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I love it! It' has an relatively op system but a great story to counter it. Summary: You die because your pretty useless and depressed in your current life so you go and wish upon and shooting star and... you get the wish you've been asking for. More PLEASEEE
Other then the author being busy with RL (totally understandable) and having somewhat of an inconsistent update and the multiple POVs that are sometimes not needed its fricking amazing! I've been really enjoying the cute and lightweight story of the MC so far and I honestly can't wait for future updates! So far so good author keep up the damn good work
seems author has dropped writing this, started 3 years ago and only just a few chapters... so sad
This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
OP System with Cooking OP System with Cooking OP System with Cooking OP System with Cooking OP System with Cooking OP System with Cooking OP System with Cooking
Ceritanya menarik 👍🥰 🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰😍😍🥰🥰😍🥰😍😍🥰😍😍🥰😍😍🥰😍🥰🥰😍🥰🥰🥰😍🥰🥰😍😍🥰🥰😍🥰🥰😍😍🥰🥰🥰😍🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰😍🥰🥰🥰😍🥰🥰🥰😍Tambah menarik kalau update lebih sering 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭
Love the book so far. Little world knolage but that is understandable due to his circumstances. Do not let writing be a chore if you don't want to write then don't. Your readers will understand and if not that is their loss.
The story is interesting as the MC is dedicated & persistent in leveling his skill.The MC also learn skill fast through the system.Their parents are also funny and lovable as whatever the MC did is lovable to them.
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And here I thought the beginner story is that he saw the wishing star, wish for a second life then suddenly the wishing star change direction and hit him instead
It's pretty much safe to say that its dropped, since he posted an update too him being gone over 2 months ago. If he hasn't even posted 1 chapter in 2 months. Then he prob wont be posting many in the future so don't waste your time, it was an ok story but not enough to really say if it was good or bad yet, for me anyways.
In all honesty the 1st chapter was a little rough and very simple, but as each chapter goes on you can tell the author begins to improve; The characters become a little more developed and the world that the Author is crafting begins to grow a little bigger. Their story begins to develop and start to take form with each chapter that's made and it's easily to tell that they are learning and improving. It's a great little story that has room to grow and continues to do so. You may have to wait a bit but it's worth the wait.
Not a fan of first person, but thus us quite an adorable story. It's rare that I enjoy POV switching, but for the overall story, this works admirably. Light hearted, dedicated characters, but if slap stick humor, all in all I delightedly recommend this story.
👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍ Good story.
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like a lot plz continue ............... expecting alot hope mc reach his dream i eabt to also see how he will use his...programming skill..... mc parents are best but hope they also get a lot screen time...
Keep up the good work............... ................................................................................................................................ .............
Great story Don't drop. .......................................... ................................... ..........................................
Keep up the good work..................................................................... .....................................................................................................................
nice to see you novo that is not fanfic really appreciate the effort and look forward to more chapters to the other hope you do well and continue writing i've added you to my reading list fighting !
I am the shameless author reviewing his own work. An original web novel that I wrote to improve my skills. I'm an ******* writer. A generic and unique original novel about Hoshi and his second chance at life with a system. He has a dream of becoming a world-famous chef. The chef system will help him reach that goal. Expect foodgasm, generic tropes, long food descriptions and memes. Maybe a harem? lol This novel contains Magic, Comedy, Cooking, Business, System, Second Chance and Game Elements.
The story has a good path thats has many optional path it could go! Seems like MC going to be doing some early gains in his child hood and I wish to see his age progression gradually over chapters onward... but to many reader that would get tedious for them so if Author could do 1-1# to the beginning! Some highlight reel of family moments and parental shenanigans!
I love it! It' has an relatively op system but a great story to counter it. Summary: You die because your pretty useless and depressed in your current life so you go and wish upon and shooting star and... you get the wish you've been asking for. More PLEASEEE
Other then the author being busy with RL (totally understandable) and having somewhat of an inconsistent update and the multiple POVs that are sometimes not needed its fricking amazing! I've been really enjoying the cute and lightweight story of the MC so far and I honestly can't wait for future updates! So far so good author keep up the damn good work
seems author has dropped writing this, started 3 years ago and only just a few chapters... so sad
This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
OP System with Cooking OP System with Cooking OP System with Cooking OP System with Cooking OP System with Cooking OP System with Cooking OP System with Cooking
Ceritanya menarik 👍🥰 🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰😍😍🥰🥰😍🥰😍😍🥰😍😍🥰😍😍🥰😍🥰🥰😍🥰🥰🥰😍🥰🥰😍😍🥰🥰😍🥰🥰😍😍🥰🥰🥰😍🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰😍🥰🥰🥰😍🥰🥰🥰😍Tambah menarik kalau update lebih sering 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭
Love the book so far. Little world knolage but that is understandable due to his circumstances. Do not let writing be a chore if you don't want to write then don't. Your readers will understand and if not that is their loss.
The story is interesting as the MC is dedicated & persistent in leveling his skill.The MC also learn skill fast through the system.Their parents are also funny and lovable as whatever the MC did is lovable to them.
揭示劇透 And here I thought the beginner story is that he saw the wishing star, wish for a second life then suddenly the wishing star change direction and hit him instead
It's pretty much safe to say that its dropped, since he posted an update too him being gone over 2 months ago. If he hasn't even posted 1 chapter in 2 months. Then he prob wont be posting many in the future so don't waste your time, it was an ok story but not enough to really say if it was good or bad yet, for me anyways.
In all honesty the 1st chapter was a little rough and very simple, but as each chapter goes on you can tell the author begins to improve; The characters become a little more developed and the world that the Author is crafting begins to grow a little bigger. Their story begins to develop and start to take form with each chapter that's made and it's easily to tell that they are learning and improving. It's a great little story that has room to grow and continues to do so. You may have to wait a bit but it's worth the wait.
Not a fan of first person, but thus us quite an adorable story. It's rare that I enjoy POV switching, but for the overall story, this works admirably. Light hearted, dedicated characters, but if slap stick humor, all in all I delightedly recommend this story.
👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍✍ Good story.
揭示劇透 😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊
like a lot plz continue ............... expecting alot hope mc reach his dream i eabt to also see how he will use his...programming skill..... mc parents are best but hope they also get a lot screen time...
Keep up the good work............... ................................................................................................................................ .............
Great story Don't drop. .......................................... ................................... ..........................................
Keep up the good work..................................................................... .....................................................................................................................
nice to see you novo that is not fanfic really appreciate the effort and look forward to more chapters to the other hope you do well and continue writing i've added you to my reading list fighting !
I am the shameless author reviewing his own work. An original web novel that I wrote to improve my skills. I'm an ******* writer. A generic and unique original novel about Hoshi and his second chance at life with a system. He has a dream of becoming a world-famous chef. The chef system will help him reach that goal. Expect foodgasm, generic tropes, long food descriptions and memes. Maybe a harem? lol This novel contains Magic, Comedy, Cooking, Business, System, Second Chance and Game Elements.
The story has a good path thats has many optional path it could go! Seems like MC going to be doing some early gains in his child hood and I wish to see his age progression gradually over chapters onward... but to many reader that would get tedious for them so if Author could do 1-1# to the beginning! Some highlight reel of family moments and parental shenanigans!