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Such stories are really reaaaally rare to find here in the WN. Absolutely no grammatical errors whatsoever. The beginning absorbs your interest and what comes next doesn't fail to keep you entertained. I really love this story, hope it's not gonna get dropped. Because if it gets, then I'm going to find the author and... let's not mention it here. Keep up the good work!
I like how parents are strongly cautioned for a novel that takes place in a world creating for the protagonist by her parents lol. Anyway it's a really good novel unless you are a parent. If you are a parent you might get paranoid O_O
I don't usually make reviews but this piece of work earned it. It has a different kind of drama around the tragic past of the MC, it's a realistic scenario that u can easily imagine happening, characters that had lives full of mistakes and regrets... this makes them seem much more human than most stories. As a criticism I would only say that its a hard read at the beginning, cause the scenario keep changing from past and present and there's no heads up for that, though after I start to be able to early identify that, it became really enjoying, as now I've two intriguing plots to follow at the same time. All in all, keep the great work, Author-dono~
The story is stable enough to be a good read with many cliffhangers scattered throughout the story with unexpected resolutions. The characters all have motives for their actions and both worlds just seem to be fleshed out well enough. Overall a good story to read for semi stable updates and a decent story line to go along with it.
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Its very well written and the premise is overly action packed once the actual story starts. Though right now while it has 20 chapters the story feels a bit slow but it'll surely pick up the pace once the world background has been properly established. It has a lot of plot with important people already appearing but our mc has yet to greet 10 people in this new world. I'd rather follow our mc and see how her story turns out instead of reading through a lot of backstory of people which our mc will propably only meet 50 chapters in.
This is an overall really great book and even though I'm only on Chapter 2 I can tell the amount of work used on this. This story is very underrated and should have some more views and collections. I can never tell where the story is going every time I try to guess which shows a really nice plot.
The story is okay and the characters seem hastily written but the author seems to be leaning towards world building. I dont think it's a bad idea but it still leaves some to be desired but with so many characters, I dont see it as too much of a grievance from an ******* writer
Well here I am again. And all the grammar mistakes that I saw are gone. great job on this so far Ashes. I'm very happy wot the story so far am it deserves nothing less than 5 stars
"Parents strongly cautioned" yes I agree, weird stuff happens here (its probably pg14? I'm bad at rating things, but that's what if put on this.)
Shameless self-view here. I like dragons and I like magic. I also like magic girl killing dragons ................................................................................................ I mean the story focuses on a girl who died in a game designed for her and it ended up becoming real. It's legit, read it please? ; _ ;
It's a really interesting fantasy novel! While it's a revision and I haven't read the previous work, I love it already! Added right away to my library to read more! Nearly no grammar errors (at least none that I could notice right away) and a good start! Keep it up, author! >3</
Other than the very rare grammar mistake this story has the solemn feeling that many fantasy novels try but fail to give off. The cliffhangers are in good places and even the first few chapters gave the feeling of awe and companionship that novels generally need to build up before liking a companion. All I can say is I cant wait for the the next update.
Vereh vereh ***eh. I recommend it to all. 😋😊😋😉😋😉😋😁😋😁😎😎😙😙😶😶😚😎😁😎😊😶☺😶😚🤗😊😍😊🤗😊😶😚😶😊🙂😊😎😊🤗😚😎😚😎😚😎🙂😉😶😉😶😚😶😚😶😊🙂😊🙂😊🙂😊🙂😊🙂😊🙂🙂😊😶😚😶😚😶😚
Great start can’t wait to see more! Story is very well written No many chapters so I can’t say much for its stability I just hope there’s more As it stand the story is still in its early stages but has a lot of potential The characters seem very dynamic with plenty of potential for growth lastly ashes world has many currently in explained mystery’s that I can’t wait to learn the secrets behind
Good story, good author, good characters, very good cliff's, had to lower a bit on chapter stability - chapter reletevly are uploaded as how is told beforehand in the authors discord and about once a week ish, but can sometimes be a bit slow from one chapter to anather considering the cliff and all. Overall it is a must read!
Uh... Hi. ☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺
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I say I absolutely love this book it got every thing that i wanted all in one book.
Such stories are really reaaaally rare to find here in the WN. Absolutely no grammatical errors whatsoever. The beginning absorbs your interest and what comes next doesn't fail to keep you entertained. I really love this story, hope it's not gonna get dropped. Because if it gets, then I'm going to find the author and... let's not mention it here. Keep up the good work!
I like how parents are strongly cautioned for a novel that takes place in a world creating for the protagonist by her parents lol. Anyway it's a really good novel unless you are a parent. If you are a parent you might get paranoid O_O
I don't usually make reviews but this piece of work earned it. It has a different kind of drama around the tragic past of the MC, it's a realistic scenario that u can easily imagine happening, characters that had lives full of mistakes and regrets... this makes them seem much more human than most stories. As a criticism I would only say that its a hard read at the beginning, cause the scenario keep changing from past and present and there's no heads up for that, though after I start to be able to early identify that, it became really enjoying, as now I've two intriguing plots to follow at the same time. All in all, keep the great work, Author-dono~
The story is stable enough to be a good read with many cliffhangers scattered throughout the story with unexpected resolutions. The characters all have motives for their actions and both worlds just seem to be fleshed out well enough. Overall a good story to read for semi stable updates and a decent story line to go along with it.
😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🙋🙋🏻♀️🙋🙋🙋🙋🙋🙋🙋🥰😍😍🤩😘🤯🤯🤯🤯🤯🤯🤯🤯🤯🤯🤯🤯🤯🤯🤯🤯🤯😤🤤🤬🥳🥳🥳🥳🥳🥳🥳🤠🤠🤠😇😇😇😇😇😇🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈
Its very well written and the premise is overly action packed once the actual story starts. Though right now while it has 20 chapters the story feels a bit slow but it'll surely pick up the pace once the world background has been properly established. It has a lot of plot with important people already appearing but our mc has yet to greet 10 people in this new world. I'd rather follow our mc and see how her story turns out instead of reading through a lot of backstory of people which our mc will propably only meet 50 chapters in.
This is an overall really great book and even though I'm only on Chapter 2 I can tell the amount of work used on this. This story is very underrated and should have some more views and collections. I can never tell where the story is going every time I try to guess which shows a really nice plot.
The story is okay and the characters seem hastily written but the author seems to be leaning towards world building. I dont think it's a bad idea but it still leaves some to be desired but with so many characters, I dont see it as too much of a grievance from an ******* writer
Well here I am again. And all the grammar mistakes that I saw are gone. great job on this so far Ashes. I'm very happy wot the story so far am it deserves nothing less than 5 stars
"Parents strongly cautioned" yes I agree, weird stuff happens here (its probably pg14? I'm bad at rating things, but that's what if put on this.)
Shameless self-view here. I like dragons and I like magic. I also like magic girl killing dragons ................................................................................................ I mean the story focuses on a girl who died in a game designed for her and it ended up becoming real. It's legit, read it please? ; _ ;
It's a really interesting fantasy novel! While it's a revision and I haven't read the previous work, I love it already! Added right away to my library to read more! Nearly no grammar errors (at least none that I could notice right away) and a good start! Keep it up, author! >3</
Other than the very rare grammar mistake this story has the solemn feeling that many fantasy novels try but fail to give off. The cliffhangers are in good places and even the first few chapters gave the feeling of awe and companionship that novels generally need to build up before liking a companion. All I can say is I cant wait for the the next update.
Vereh vereh ***eh. I recommend it to all. 😋😊😋😉😋😉😋😁😋😁😎😎😙😙😶😶😚😎😁😎😊😶☺😶😚🤗😊😍😊🤗😊😶😚😶😊🙂😊😎😊🤗😚😎😚😎😚😎🙂😉😶😉😶😚😶😚😶😊🙂😊🙂😊🙂😊🙂😊🙂😊🙂🙂😊😶😚😶😚😶😚
Great start can’t wait to see more! Story is very well written No many chapters so I can’t say much for its stability I just hope there’s more As it stand the story is still in its early stages but has a lot of potential The characters seem very dynamic with plenty of potential for growth lastly ashes world has many currently in explained mystery’s that I can’t wait to learn the secrets behind
Good story, good author, good characters, very good cliff's, had to lower a bit on chapter stability - chapter reletevly are uploaded as how is told beforehand in the authors discord and about once a week ish, but can sometimes be a bit slow from one chapter to anather considering the cliff and all. Overall it is a must read!
Uh... Hi. ☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺
You're GAEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE (AND LOTSA E's cause I apparently need 140 characters to leave a review)EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE, BTW ASHLEY IS SMOL AF
I say I absolutely love this book it got every thing that i wanted all in one book.