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amazing novel i really enjoyed it so much and big thanks for the author for making this you are amazing so keep going on ccccccccccooooooooooooooolllllllllllllllll
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Good story. I like it. And as my predecessors says. Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem
A bit difficult to read, at first. World development is piecemeal and plot slow to develop. Quite crude throughout, with a high percentage of sex scenes. The plot, such as it exists, is a bit ridiculous and the dialogue bizarre. But lots of stories have ridiculous plots and many have much worse dialogue. Notably the author hasn't outrageously padded every paragraph with dozens of words (for extra SS) and mostly just focuses on action. Perhaps a bit too much, but that's better than the alternative. Overall it's funny enough to ignore the flaws and just be read it for laughs. AUTHOR: please finish the story, we need a good laugh!
Damn this **** is good. I kinda like these kinds of novels but DAMN this is soo good............................Hehe this is the second after Spirit Cultivation.
The story is okay there is suspense as well,the characters are good but the biggest let down is the update stability 🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏
I can't even understand a thing. The story was so-so like I gave up after 2-3 chapters. Why the heck is moaning could be considered r-18 already. And it's like it was written by a virgin highschooler. So please don't try to hard to write things you don't have experience for. About the world building it's foundation looks like been build by a scammer construction company. Barely got info about the world and character. Everything is on easy mode. World levels can be treat like nothing. Basically you can't distinguish what the author wants. Anyway that's all. Hope you don't mind my criticism.
The protagonist is only thinking with dick most of the times except for the crucial ones and the chapter update rate is the biggest disappointment.The rest is all good.
I really like this book hoping for more chapters and faster updates it a really amazing story the storyline Is amazing. Byt I do wish our dragon bot shifted and used his other form more but otherwise great book bro
I love ths novel has great characters a good setting could do with more updating and less sex 24/7. It an awesome novel I feel that he was or she would spend more time updating it would be way better IED love to hear about him using his dragon form a little bit more
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This is whack you can't even understand thing very confusing. You might loss brain cells and do yourself a favour don't read it. Chcuuxyxyssysyycyxrzrztxyucuvivivcttxtxyxudydysysyfycucucyfyxtsysugibibivudusysyfuvuudyobobivuxyztatsvuvuxysyaratarasrycivucjcucivucucyxysrarstcuvivivivovovovivucyxyxyxtztstaraarzyvuvuvivivivivivivicustartxyxtxyxysyaaatsyfufucucucucucucicuxudydysydydydydyfydydydydydydtstaysydifigohobpjphogudydftgubobonogudystfyhunijigustatcvivicysyxcutxusyatsyfuxtxfyctaydyvuxyarivpnpgisfpuf
Gooooood.........Gooooooooooooodddd... Expufjfgh........exp....grghffhjxgjjcfzjvggjjvc .............c v hhfzch (Good story until now!) ;-)
Pra falar a verdade eu ainda não entendi direito essa novel ela é um tanto forçado ele fode com cada mulher que ele encontra na Rua sabe falta desenvolvimento fica muito simplificado so aquilo ele viu uma mulher fode. Fica um pouco sem lógica
Boring story,characters and world background are boring..Full of H-Scenes.Story is hard to understand and confusing ...................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Just a friendly advice, stop putting things that are out of context and give the characters and the world a little more background because as it is now the story feels so hollow as if time only started moving when the mc is introduced, no history whatsoever. I suggest that you put a litte background as to what type pf world the mc is living in.
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Story is really funny it deserves a 5 star on the first few chapters since I haven’t read any further to do this review Story is really funny it deserves a 5 star on the first few chapters since I haven’t read any further to do this review Story is really funny it deserves a 5 star on the first few chapters since I haven’t read any further to do this review Story is really funny it deserves a 5 star on the first few chapters since I haven’t read any further to do this review Story is really funny it deserves a 5 star on the first few chapters since I haven’t read any further to do this review Story is really funny it deserves a 5 star on the first few chapters since I haven’t read any further to do this review Story is really funny it deserves a 5 star on the first few chapters since I haven’t read any further to do this review Story is really funny it deserves a 5 star on the first few chapters since I haven’t read any further to do this review
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Well..i can't read it... it's just too confusing and there wasn't much world background, r18 scenes are just bad...although there is a lot of them and even the ones that the author tries to describe are bad... it's like is missing parts....it has good potential. Maybe when the author gets this edited, ill give a new trie.
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HAREM, HAREM, HAREM, HAREM, HAREM, HAREM! one girl, no; two girls, no; three girls, no, four girls, not enough; keep finding more girls and catch them Kansuke! HAREM, HAREM, HAREM, HAREM!
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amazing novel i really enjoyed it so much and big thanks for the author for making this you are amazing so keep going on ccccccccccooooooooooooooolllllllllllllllll
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Good story. I like it. And as my predecessors says. Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem Harem
A bit difficult to read, at first. World development is piecemeal and plot slow to develop. Quite crude throughout, with a high percentage of sex scenes. The plot, such as it exists, is a bit ridiculous and the dialogue bizarre. But lots of stories have ridiculous plots and many have much worse dialogue. Notably the author hasn't outrageously padded every paragraph with dozens of words (for extra SS) and mostly just focuses on action. Perhaps a bit too much, but that's better than the alternative. Overall it's funny enough to ignore the flaws and just be read it for laughs. AUTHOR: please finish the story, we need a good laugh!
Damn this **** is good. I kinda like these kinds of novels but DAMN this is soo good............................Hehe this is the second after Spirit Cultivation.
The story is okay there is suspense as well,the characters are good but the biggest let down is the update stability 🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄🙄😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏
I can't even understand a thing. The story was so-so like I gave up after 2-3 chapters. Why the heck is moaning could be considered r-18 already. And it's like it was written by a virgin highschooler. So please don't try to hard to write things you don't have experience for. About the world building it's foundation looks like been build by a scammer construction company. Barely got info about the world and character. Everything is on easy mode. World levels can be treat like nothing. Basically you can't distinguish what the author wants. Anyway that's all. Hope you don't mind my criticism.
The protagonist is only thinking with dick most of the times except for the crucial ones and the chapter update rate is the biggest disappointment.The rest is all good.
I really like this book hoping for more chapters and faster updates it a really amazing story the storyline Is amazing. Byt I do wish our dragon bot shifted and used his other form more but otherwise great book bro
I love ths novel has great characters a good setting could do with more updating and less sex 24/7. It an awesome novel I feel that he was or she would spend more time updating it would be way better IED love to hear about him using his dragon form a little bit more
Boa tarde segue em anexo o seu pedido é o contato do seu conteúdo e restrito ao destinatário e pode conterBoa tarde segue em anexo o seu pedido é o contato do seu conteúdo e restrito ao destinatário e pode conterBoa tarde segue em anexo o seu pedido é o contato do seu conteúdo e restrito ao destinatário e pode Boa tarde segue em anexo o seu pedido é o contato do seu conteúdo e restrito ao destinatário e pode conter
This is whack you can't even understand thing very confusing. You might loss brain cells and do yourself a favour don't read it. Chcuuxyxyssysyycyxrzrztxyucuvivivcttxtxyxudydysysyfycucucyfyxtsysugibibivudusysyfuvuudyobobivuxyztatsvuvuxysyaratarasrycivucjcucivucucyxysrarstcuvivivivovovovivucyxyxyxtztstaraarzyvuvuvivivivivivivicustartxyxtxyxysyaaatsyfufucucucucucucicuxudydysydydydydyfydydydydydydtstaysydifigohobpjphogudydftgubobonogudystfyhunijigustatcvivicysyxcutxusyatsyfuxtxfyctaydyvuxyarivpnpgisfpuf
Gooooood.........Gooooooooooooodddd... Expufjfgh........exp....grghffhjxgjjcfzjvggjjvc .............c v hhfzch (Good story until now!) ;-)
Pra falar a verdade eu ainda não entendi direito essa novel ela é um tanto forçado ele fode com cada mulher que ele encontra na Rua sabe falta desenvolvimento fica muito simplificado so aquilo ele viu uma mulher fode. Fica um pouco sem lógica
Boring story,characters and world background are boring..Full of H-Scenes.Story is hard to understand and confusing ...................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Just a friendly advice, stop putting things that are out of context and give the characters and the world a little more background because as it is now the story feels so hollow as if time only started moving when the mc is introduced, no history whatsoever. I suggest that you put a litte background as to what type pf world the mc is living in.
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Story is really funny it deserves a 5 star on the first few chapters since I haven’t read any further to do this review Story is really funny it deserves a 5 star on the first few chapters since I haven’t read any further to do this review Story is really funny it deserves a 5 star on the first few chapters since I haven’t read any further to do this review Story is really funny it deserves a 5 star on the first few chapters since I haven’t read any further to do this review Story is really funny it deserves a 5 star on the first few chapters since I haven’t read any further to do this review Story is really funny it deserves a 5 star on the first few chapters since I haven’t read any further to do this review Story is really funny it deserves a 5 star on the first few chapters since I haven’t read any further to do this review Story is really funny it deserves a 5 star on the first few chapters since I haven’t read any further to do this review
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Well..i can't read it... it's just too confusing and there wasn't much world background, r18 scenes are just bad...although there is a lot of them and even the ones that the author tries to describe are bad... it's like is missing parts....it has good potential. Maybe when the author gets this edited, ill give a new trie.
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HAREM, HAREM, HAREM, HAREM, HAREM, HAREM! one girl, no; two girls, no; three girls, no, four girls, not enough; keep finding more girls and catch them Kansuke! HAREM, HAREM, HAREM, HAREM!
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