! I heard it the other day on one of the shows Shirone watches, and I thought it was really cool."

Valina was confused by the development of the situation.

"Kuroka will take care of your wounds, Valina. Even if she's not very good, she knows enough to make you move again. I still have to make the food, so I'll leave you in her hands."

And Drako left as soon as he reached the room, leaving Kuroka alone with Valina.

Valina... was still in shock.

What was going on here?

Kuroka went over to Valina and put a hand on her body. Using Senjutsu, she extended her senses so that she could get a better sense of the damage Valina had suffered.

"That idiot Mordred... she doesn't know what it means to hold back? Now I'm worried about what Shirone might have suffered during all this time he's been with her..." Kuroka muttered as he inspected the wounds.

"Sigh... healing your wounds with my Senjutsu will only speed your recovery process, but you will still be unable to move for several hours. I'm going to have to use that cream... I see, Drako had already noticed that, huh..."

Valina didn't understand the meaning of Kuroka's words.

Drako had realized that the only way to heal Valina was to use Azazel cream. To use the cream, Drako would have to undress Valina, so he had called Kuroka.

Not that Drako felt embarrassed or anything similar since he had already applied the cream to Raynare that morning. Still, he felt that Valina was obviously uncomfortable.

"I'm going to take your clothes off, okay, Valina?" Kuroka asked.

Valina, a little confused, nodded her head.

Kuroka took Valina's clothes off, careful not to hurt her too much, and even took off her underwear.

Valina looked just as she had come into the world, though it was not a pretty sight. All of her skin was covered in purple bruises, and it seemed to be quite painful.

Kuroka opened a drawer in the room and withdrew a jar containing the cream Azazel had created.

"It's a little fresh, so it might be a little uncomfortable," Kuroka called it in.

She took some of the creams and began to slowly apply it to Valina's skin. As Kuroka had said, the cream was very fresh and had caused a slight chill in Valina's body.

The treatment continued silently while Kuroka applied Senjutsu over the cream to speed up Valina's recovery. In the end, it didn't take Kuroka fifteen minutes to apply the cream to all of Valina's damaged body parts.

"Well, I'm done now. Now you have to rest another ten minutes, and you can walk again, although with some difficulty. Wait an hour, and 90% of your wounds will be gone."

Kuroka seemed quite satisfied with the work she had done.

"I'm going to let you rest. You can put your clothes on once all the cream has been absorbed by your body. See you at lunchtime!"

Kuroka said goodbye with a smile.

Before she could leave the door, she heard Valina's words.

"Thank you."

To which Kuroka responded with another smile.

"You're welcome!"

............…

Valina was surprised.

As Kuroka had said, Valina could move after ten minutes of rest. 10 minutes she had used to reflect with Albion.

She had come to the conclusion that all her previous fears were useless. Drako... Drako was not like Razevan Lucifer.

Valina got dressed, left Drako's room and went down to the first floor. The wounds still bothered her, but she felt better with each passing second.

Azazel's cream was truly miraculous.

No, it wasn't just Azazel's cream. Kuroka's Senjutsu had a lot to do with it, too.

"We've been waiting for you, Va-chan!"

The one who greeted Valina was Lavinia, who was helping Drako set the eating utensils on the table. The rest were already sitting at the table, except Drako, and were waiting for Valina to eat.

Drako stepped out of the kitchen and noticed that Valina had just arrived.

"Huh, are you feeling better?"

"Yes, at least I can move. Thank you very much for your help."

Valina responded with a bright smile that surprised Drako. He was stunned for a second, but recovered quickly and replied with another smile.

"I'm glad!"

Drako's smile made Valina blush and look away.

The 10 minutes had given Valina much to ponder...

"By the way, Mordred, don't you have something to say to Valina?" Drako told the girl that had already started eating before the others.

"Yeah, yeah, how annoying you are."

"Mordred..."

"I'm coming! I'm coming!"

Mordred reluctantly rose from the table, probably because she didn't want to stop eating at this point, and approached Valina. She stood in front of the little girl and bowed deeply.

"I'm sorry I overstepped! I should have controlled my strength better, I didn't want to hurt you!"

Mordred's apology was sincere, though she was not entirely to blame. During the confrontation, Valina refused to give up so Mordred had thought she could continue fighting. The power to divide Valina's strength had surprised her, and Mordred had ended up getting too excited about the fight.

"You don't have to apologize, you've shown me that I still have a long way to go."

"Am I hearing correctly? Is this the same Lucidra-sensei we all know?"

"SAMEJIMA KOUKI, I'VE TOLD YOU MANY TIMES NOT TO CALL ME LUCIDRA-SENSEI!"

Everyone laughed when they saw Valina explode. Taking advantage of the situation, Drako approached Valina and whispered in her ear.

"Would you like to join me this afternoon on the side?"

"What for?"

"I think I've found your destined rival."

Valina's eyes glowed at the sound of it, and she soon nodded her head.


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