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The only reason Writing Quality is a 4 Star instead of 5 is because some things can get a bit long winded during explanations. Don't get me wrong on it however, I enjoy that but I know a lot of people who don't, to me it show you put thought into how you want things to be explained instead of just rushing through them. Everything else is 5 Stars due to you having a schedule and sticking to it unless something happens or like the anniversary where you released an extra chapter, the story development shows you've researched what you are writing about and try to get everything to roughly line up with the world the story takes place,even if the concept wasn't in the world to begin with. Character design is great, you have characters that have flaws and to me it makes them seem more authentic, you also have it so they work on them which is another great thing. World background as I said towards the top you research the world to make things seem more natural so that is a solid, and considering you want to quite possibly take this to other worlds as long as the same detail is put into each of them as the Danmachi world I will be extremely happy to continue reading this story. Overall the story is awesome, if time is needed to ensure that it continues to be as it is in coming chapters than by all means take however long you need, just let us know so we aren't stuck in limbo waiting for the next chapter. Keep up the good work and I hope you continue to have fun writing this story in the future.
I'm really surprised this story this story isn't higher ranked. This story comes as a much welcome and much needed oasis amidst the sheer deluge of garbage that is almost all the Danmachi fics on this site. Writing quality is excellent. The author's command of English alone is enough to make this fic much better than the others here. The author also updates regularly. He aims to update twice a week (Sunday and Thursday). Although he sometimes doesn't follow this exact schedule, he's typically fastidious in following it. His updates are also sizable chapters, not short insubstantial snippets meant to keep the story bumped up. Story design is also excellent. I can't emphasize enough how nice it is to finally see a Danmachi fic without Bell or Hestia. The massive exposition dumps do slow down the pacing a bit, but those who don't want to get bogged down in the weeds can easily skip those bits. Character design is also solid. The MC doesn't seem to have schizophrenia and is pretty consistent throughout the story. He is a bit on the overpowered end, but that's part of the story's charm. There could be more of the supporting characters, but they generally come across as likable. The author has also gone all put on worldbuilding. There's a lot of the dungeon that canon didn't cover, and the author has put in Herculean effort to fill in the gaps as needed. Overall, I highly recommend checking out this story.
This could have been a really good novel. But it suffers from something that a lot of slice of life novels do. When their is no action when he is not getting stronger, it's boring. Very, very boring. The only thing that you have to supplement is drama, the drama that he's gonna leave Loki's familia to start his own, or some other stuff. And really it's not enough. His relationship with the main female character is also boring. I don't find their development to be bad, just plain boring. What's the sad thing is. The combat is pretty interesting, but the chapters are so long and so uninteresting that you get small interesting parts within each chapter and long uninteresting parts that smother it. Like an entire chapter where he's fighting in the dungeon, then he finds an interesting hidden door ooh, interesting. And he..... Leaves and doesn't explore it. All because he can do the boring task of mapping the entire dungeon floor he's on. I mean, why make something interesting when you can have him? Do something that's really, really boring. There's also small mistakes that that take away interesting things. Like when he rinks up to level 2. It says he has two choices to on class. Swordsman class and the hunter class. Now it describes what the swordsman class does for him. But he says it's not the right choice for him. So he chooses the hunter class and it never tells you what that class is. I had to go and look it up. You get all excited about oh, if the hunter class is really cool. And it doesn't tell you. And if you're not gonna make a lot of the story more about him either getting stronger or fighting strong people then you have to make the slice of life parts of the chapter's shorter. Having somebody walk around town is boring. Instead, have them set up a business that's slice of life. Have them learn a different craft like blacksmithing. Something other than just walking around talking to people or training people. Because the way you have him set up as a trainer is also not really fun. It feels like they're dragging him down more than he's supporting them. I also because of how all his growth is blanketed in monotony its not really excitings and seem almost slow. It actually takes some of the wonder out of it. I mean him getting Ichor was supposed to be really cool an i expected him to share it with Ais but then he had all those random misfit people with him. It kinda made a important moment less then it was supposed to be.
Ais' romance and mc backstory is done really well actually. Characters here don't act very cardboardy unlike what you can expect from most fanfics. But the constant barrage of useless info is just a lot. and literally a whole chapter introducing 10 supporters you will forget about right away. Be ready to skip paragraphs cause every new dungeon floor is literally a wiki page on the monsters that appear there. Then the mc fights the strongest rare monster on the floor, then repeat. Other then that its a great read as far as the genre goes. Characters like Averin and Jakk end up being surprisingly likable. Though you can only save so many orphans to babysit before I start to roll my eyes. Isaac claims to have some purpose for them but he doesn't since he is way stronger then them and does not even use them as messengers.
It's a good story, one of the best danmachi story's, the only thing that lets it down is "romance" it's like two robots interacting, two broken dolls coming together, having tiona fall in love with him near the start and persue him the entire novel was also annother mistake, having such better choice than ais constantly thrown in your face was annoying because he stuck with ais, it's like the original novel everyone preferred ryuu to ais, oh well, not everything can be to your liking.
No other words, just really loved it! I liked the story, the characters, and the plot! I hope to read more of this! I will eagerly wait for future chapters and probably re-read this story over and over again! Thank you for writing this story Author! [img=update]
I was going to read it and then I saw the author say that they were going to give other characters harems and temporarily move the MC to the background and I just don't like reading about the love life of other characters that aren't the MC especially when the author said that the MC will only have two girls so it kinda seems like the mc is being outshined. the story itself seems like it is great and is a pretty nice concept so while I won't read it I will give it this 4 star review.
very good fanfic , I recommend reading it. Only downside is that the updating is slow and it only has 185 chapters. wished it had more tbh.
Bueno, sinceramente el mejor fanfic de danmachi que he leído, buen desarrollo y el romance esta bueno algo lento pero todo bien ni muy apresurado ni tampoco demasiado lento todo perfectamente calculado Lo que mas me gusta es que la protagonista es ais y no es harem al fin algo que no es harem. Y lo recomiendo de todo mi kokoro para aquellos que le gusten los personajes que solo se enfocan en sus seres queridos y nada más, no juegan al héroe o cosas por el estilo, exactamente lo que me gusta es el romance y el protagonista es egoísta y solo le importa su fuerza para proteger a ais y nada más brothers.[img=recommend]
por fin conseguiste tu portada, quedo muy bonito. algún día me pondré terminare de leerme los nuevos capítulos.................................................
good writing, nice story but It was too slow for my taste. i have read 7 chapters🥴.........,................................................
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Its getting better, but the Tione situation still bothers me lol, she is the same kind of rapist animal they just slaughtered in the 100s so Mc should honestly tell her she acts just like them and stay away from him, since they are all filthy scum, just course she havent succed yet dont change the fact that she think is her right to be a rapist animal.... ( Disgusting kind of ppl)
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An interesting system concept with a fascinating storyline setup and implementation. The mc whose morals seem ambiguous shows how nobody wants to be alone. Am hoping that the unique changes lead to overall happiness. Thank you
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A good read with an interesting setup for a system story. A good reason is presented as to why the main characters show interest with each other. Also the slower pace of romance is more wholesome. Looking forward to any other works the author does.
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This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
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Author i have read many replies you have given to people who were criticising your work ... and i find you to be a very sensible and mature and for that although the story was not to my taste BUT From your explanations i came to understand that according to what you wanted to portray in the story .... you have done a very good job ... i like stories where MC although not OP but is very cunning ,calculative, no harem , if romance then love whole heartedly, i prefer if the mc keeps some secrets like reincarnation to himself, i don't know why but it just feels right to me to do so whether it from the girl you love or not some things should be kept secret. Well still Although not the type of mc i like but nonetheless a very good story very well expressed 5 stars from me for the COOL AUTHOR 😁😁☺️🤗 .... and pls author if you can write a story how i described i would really appreciate and love to read it
danmachi 2 wife right ,how you just make every world he get two wife ? Wish life after all not babysit other and yes he can have men friend but don't gave them harem lol The only who can have harem need something big like Godking power something like that's well in our world money power but not a few million but trillion of money then you can have harem in our world Dubai rich men have 20 wife , don't jealous because that's was his hard work to get all of that's and consider month money he get around 200 hundred billion like that's
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FINALLY! A good Danmachi novel, unlike from a certain popular Danmachi novel, this version of Ais isn't behaving like a slut and immediately ask to have sex to the person who is her love interest. Honestly, hope it will last long and stay good. I root Isaac x Ais all the way, since she is also my waifu and she herself think she isn't worthy? Girl, your quality as waifu is top notch. I'd like to marry and target Ais as waifu to if somewhat traveled into Danmachi. Author, don't drop or hiatus of this novel! This is hidden gem and master piece for me. Although, if you want to make this well knowned, I suggest you change the category from Others to Anime & Comics.
The only reason Writing Quality is a 4 Star instead of 5 is because some things can get a bit long winded during explanations. Don't get me wrong on it however, I enjoy that but I know a lot of people who don't, to me it show you put thought into how you want things to be explained instead of just rushing through them. Everything else is 5 Stars due to you having a schedule and sticking to it unless something happens or like the anniversary where you released an extra chapter, the story development shows you've researched what you are writing about and try to get everything to roughly line up with the world the story takes place,even if the concept wasn't in the world to begin with. Character design is great, you have characters that have flaws and to me it makes them seem more authentic, you also have it so they work on them which is another great thing. World background as I said towards the top you research the world to make things seem more natural so that is a solid, and considering you want to quite possibly take this to other worlds as long as the same detail is put into each of them as the Danmachi world I will be extremely happy to continue reading this story. Overall the story is awesome, if time is needed to ensure that it continues to be as it is in coming chapters than by all means take however long you need, just let us know so we aren't stuck in limbo waiting for the next chapter. Keep up the good work and I hope you continue to have fun writing this story in the future.
I'm really surprised this story this story isn't higher ranked. This story comes as a much welcome and much needed oasis amidst the sheer deluge of garbage that is almost all the Danmachi fics on this site. Writing quality is excellent. The author's command of English alone is enough to make this fic much better than the others here. The author also updates regularly. He aims to update twice a week (Sunday and Thursday). Although he sometimes doesn't follow this exact schedule, he's typically fastidious in following it. His updates are also sizable chapters, not short insubstantial snippets meant to keep the story bumped up. Story design is also excellent. I can't emphasize enough how nice it is to finally see a Danmachi fic without Bell or Hestia. The massive exposition dumps do slow down the pacing a bit, but those who don't want to get bogged down in the weeds can easily skip those bits. Character design is also solid. The MC doesn't seem to have schizophrenia and is pretty consistent throughout the story. He is a bit on the overpowered end, but that's part of the story's charm. There could be more of the supporting characters, but they generally come across as likable. The author has also gone all put on worldbuilding. There's a lot of the dungeon that canon didn't cover, and the author has put in Herculean effort to fill in the gaps as needed. Overall, I highly recommend checking out this story.
This could have been a really good novel. But it suffers from something that a lot of slice of life novels do. When their is no action when he is not getting stronger, it's boring. Very, very boring. The only thing that you have to supplement is drama, the drama that he's gonna leave Loki's familia to start his own, or some other stuff. And really it's not enough. His relationship with the main female character is also boring. I don't find their development to be bad, just plain boring. What's the sad thing is. The combat is pretty interesting, but the chapters are so long and so uninteresting that you get small interesting parts within each chapter and long uninteresting parts that smother it. Like an entire chapter where he's fighting in the dungeon, then he finds an interesting hidden door ooh, interesting. And he..... Leaves and doesn't explore it. All because he can do the boring task of mapping the entire dungeon floor he's on. I mean, why make something interesting when you can have him? Do something that's really, really boring. There's also small mistakes that that take away interesting things. Like when he rinks up to level 2. It says he has two choices to on class. Swordsman class and the hunter class. Now it describes what the swordsman class does for him. But he says it's not the right choice for him. So he chooses the hunter class and it never tells you what that class is. I had to go and look it up. You get all excited about oh, if the hunter class is really cool. And it doesn't tell you. And if you're not gonna make a lot of the story more about him either getting stronger or fighting strong people then you have to make the slice of life parts of the chapter's shorter. Having somebody walk around town is boring. Instead, have them set up a business that's slice of life. Have them learn a different craft like blacksmithing. Something other than just walking around talking to people or training people. Because the way you have him set up as a trainer is also not really fun. It feels like they're dragging him down more than he's supporting them. I also because of how all his growth is blanketed in monotony its not really excitings and seem almost slow. It actually takes some of the wonder out of it. I mean him getting Ichor was supposed to be really cool an i expected him to share it with Ais but then he had all those random misfit people with him. It kinda made a important moment less then it was supposed to be.
Ais' romance and mc backstory is done really well actually. Characters here don't act very cardboardy unlike what you can expect from most fanfics. But the constant barrage of useless info is just a lot. and literally a whole chapter introducing 10 supporters you will forget about right away. Be ready to skip paragraphs cause every new dungeon floor is literally a wiki page on the monsters that appear there. Then the mc fights the strongest rare monster on the floor, then repeat. Other then that its a great read as far as the genre goes. Characters like Averin and Jakk end up being surprisingly likable. Though you can only save so many orphans to babysit before I start to roll my eyes. Isaac claims to have some purpose for them but he doesn't since he is way stronger then them and does not even use them as messengers.
It's a good story, one of the best danmachi story's, the only thing that lets it down is "romance" it's like two robots interacting, two broken dolls coming together, having tiona fall in love with him near the start and persue him the entire novel was also annother mistake, having such better choice than ais constantly thrown in your face was annoying because he stuck with ais, it's like the original novel everyone preferred ryuu to ais, oh well, not everything can be to your liking.
No other words, just really loved it! I liked the story, the characters, and the plot! I hope to read more of this! I will eagerly wait for future chapters and probably re-read this story over and over again! Thank you for writing this story Author! [img=update]
I was going to read it and then I saw the author say that they were going to give other characters harems and temporarily move the MC to the background and I just don't like reading about the love life of other characters that aren't the MC especially when the author said that the MC will only have two girls so it kinda seems like the mc is being outshined. the story itself seems like it is great and is a pretty nice concept so while I won't read it I will give it this 4 star review.
very good fanfic , I recommend reading it. Only downside is that the updating is slow and it only has 185 chapters. wished it had more tbh.
Bueno, sinceramente el mejor fanfic de danmachi que he leído, buen desarrollo y el romance esta bueno algo lento pero todo bien ni muy apresurado ni tampoco demasiado lento todo perfectamente calculado Lo que mas me gusta es que la protagonista es ais y no es harem al fin algo que no es harem. Y lo recomiendo de todo mi kokoro para aquellos que le gusten los personajes que solo se enfocan en sus seres queridos y nada más, no juegan al héroe o cosas por el estilo, exactamente lo que me gusta es el romance y el protagonista es egoísta y solo le importa su fuerza para proteger a ais y nada más brothers.[img=recommend]
por fin conseguiste tu portada, quedo muy bonito. algún día me pondré terminare de leerme los nuevos capítulos.................................................
good writing, nice story but It was too slow for my taste. i have read 7 chapters🥴.........,................................................
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Its getting better, but the Tione situation still bothers me lol, she is the same kind of rapist animal they just slaughtered in the 100s so Mc should honestly tell her she acts just like them and stay away from him, since they are all filthy scum, just course she havent succed yet dont change the fact that she think is her right to be a rapist animal.... ( Disgusting kind of ppl)
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An interesting system concept with a fascinating storyline setup and implementation. The mc whose morals seem ambiguous shows how nobody wants to be alone. Am hoping that the unique changes lead to overall happiness. Thank you
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A good read with an interesting setup for a system story. A good reason is presented as to why the main characters show interest with each other. Also the slower pace of romance is more wholesome. Looking forward to any other works the author does.
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This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
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Author i have read many replies you have given to people who were criticising your work ... and i find you to be a very sensible and mature and for that although the story was not to my taste BUT From your explanations i came to understand that according to what you wanted to portray in the story .... you have done a very good job ... i like stories where MC although not OP but is very cunning ,calculative, no harem , if romance then love whole heartedly, i prefer if the mc keeps some secrets like reincarnation to himself, i don't know why but it just feels right to me to do so whether it from the girl you love or not some things should be kept secret. Well still Although not the type of mc i like but nonetheless a very good story very well expressed 5 stars from me for the COOL AUTHOR 😁😁☺️🤗 .... and pls author if you can write a story how i described i would really appreciate and love to read it
danmachi 2 wife right ,how you just make every world he get two wife ? Wish life after all not babysit other and yes he can have men friend but don't gave them harem lol The only who can have harem need something big like Godking power something like that's well in our world money power but not a few million but trillion of money then you can have harem in our world Dubai rich men have 20 wife , don't jealous because that's was his hard work to get all of that's and consider month money he get around 200 hundred billion like that's
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FINALLY! A good Danmachi novel, unlike from a certain popular Danmachi novel, this version of Ais isn't behaving like a slut and immediately ask to have sex to the person who is her love interest. Honestly, hope it will last long and stay good. I root Isaac x Ais all the way, since she is also my waifu and she herself think she isn't worthy? Girl, your quality as waifu is top notch. I'd like to marry and target Ais as waifu to if somewhat traveled into Danmachi. Author, don't drop or hiatus of this novel! This is hidden gem and master piece for me. Although, if you want to make this well knowned, I suggest you change the category from Others to Anime & Comics.