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we are the captain of our life and making plans what to choose and be the guidance of the Almighty.. josh, being a good son,workaholic and with a good heart will be truly blessed. and its worth the wait to have his beloved to be with him to forever.nice story...congrats author.
Short story and no chapter is locked :) story idea is good. Hard working and always thrive to improve young man with dreams. Like the ML. But FL is out of the league. Too pampered, childish and immature at all despite the ups and downs in life. Lucky is she. Clever?? Can't see it. She does not even try to be independent at all. Would say rather short minded. Story flow can be improved. It like more to read an essay rather than novel here. Like your other work much better, author.
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we are the captain of our life and making plans what to choose and be the guidance of the Almighty.. josh, being a good son,workaholic and with a good heart will be truly blessed. and its worth the wait to have his beloved to be with him to forever.nice story...congrats author.
Short story and no chapter is locked :) story idea is good. Hard working and always thrive to improve young man with dreams. Like the ML. But FL is out of the league. Too pampered, childish and immature at all despite the ups and downs in life. Lucky is she. Clever?? Can't see it. She does not even try to be independent at all. Would say rather short minded. Story flow can be improved. It like more to read an essay rather than novel here. Like your other work much better, author.
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