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The plot really confuses me and theres to much use of "HAHAHA" the mc has a serious brain problem i also think the author has a brain problem or he/she just like to smoke weed everyday.......
Very hard to read with the protagonist laughing all the time over nothing or just stupid stuff has the potential to be good though needs some more improvements on the world building
Really what makes me confused is the plot, even the MC also makes me stressed, I think the writer has a mental disorder.
The author doesn't know how laughter works because after almost every thought or sentence that is uttered is followed by HAHAHA. It gets so annoying to read that.
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I really enjoyed reading this story despite the not so interesting title. However, the detail description are still lacking but can easily improved. This will help to convey the message the author wanted to convey. Better still the xx scene could be complimented with pictures Nonetheless, the characters are interesting and the plot are not so stereotype hence why i am still reading. Moreover i was hoping that since the novel is no longer free, the chapters should be longer to commentsurate the number of power stones payable for each chapter
I really enjoyed reading this story despite the not so interesting title. However, the detail description are still lacking but can easily improved. This will help to convey the message the author wanted to convey. Better still the xx scene could be complimented with pictures Nonetheless, the characters are interesting and the plot are not so stereotype hence why i am still reading. Moreover i was hoping that since the novel is no longer free, the chapters should be longer to commentsurate the number of power stones payable for each chapter
I really enjoyed reading this story despite the not so interesting title. However, the detail description are still lacking but can easily improved. This will help to convey the message the author wanted to convey. Better still the xx scene could be complimented with pictures Nonetheless, the characters are interesting and the plot are not so stereotype hence why i am still reading. Moreover i was hoping that since the novel is no longer free, the chapters should be longer to commentsurate the number of power stones payable for each chapter
Very interesting and psychotic. The main character is a oldman who was wrongfully sent to jail and had to serve a sentence of life imprisonment. Kinda sexy. The book is for those who love despicable characters.
I just read until chapter 5.. and i dont get it.. At first he meet some god and i assume he will be reincarnated.. Then he woke up in his younger day.. Then he go to some school.. but wtf with the school i dont get it.. Then he died again.. wtf man.. If you want to make story atleast give the reader some clue to whats going on.. give the background story.. as where he is.. who he is.. or something.. a lil introduction..
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Good afternoon I am not sure if I can you please send you a must have ak and I don't have a must have been very busy but I am a must for sale hum tumse bolte and training he has a must for girls the day and I will make a must see photos and training in the day of the opportunity to meet you and your family are doing great and I
Shit!!!...the mc is so ****...the most retard,idiot,stupid and fool mc ever i know!!! I mean the only one i know... 👩👦👈👇👈👩👧👧👨👧🖐️👍👍🖐️✍️✋🤘🤚🤞🖐️👅❤️💖❤️💖💓👅💛👅💕👣💢💨🗨️💨👖🕶️👞👡👞👡💣💨🗯️❣️👖❤️👅💛👄👀💓👂💅🙌🖐️🤞🖐️👎🖐️👎✍️✋👎🤚👍🖐️🤹♀️👨👩👦👨❤️👨👬👨👨👦👭🤹♀️👨👩👦👨❤️👨💏🏊♀️🏄♀️🏊♀️🏍️🏌️♂️⛹️♀️🏄♂️🏋️♂️🏂🏋️♂️🏂🏍️🙇♂️🙆♀️💇♂️🙆♀️🙆♂️🕺🙆♀️🙋♀️💁♂️🙅♂️🤦♀️🙇♂️🤦♂️🙇♂️🙆♀️🙇♂️🙆♀️🙋♀️💁♂️🙅♂️🤦♀️🤦♂️🙇♂️🤦♂️🙇♂️🙆♀️🙇♂️💁♂️🙋♀️💁♂️🙅♂️🤦♀️🙇♂️🙇♂️🤦♂️🙇♂️🙆♀️🙋♀️🙆♀️👮♀️👨🚒👮♀️👨🎤🤴👷♀️👨🎤👮♂️👨🎤👩🎨👨🚒👩🎨💂♀️👨✈️👷♂️👩✈️👩✈️👨🚒👮♀️👩🚀👮♀️👩🚀👮♀️👩🚀👩🎨👨🚒👩🎨👷♂️👩🎨👩🎨👨🚒👩🎨👩🚀👮♂️👮♂️👮♂️👩🚀👩🚀👩🎨💂♀️👩🎨💂♀️👨✈️💂♀️👮♀️👩🚀👮♀️👩🚀👦👴👨🎓👴👨🎓👴👧😦😬😦😰😱
The plot really confuses me and theres to much use of "HAHAHA" the mc has a serious brain problem i also think the author has a brain problem or he/she just like to smoke weed everyday.......
Very hard to read with the protagonist laughing all the time over nothing or just stupid stuff has the potential to be good though needs some more improvements on the world building
Really what makes me confused is the plot, even the MC also makes me stressed, I think the writer has a mental disorder.
The author doesn't know how laughter works because after almost every thought or sentence that is uttered is followed by HAHAHA. It gets so annoying to read that.
😉😎😉😉😎😉😎😎😙🙂😙☺☺😉😋😉😎😙😋😙😋😙😋☺😙☺😙☺😙😉😎😎😉🙂😙🙂🙂😙🙂😉😎😆🙂😆🙂😎😉😎😉😎😉🙂😆🙂😆🙂😙🙂😙🙂🙂😉😎😎😆😍😙🙂😙🙂🙂😙🙂🙂😙🙂😉🙂😙🙂😙🙂🙂🙂😙🙂🙂😙🙂😙😙
Hope update every day ☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺😊😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺☺😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺😊☺
I really enjoyed reading this story despite the not so interesting title. However, the detail description are still lacking but can easily improved. This will help to convey the message the author wanted to convey. Better still the xx scene could be complimented with pictures Nonetheless, the characters are interesting and the plot are not so stereotype hence why i am still reading. Moreover i was hoping that since the novel is no longer free, the chapters should be longer to commentsurate the number of power stones payable for each chapter
I really enjoyed reading this story despite the not so interesting title. However, the detail description are still lacking but can easily improved. This will help to convey the message the author wanted to convey. Better still the xx scene could be complimented with pictures Nonetheless, the characters are interesting and the plot are not so stereotype hence why i am still reading. Moreover i was hoping that since the novel is no longer free, the chapters should be longer to commentsurate the number of power stones payable for each chapter
I really enjoyed reading this story despite the not so interesting title. However, the detail description are still lacking but can easily improved. This will help to convey the message the author wanted to convey. Better still the xx scene could be complimented with pictures Nonetheless, the characters are interesting and the plot are not so stereotype hence why i am still reading. Moreover i was hoping that since the novel is no longer free, the chapters should be longer to commentsurate the number of power stones payable for each chapter
Very interesting and psychotic. The main character is a oldman who was wrongfully sent to jail and had to serve a sentence of life imprisonment. Kinda sexy. The book is for those who love despicable characters.
I just read until chapter 5.. and i dont get it.. At first he meet some god and i assume he will be reincarnated.. Then he woke up in his younger day.. Then he go to some school.. but wtf with the school i dont get it.. Then he died again.. wtf man.. If you want to make story atleast give the reader some clue to whats going on.. give the background story.. as where he is.. who he is.. or something.. a lil introduction..
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Good afternoon I am not sure if I can you please send you a must have ak and I don't have a must have been very busy but I am a must for sale hum tumse bolte and training he has a must for girls the day and I will make a must see photos and training in the day of the opportunity to meet you and your family are doing great and I