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I really like this it’s better than a lot of them out there and also those earlier reviews when someone says that English isn’t their first language it means their still learning ***holes
To keep it simple, good idea, bad grammar. I recommend this to new people in the fanfic world, because if you have read many good fanfics you may not read this because of the grammatical errors and that would be a shame of a possible good history.
the story has practically almost nothing of fairytail, the world and the interactions are like new japanese anime, there is chinese and japanese mythology in the way as seals on talismans and other things, mc is practically OP already from the first chapters ha haki (he developed haki at the highest level by himself with navy techniques as he does not give himself), gura gura and can develop magic without knowledge or information then out of nowhere, grammar is a bullet in the skull, proportions of the power of the unbalanced characters, the author does not know how to take into account the numbers (a band with 5000 members! already here you understand that before writing he read a korean manwha, 5k people in the Middle Ages were a citizen! what logic, especially in fairytail that practically the population is still lower) and has too much plot armor and too little logic in the story
if i say I understand the story and the plot then I'm lying, and I want to ask who the mc is and is the story about him or just fairy tale particularly. because idk who the mc is and u barely did any background story on him, u just did his traning and slavery stuff that I didn't still understand. so overall and BTW this is my opinion so don't take it to heart, but for me it not good that the word I can use for this story.
This Fanfic is good to read. I rly like the idea and the slow pace of the story and developement. The only things that are there to complain about, are the grama "he/she her/his" is not correctly used and the updates of chapters (if this is not dropped). Well i hope the author will come back and update regually again.
Este fan-fic es muy bueno a pesar de que el prota es un hijo de perra que se la pasa haciendo el tonto todo el tiempo, espero la siguiente actualización. :D
Trying to read this book is simply a torture. It is not just some grammatical mistakes (too many grammatical errors) that the book is filled with, there is total mess of perspectives (author confuses 1st, 2nd and 3rd person dialogues everytime) and every now and then author confuses characters genders (author should add gender bender tag to story). Story and plot are somewhat interesting, but I am literally having headache while trying to read.
it is a great one if you can ignore all the shit grammar (no offense, it is what it is) at first i had my doubts and after reading others comment, i comfirmed that the author was using google translate so the grammar was all over the place, umderstandable. i would recommend this to those who likes a good story and have good patience to ignore the grammar and try to read the actual fan fic. its kind of a waste that good fanfic keeps getting these grammar problems ...
I really like it and think the story has a good plotline that goes along a bit with the manga in other words I have no complaints and would read again
Everyone who gave this Fanfic a 5 star review is not using it corectly. The grammar is horrendous how can someone not get the difference between he/she and his/her .
The novel started well then, the MC had his own story, his charisma, but unfortunately I started to let go (spoiler) when the MC was sent to a different world from Edolas, already the romance with Irene as her mother I did not hang on too much, ****** remains something that I do not see a good eye but from That moment I just skimmed over the chapters, in short, a good novel at the start but which ended up deteriorating. You can read this novel anyway, it is still interesting and its negatives are just my point of view. Something else has nothing to do with the novel. Does anyone have a good fairy tail fan fic with Mirajane as a romantic interest? it can come from any site other than webnovel
The way your going with the story, I have only gotten through so many chapters but, it looks good I Like How you are turning the guy into yujiro hanma plus make it up magic. Otherwise your grammar is garbage That is the only thing you need to work on.
I don't even know who's talking and what's up with the "¡"??? And at least learn some basic stuff like if that person is a he or a she cause it's very confusing when there are two different gender talking
Such a good story. good character development. But the grammar of this book is not encouraging at all. that's the only negative thing about this book.
The whole book is in broken AF English, nearly impossible to read. 🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁
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Good. Mmmmmmmmm?mmmmm?mmmmmmmmmmmmmm Hahaha no hahaha hahaha hahaha hahaha hahaha hahaha oh oh oh oh oh
It is just not that good honestly. I don’t know what else to say. There are so many errors and the story isn’t written that well. You might like this if it is one of your first fan fics
Very nice novel An essential in any library of feelings at the height of the greatest. A book with a large central die-cut especially if we want to address the understanding of emotions and feelings.
El hermano de Erza👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌 Está muy buena la novela. 😆😆 -Recomiendo que la lean-😆😆😆😆😆👍👍👍👍👍🎊👍🎊👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
The MC has a jackass personally that I hate, and the author know it too but he doesn't change it. I mean how care if the MC dead in a old age. The saying goes the older you are the wiser you get. But no the MC doesn't care about any one, but him self. I mean he left his new sister alone to be a slave, while he off to kill people. I never reading this again. I am surprised that people like it. I mean he is not a human being inside, and in the first chapter he said we are all human being. 1STAR PEOPLE 1 STAR OR 0 STAR. BULL* IS WHAT I CALL THIS NOVEL.
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Ну че сказать, новелла норм. Читать можно. Только одно не понятно как это Колумб отправился в прошлое, трахну@ свою мать и сам стал его сыном. Хозяин напиши еще пусть гг всю гильдию будет драить.
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A very good idea, which is well implemented. A lot of new things in the original plot, added by the author, very cool stuff, well, bang boom pau pau, very cool. But the gods are better off, damn it.
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Even if you say that English isn't your first language there Is either application that you can download like Grammarly which can edit as you type to show you the errors in your writing or hell I've read other books that the author barely know English that someone offers to edit the story without any fees to fix these issues, but your story doesn't even offer any insight to the character or the stories world.
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Its a cool idea and the beginning was cool. However, once the MC is able to slaughter 15 mages/warriors at ten years old with only HAKI I couldn't handle it much longer. Then comes the drop in grammar and the confusing POV switches of first and third person. By chapter 17 the MC hasn't even touched this worlds main power system and only utilizes One Piece crap powers to a great mastery. Mixing two worlds power systems never works out well as the author has already beefed up amd weakened the MC to fit the situation he finds himself in. I guess the only good thing in this fic is how well the MC personality stands out and remains consistent. Sadly the same can't be said about the 100 generic chinese villains he encounters on a regular basis. If you can handle poor grammar and genericness then you'll like this fic.
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This is a really good story if you set aside the writing mistakes, some of the readers are b*tching about the writing quality and is ignorant at the fact that the author is using google translate to translate the novel. Just wanna say: Keep up the good work Author, I know your grammars and writing qualities are bad but you can learn along the ways and what not.
I really like this it’s better than a lot of them out there and also those earlier reviews when someone says that English isn’t their first language it means their still learning ***holes
To keep it simple, good idea, bad grammar. I recommend this to new people in the fanfic world, because if you have read many good fanfics you may not read this because of the grammatical errors and that would be a shame of a possible good history.
the story has practically almost nothing of fairytail, the world and the interactions are like new japanese anime, there is chinese and japanese mythology in the way as seals on talismans and other things, mc is practically OP already from the first chapters ha haki (he developed haki at the highest level by himself with navy techniques as he does not give himself), gura gura and can develop magic without knowledge or information then out of nowhere, grammar is a bullet in the skull, proportions of the power of the unbalanced characters, the author does not know how to take into account the numbers (a band with 5000 members! already here you understand that before writing he read a korean manwha, 5k people in the Middle Ages were a citizen! what logic, especially in fairytail that practically the population is still lower) and has too much plot armor and too little logic in the story
if i say I understand the story and the plot then I'm lying, and I want to ask who the mc is and is the story about him or just fairy tale particularly. because idk who the mc is and u barely did any background story on him, u just did his traning and slavery stuff that I didn't still understand. so overall and BTW this is my opinion so don't take it to heart, but for me it not good that the word I can use for this story.
This Fanfic is good to read. I rly like the idea and the slow pace of the story and developement. The only things that are there to complain about, are the grama "he/she her/his" is not correctly used and the updates of chapters (if this is not dropped). Well i hope the author will come back and update regually again.
Este fan-fic es muy bueno a pesar de que el prota es un hijo de perra que se la pasa haciendo el tonto todo el tiempo, espero la siguiente actualización. :D
Trying to read this book is simply a torture. It is not just some grammatical mistakes (too many grammatical errors) that the book is filled with, there is total mess of perspectives (author confuses 1st, 2nd and 3rd person dialogues everytime) and every now and then author confuses characters genders (author should add gender bender tag to story). Story and plot are somewhat interesting, but I am literally having headache while trying to read.
it is a great one if you can ignore all the shit grammar (no offense, it is what it is) at first i had my doubts and after reading others comment, i comfirmed that the author was using google translate so the grammar was all over the place, umderstandable. i would recommend this to those who likes a good story and have good patience to ignore the grammar and try to read the actual fan fic. its kind of a waste that good fanfic keeps getting these grammar problems ...
I really like it and think the story has a good plotline that goes along a bit with the manga in other words I have no complaints and would read again
Everyone who gave this Fanfic a 5 star review is not using it corectly. The grammar is horrendous how can someone not get the difference between he/she and his/her .
The novel started well then, the MC had his own story, his charisma, but unfortunately I started to let go (spoiler) when the MC was sent to a different world from Edolas, already the romance with Irene as her mother I did not hang on too much, ****** remains something that I do not see a good eye but from That moment I just skimmed over the chapters, in short, a good novel at the start but which ended up deteriorating. You can read this novel anyway, it is still interesting and its negatives are just my point of view. Something else has nothing to do with the novel. Does anyone have a good fairy tail fan fic with Mirajane as a romantic interest? it can come from any site other than webnovel
The way your going with the story, I have only gotten through so many chapters but, it looks good I Like How you are turning the guy into yujiro hanma plus make it up magic. Otherwise your grammar is garbage That is the only thing you need to work on.
I don't even know who's talking and what's up with the "¡"??? And at least learn some basic stuff like if that person is a he or a she cause it's very confusing when there are two different gender talking
Such a good story. good character development. But the grammar of this book is not encouraging at all. that's the only negative thing about this book.
The whole book is in broken AF English, nearly impossible to read. 🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁
Anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime anime fairy tail.
Good. Mmmmmmmmm?mmmmm?mmmmmmmmmmmmmm Hahaha no hahaha hahaha hahaha hahaha hahaha hahaha oh oh oh oh oh
It is just not that good honestly. I don’t know what else to say. There are so many errors and the story isn’t written that well. You might like this if it is one of your first fan fics
Very nice novel An essential in any library of feelings at the height of the greatest. A book with a large central die-cut especially if we want to address the understanding of emotions and feelings.
El hermano de Erza👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌 Está muy buena la novela. 😆😆 -Recomiendo que la lean-😆😆😆😆😆👍👍👍👍👍🎊👍🎊👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
The MC has a jackass personally that I hate, and the author know it too but he doesn't change it. I mean how care if the MC dead in a old age. The saying goes the older you are the wiser you get. But no the MC doesn't care about any one, but him self. I mean he left his new sister alone to be a slave, while he off to kill people. I never reading this again. I am surprised that people like it. I mean he is not a human being inside, and in the first chapter he said we are all human being. 1STAR PEOPLE 1 STAR OR 0 STAR. BULL* IS WHAT I CALL THIS NOVEL.
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Ну че сказать, новелла норм. Читать можно. Только одно не понятно как это Колумб отправился в прошлое, трахну@ свою мать и сам стал его сыном. Хозяин напиши еще пусть гг всю гильдию будет драить.
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A very good idea, which is well implemented. A lot of new things in the original plot, added by the author, very cool stuff, well, bang boom pau pau, very cool. But the gods are better off, damn it.
揭示劇透 Even if you say that English isn't your first language there Is either application that you can download like Grammarly which can edit as you type to show you the errors in your writing or hell I've read other books that the author barely know English that someone offers to edit the story without any fees to fix these issues, but your story doesn't even offer any insight to the character or the stories world.
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Its a cool idea and the beginning was cool. However, once the MC is able to slaughter 15 mages/warriors at ten years old with only HAKI I couldn't handle it much longer. Then comes the drop in grammar and the confusing POV switches of first and third person. By chapter 17 the MC hasn't even touched this worlds main power system and only utilizes One Piece crap powers to a great mastery. Mixing two worlds power systems never works out well as the author has already beefed up amd weakened the MC to fit the situation he finds himself in. I guess the only good thing in this fic is how well the MC personality stands out and remains consistent. Sadly the same can't be said about the 100 generic chinese villains he encounters on a regular basis. If you can handle poor grammar and genericness then you'll like this fic.
✨✨👍👍🤩🤩👌🤔✌️🤔🤩👍✨✨✨👍👍🤩✌️🔥🔥🤔🤔👌👌🤩👍✨💥✨👍🤩🤩👌🔥✌️✌️😍🤔👌👌🤩👍👍👍👍🤩👌👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍🤩🤩👌👌👌🤩👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👌👌🤔🤔🔥✌️✌️✌️✌️👌🤩🤩👍👍👍👍👍👍
This is a really good story if you set aside the writing mistakes, some of the readers are b*tching about the writing quality and is ignorant at the fact that the author is using google translate to translate the novel. Just wanna say: Keep up the good work Author, I know your grammars and writing qualities are bad but you can learn along the ways and what not.