4評論
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
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寫檢討
I love the story so much, I also ship hayabusa and kagura. I also hope you will improve ur skills in writing because some of the sentences are wrong grammar and have lacking punctuation but the story was nice
Cool story bro Welcome to a contest where people will see a novel and be like no i ship with whatever person it will be gay or lesbian who knows welcome to a lyfe of a fanfic
Its a Really Cute story, Characters has a but development. And i like the way Hanabi setted him free and became nice and became also their friend
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I love the story so much, I also ship hayabusa and kagura. I also hope you will improve ur skills in writing because some of the sentences are wrong grammar and have lacking punctuation but the story was nice
Cool story bro Welcome to a contest where people will see a novel and be like no i ship with whatever person it will be gay or lesbian who knows welcome to a lyfe of a fanfic
Its a Really Cute story, Characters has a but development. And i like the way Hanabi setted him free and became nice and became also their friend
Lovin'it wrvdxududuasicydvovkvcuswjdiglgocystsphxkclvovidudydivovicifohofifudufogogififovodudivphpgud07fogofudigodusupxhfdjdjdyskhlgyssusuofuxkvuxvidyofsufkfudkgodudkfifuslglgysy