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Honestly I don't like saying negative things about a story but I am not sure what to say other than the story really needs some work to make it half decent. I understand that this is the author's first story and english is not your first language but that does't change that this story is pretty bad.
This novel is absolutely pathetic..... It was like I was reading a children's book were everything was simplified and summarized and here are some things that pissed me off 1. I thought it was during the old time, if so how did he know what video games are. 2. He was supposed to be blind but....he doesn't act blind at all....he doesn't even hide the fact that he could see 3.he actually removed the eyes and tested his strength and actually saw I mean actually saw that his strength was back to normal 4.he just told his friend that he wanted to run way and he was like sure.....I'm behind you 5.he just stole from the clan leader with relative ease .....I still have a long list but hey.....
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Hello author here, This is my first story and English Is not my first language Is not English so please bear with it! Hope you guys enjoy it.
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact kenreview@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Honestly I don't like saying negative things about a story but I am not sure what to say other than the story really needs some work to make it half decent. I understand that this is the author's first story and english is not your first language but that does't change that this story is pretty bad.
This novel is absolutely pathetic..... It was like I was reading a children's book were everything was simplified and summarized and here are some things that pissed me off 1. I thought it was during the old time, if so how did he know what video games are. 2. He was supposed to be blind but....he doesn't act blind at all....he doesn't even hide the fact that he could see 3.he actually removed the eyes and tested his strength and actually saw I mean actually saw that his strength was back to normal 4.he just told his friend that he wanted to run way and he was like sure.....I'm behind you 5.he just stole from the clan leader with relative ease .....I still have a long list but hey.....
NiceNovel ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Harem! Harem! Harem! Harem! Harem! Harem! Harem Harem! Harem! Harem! Harem! Harem! Harem! Harem! Harem! Harem! Harem! Harem! Harem! Harem! Harem! Harem! Harem! Harem!
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Hello author here, This is my first story and English Is not my first language Is not English so please bear with it! Hope you guys enjoy it.
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.