3評論
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
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寫檢討
Overall it's not bad story, and improved a lot since from the beginning but still it can further can improve. Hopefully writer will give more interesting chapter in the future for us to read. I wanted to one thing though is this story only be about Rin girl or we are gonna see some new face, personally I like to see some new face and they are both in same chapter
Overall, it's quite a good exhibitionism story but needs a lot of improvement in grammar and spellings, as well as paragraphs formatting. As it is, just reading is quite a task in itself & that without a doubt ruins the enjoyment.
Not bad story bu needed improvement on some of grammer and spelling. I also hope writer would update more frequently as it's very late compare to some of other writers..
Overall it's not bad story, and improved a lot since from the beginning but still it can further can improve. Hopefully writer will give more interesting chapter in the future for us to read. I wanted to one thing though is this story only be about Rin girl or we are gonna see some new face, personally I like to see some new face and they are both in same chapter
Overall, it's quite a good exhibitionism story but needs a lot of improvement in grammar and spellings, as well as paragraphs formatting. As it is, just reading is quite a task in itself & that without a doubt ruins the enjoyment.
Not bad story bu needed improvement on some of grammer and spelling. I also hope writer would update more frequently as it's very late compare to some of other writers..