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Es buena pero un poco hipócrita que le hagas aniquilar el clan Uchiha por algo que se causó a si mismo es decir matar a una persona que no li iva a dañar sólo por que quieres que sentido matar solo por que quieres justificar la muertes sin sentido de personajes. tiene si el clan Uchiha iba a ser aniquilado de todas formas es decir haces que su familia quede echa mierda por su egoísmo eso pudo quedar en ningún problema pero la cagastes
THIS IS QUIE FUN READ THIS AND YOU WILL ENJOY IT HAHAHAHAHABA . . . . . . . . . . .. ...... ....... . ....................................... . ........ ...
pooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooop trash mega toxic waste diego (go die) jiwodjuiwndhuianhu HAHAHAHAHA JUST KIDDING (JK=LIFE) MATE SENPAI
gon poop on yo bed bruda, me and jamal are ready be prepared, also we will steal yo novel so say guud bay mate...............................
he performed ~ shadow clone ~ at 10 months of age and was talking to adults at 1 year. bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****
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This novel is very good, for me some of the beans that I have read. **: Thanks for making this great novel.👌👌🤣🤣🤣😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁👌👌👌👌👌👌🤣🤣😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
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Almost everything is great ! Apart from 1 yr old mc killing someone, all is good !!!!!!!!!!!!!! (I wanna make this as long as 140 letters hehehehe)
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the bullsheet factor of this novel is too high a 1 day old kid that can crawl and kicked by an ***** ninja is still alive wow so much bullsheet. the bullsheet factor of this novel is too high a 1 day old kid that can crawl and kicked by an ***** ninja is still alive wow so much bullsheet. the bullsheet factor of this novel is too high a 1 day old kid that can crawl and kicked by an ***** ninja is still alive wow so much bullsheet.
This god likes this ..................... ..................... ..................... ..................... ..................... .....................
The start is too looooooooooooong plus too much angst and bull**** religion nonsense. Also, a 1-year-old mc being kicked flying and surviving is crazy!
Love it ......................................................................................................................................................
♪～(´ε｀ )(＾3＾♪┌(・。・)┘♪⁽⁽ଘ( ˊᵕˋ )ଓ⁾⁾₍₍◞( •௰• )◟₎₎₍₍ ◝( ﾟ∀ ﾟ )◟ ⁾⁾⁽⁽◝( •௰• )◜⁾⁾♪ヽ(･ˇ∀ˇ･ゞ)\(ϋ)/♩└|∵|┐♪♪┌|∵|┘♪ ヾ( ͝° ͜ʖ͡°)ノ♪(＾∇＾)ﾉ♪\(๑╹◡╹๑)ﾉ♬( /^ω^)/♪♪♪ \(^ω^\ )(*ﾉ・ω・)ﾉ♫┌(★ｏ☆)┘┌|o^▽^o|┘♪┏(＾0＾)┛(｢`･ω･)｢(ノ^_^)ノ└( ＾ω＾)」ヘ(￣ω￣ヘ)ƪ(‾.‾“)┐＼(ﾟｰﾟ＼)ƪ(˘⌣˘)ʃヾ(･ω･*)ﾉ(ノ^_^)ノ(~‾▿‾)~ヽ(*ﾟｰﾟ*)ﾉ〜(꒪꒳꒪)〜
Other than the inconsistency of the story,the story's MC is an OC but it is interesting enough that you can overlook the holes in the story,i recommend hiring an editor to prevent it from happening again but overall it is a good story,i hope the author will not be discouraged and keep on writing
This is one of THE best if not THE best fanfic I have ever read. Honestly I couldn't stop reading and lost track of time. Keep writing this novel? Book? Work of art! The story is fantastic. The character is phenomenal. Everything about this story screams hidden gem. I hope you don't stop writing this and continue writing this amazing story. Keep being a fantastic author. Have a amazing day/night.
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Es buena pero un poco hipócrita que le hagas aniquilar el clan Uchiha por algo que se causó a si mismo es decir matar a una persona que no li iva a dañar sólo por que quieres que sentido matar solo por que quieres justificar la muertes sin sentido de personajes. tiene si el clan Uchiha iba a ser aniquilado de todas formas es decir haces que su familia quede echa mierda por su egoísmo eso pudo quedar en ningún problema pero la cagastes
THIS IS QUIE FUN READ THIS AND YOU WILL ENJOY IT HAHAHAHAHABA . . . . . . . . . . .. ...... ....... . ....................................... . ........ ...
pooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooop trash mega toxic waste diego (go die) jiwodjuiwndhuianhu HAHAHAHAHA JUST KIDDING (JK=LIFE) MATE SENPAI
gon poop on yo bed bruda, me and jamal are ready be prepared, also we will steal yo novel so say guud bay mate...............................
he performed ~ shadow clone ~ at 10 months of age and was talking to adults at 1 year. bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****bull****
Bro Bro Bro Bro Bro Bro Bro👌👌👌😂👌😂😂👌👌👌👌👌🤣😂👌😂😂👌👌😂😂👌😂🤣😂👌😂🤣🤣👌👌😂👌👌😂👌😂👌👌🤣🤣👌👌👌🤣👌😂👌😂👌👌😂👌😂👌😂👌
This novel is very good, for me some of the beans that I have read. **: Thanks for making this great novel.👌👌🤣🤣🤣😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁👌👌👌👌👌👌🤣🤣😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
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Crack, haker, master, **: Thanks for the chapter👌😁👌😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
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Almost everything is great ! Apart from 1 yr old mc killing someone, all is good !!!!!!!!!!!!!! (I wanna make this as long as 140 letters hehehehe)
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the bullsheet factor of this novel is too high a 1 day old kid that can crawl and kicked by an ***** ninja is still alive wow so much bullsheet. the bullsheet factor of this novel is too high a 1 day old kid that can crawl and kicked by an ***** ninja is still alive wow so much bullsheet. the bullsheet factor of this novel is too high a 1 day old kid that can crawl and kicked by an ***** ninja is still alive wow so much bullsheet.
This god likes this ..................... ..................... ..................... ..................... ..................... .....................
The start is too looooooooooooong plus too much angst and bull**** religion nonsense. Also, a 1-year-old mc being kicked flying and surviving is crazy!
Love it ......................................................................................................................................................
♪～(´ε｀ )(＾3＾♪┌(・。・)┘♪⁽⁽ଘ( ˊᵕˋ )ଓ⁾⁾₍₍◞( •௰• )◟₎₎₍₍ ◝( ﾟ∀ ﾟ )◟ ⁾⁾⁽⁽◝( •௰• )◜⁾⁾♪ヽ(･ˇ∀ˇ･ゞ)\(ϋ)/♩└|∵|┐♪♪┌|∵|┘♪ ヾ( ͝° ͜ʖ͡°)ノ♪(＾∇＾)ﾉ♪\(๑╹◡╹๑)ﾉ♬( /^ω^)/♪♪♪ \(^ω^\ )(*ﾉ・ω・)ﾉ♫┌(★ｏ☆)┘┌|o^▽^o|┘♪┏(＾0＾)┛(｢`･ω･)｢(ノ^_^)ノ└( ＾ω＾)」ヘ(￣ω￣ヘ)ƪ(‾.‾“)┐＼(ﾟｰﾟ＼)ƪ(˘⌣˘)ʃヾ(･ω･*)ﾉ(ノ^_^)ノ(~‾▿‾)~ヽ(*ﾟｰﾟ*)ﾉ〜(꒪꒳꒪)〜
Other than the inconsistency of the story,the story's MC is an OC but it is interesting enough that you can overlook the holes in the story,i recommend hiring an editor to prevent it from happening again but overall it is a good story,i hope the author will not be discouraged and keep on writing
This is one of THE best if not THE best fanfic I have ever read. Honestly I couldn't stop reading and lost track of time. Keep writing this novel? Book? Work of art! The story is fantastic. The character is phenomenal. Everything about this story screams hidden gem. I hope you don't stop writing this and continue writing this amazing story. Keep being a fantastic author. Have a amazing day/night.
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