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Alan died while saving his little sister and reincarnate in the marvel universe
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Author Note: "Dam I am really good at making a cover like that I have another version of it which make every character look like a part of background so why I don't use that? Because in that Thor lightning turn red so that why.
I am using my first Novel illustrated character that I create. yes, my avatar Alan and hopefully this time he will become a legend, not like my previous one Butterfly Of Castle he is an alternate version of him Even if they are both the same the story is not related so don't worry you don't have to read that. and if you like the cover please drop some stones".
2 or 3 chapters in a week
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actually trash, good concept but trash. really terrible grammar, no context most of the time and it feels like I'm reading a 10 year old's English project.
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This is my rating for the current 8 chapters of this novel. Don’t get me wrong, I find the whole concept of the Fate Class Cards in the Marvel Universe is interesting, but seeing from the first to the latest chapters, I’m just... The events just seem forced to me and I don’t know whether his trace on powers are a cheat or how the author portrayed the limitations of shirou’s power is just dumb because He just traced on a god-tier weapon! Its friggin mjolnir, and the price he paid for tracing a godly weapon is just an exhausted prana reserves? Sounds unrealistic to me. I can overlook the writing quality with good storyline and character development but sadly, I don’t see it yet from the current chapter. Criticisms aside, I still like the novel because I haven’t encountered nor read this kind of Fate crossover concept and I hope that my criticism of the novel will help you, author-san, to become more experienced in the overall concept of the novel as a whole.
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Edit. Not readable. Edit. Not readable. Edit. Not readable. Edit. Not readable. Edit. Not readable. Edit. Not readable. Edit. Not readable. Edit. Not readable. Edit. Not readable.
haven't read it yet why dahell not Right :3 hehehehehehehhehehehehe ahahahha also can you add gilgamesh gate of babylon and ENKIDU #plz Nice one plz keep on updating and also keep your novel original don't just follow the plot line of the story made diffrence like what if he accidently kill a character it can change the plot line :3
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If this is called garbage, then people who create other bad fanfic will feel insulted. 😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑
Es una historia interesante sin embargo en lo personal siento que le falta algo pero es buena si quieres algo para entretenerte y pasar el rato leyendo
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Keep going as you're showing consistent improvements in the flow and strength of your chapters. Consider developing a unique and custom antagonist to play as a foil to your MC, especially if they happen to be reoccurring throughout 1 or more arcs.
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The shameless author here rating my own work HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA