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Hi there! Are you looking for inspiration? You might want to check out our Prompts Writing contest! Apocalypse, Isekai, LitRPG... Follow the three provided prompts and take the chance to win up to $2,000! Please Google 70daysthemedwritingchallenge to find out more! This contest is free entry and open to any writer at any country. If you had any query, please feel free to contact litrpgwritingcontest_review@hotmail.com Good luck for writing!
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you want to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new works, you might want to contact rebecca.review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters, or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
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It is meh for me. 50 chapters but no gun yet. Instead, the author is shown us with his monster girls fetish. The world building is almost non existent. The pace of the story is too fast. No background, no development, nothing. The MC? Is an idiot like some japanese losers isekai MC. The title is not same as the contain. I'm sorry dude, but this story is sucks.
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When i started reading this I liked it first then when story was progressing it story development got worse like he has his system but why does not he used the arsenal.Mc fuqs everygirl he see come on dude .and why he is not thinking of revenge for his mother and why does not he acts when someone acts towards him .not soo great experience while reading later story
This book keeps getting better and better I can’t stop reading it so please keep writing this book and please write the next chapters soon so I’ll be able to read it thank you 🙏🙏📚🙏📚🙏📚📚📚📚🙏📚📖📚📚📚
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the pacing is good but there is a serious lack of ending a plot properly. the world development is in initial phase, some readers might not like the development but you have to know what would happen to the story if the mc becomes op in its initial phase. character development also need some serious work. overall the story is not so bad considering some other chinese novels where there is always '' heaven and earth shattering'' used in every fight.
Chapter 119. Should tag this as Slice of Life, there is no overarching plot, the characters are the worst(including the mc), his goal is equality but he can’t achieve that as he refuses to do anything about it, author has also somehow made a spineless mc that is still somehow alive in what appears to be an anarchic medieval world. Dropping it before the mc further continue to frustrate me.
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I love the direction of this story. There are many things that the author has skipped over but overall not too many plot holes. It seems that the author has taken the time to put in something for everyone, from fantasy, to romance, even adding modern elements to the story that make this novel unique. There are few mistakes with the grammar but its still easy to understand and there are much less than some others I've come across. Overall I'm looking forward to reading more and once polished up a bit would love to buy the book and would hope that a series is made so I can continue being drawn into this world.
so this book takes a grrat spin on the idea of an advanced aresnal instead of straight up summong op weapons he slowly builds it up also mature chapters are clearly labbeled if you want to skip so thats is also good. This book makes my day the author is friendly and all in all the main character is well designed
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...... not bad jaijauajajjauejej1ohwowj1ijsiqbeinwiqb1iwbejneidnwkndienjdjejeuj1jwheuiqnwineoein1ienenkeiwjjwkwneoneoejoekeoneoejekeklwowjqijwjsujsishqsihdosjsidu9ejwjsjdjidiehjdiwjajaj
It's developing really nicely.......................................... .................................................................................................................................................................................... ..
Thanks for everybody that has supported me so far. Listening to your feedback has been helping me improve, even if it's not immediately noticeable. I'm going to try to be as judgmental as possible for this review but feel free to leave a comment below to inform people if I missed something. I'd like to start off the review by telling people what they can expect from this story. It begins as slice of life/light fantasy story with some slightly darker scenes sprinkled in. The main character starts off as a scatterbrain. There is no obvious villain that the main character needs to defeat to accomplish some lofty goal like saving the world so his goal in the beginning is just to survive and get stronger. There are no RPG elements like levels or stats but if there were then then main character's luck stat would be maxed out. I think the current rating--3.4/5 stars--is pretty accurate. I'm an ******* when it comes to writing so, even if the grammar is easy to understand, it's not perfect. My characters, locations, and events are often hollow because my descriptions aren't as good as I'd like them to be. There are some serious complaints that people have with this story and I'd like people to know what to expect going in. I've had to read the story more than anybody else so I'm aware of them and I'm trying to fix them while not retconning anything. ——————————— Problems with the story: ——————————— The pace is too slow or too quick at times. The MC is very bland at the beginning. The MC thinks about sex too often. The MC doesn't use the system enough. The MC makes some very dumb decisions. The story revolves around one area for too long. The characters' names do not have a common theme. Side characters seem to disappear at times. Guns only appear 94 chapters in. There are more problems than these but those are the biggest ones that I think people might need to overcome. ——————————— I plan to keep this story going for several volumes and 300+ chapters so hopefully by the end of it I'll be able to create a better story. This has been a fun learning experience so far and I'm going to keep going until Gren's story is complete. Thinking up the characters and trying to figure out what they're doing is enjoyable and I like reading the comments left on each chapter. ——————————— Writing Quality 4/5 -1 star for the lack of quality descriptions Stability of Updates 5/5 I haven't missed a scheduled chapter so far. Story Development 3/5 -1 star for pacing problems -1 star for lack of development Character Design 3/5 -1 star for hollow characters -1 star for terrible names World Background 3/5 -1 star for lack of explanations -1 star for keeping story contained to one region(so far)
Interesting story, seems to be based on the novel Bringing Modern Weapons to a Fantasy World by Tomahawk at least the story is similar . 😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊
Interesting story; the protagonist is quite perverted; the story has a lot of dark elements, and interesting girls. The only thing is that the development is somewhat slow.
I was extremely hopefull at first then for like 10 chapters he does nothing but have *** talk about *** and think about ***. I swear its like watching/reading a ****. Not to mention the fact that the system is so fucking overpowered its annoying. I bet when he does get guns he will just use them to get some more girls for his harem. Just so you know im not a hater I just cant stand this story, and I have read and liked some pretty crappy storys before.
K this is a really great nook its updated at a great speed for a non full time offer amd furthermore the stories idea is great it is a unique idea and definiyely a story you should give a chance also the main vharacter is quite interesting.
I felt betrayed. As a lover of guns vs magic novels thi novel kinda sucks..the author must rename the title bringing medieval weapons....what a waste of space.
I believe that overall this a good book and you should give it a try. Though keep in mind that this is a HAREM. 😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊
Bull**** 70 chap and no guns quite contradict to title, and as expected as most original tryhard novel, fak chick fak chick and fak chick, gonna throw this **** off my library
70 chaps and no f*cking gun... And he doesnt even think about it like he's more into sword and other weapons ... He's collecing many 'exotic' girls who he fell in love the first time they met... What's the use of the system? Just change the title author I have read same stories like bringing a badasz weapon in a fantasy world and your story is a let down....yours looks like a novel w/ a badass mc An OP mc but no, nothing really interesting happened The title and cover is totally a trap⊂(￣(ｴ)￣)⊃ CLICK BAIT(๑و•̀ω•́)و(๑و•̀ω•́)و
The title "Bringing the Advanced Arsenal to Another World" The first firearm is built in chapter 94 and only starts getting used in combat in chapter 95. Bruh😂😂😂 Why build it at chapter 95 should made it in chapter 100 to make it epic.
$115,500 for the Best Adventure Novels +Get Hardcover Publish Hey Writers! Come to check out this adventure novel writing competition, both new and published stories can participate! This competition is mainly looking for four genres: Fantasy, Urban, Game, and Sci-fi. You can either submit your published works, rewrite some previous ideas, or create a new story if any given examples or tips inspired you! Web-fiction or Light Novel writing experience is desired, so you might be the winner! For more information, you may visit: https://bit.ly/2ObQnRy or contact Email：luffyringdom@gmail.com
Hi there! Are you looking for inspiration? You might want to check out our Prompts Writing contest! Apocalypse, Isekai, LitRPG... Follow the three provided prompts and take the chance to win up to $2,000! Please Google 70daysthemedwritingchallenge to find out more! This contest is free entry and open to any writer at any country. If you had any query, please feel free to contact litrpgwritingcontest_review@hotmail.com Good luck for writing!
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you want to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new works, you might want to contact rebecca.review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters, or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
┐(￣ヮ￣)┌┐(￣ヮ￣)┌┐(￣ヮ￣)┌┐(￣ヮ￣)┌┐(￣ヮ￣)┌┐(￣ヮ￣)┌┐(￣ヮ￣)┌┐(￣ヮ￣)┌┐(￣ヮ￣)┌┐(￣ヮ￣)┌┐(￣ヮ￣)┌┐(￣ヮ￣)┌┐(￣ヮ￣)┌┐(￣ヮ￣)┌┐(￣ヮ￣)┌┐(￣ヮ￣)┌┐(￣ヮ￣)┌┐(￣ヮ￣)┌┐(￣ヮ￣)┌┐(￣ヮ￣)┌
It is meh for me. 50 chapters but no gun yet. Instead, the author is shown us with his monster girls fetish. The world building is almost non existent. The pace of the story is too fast. No background, no development, nothing. The MC? Is an idiot like some japanese losers isekai MC. The title is not same as the contain. I'm sorry dude, but this story is sucks.
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Good good good good good good good good good good good good good Good good good good good good good good good good good good good Good good good good good good good good good good good good good
When i started reading this I liked it first then when story was progressing it story development got worse like he has his system but why does not he used the arsenal.Mc fuqs everygirl he see come on dude .and why he is not thinking of revenge for his mother and why does not he acts when someone acts towards him .not soo great experience while reading later story
This book keeps getting better and better I can’t stop reading it so please keep writing this book and please write the next chapters soon so I’ll be able to read it thank you 🙏🙏📚🙏📚🙏📚📚📚📚🙏📚📖📚📚📚
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the pacing is good but there is a serious lack of ending a plot properly. the world development is in initial phase, some readers might not like the development but you have to know what would happen to the story if the mc becomes op in its initial phase. character development also need some serious work. overall the story is not so bad considering some other chinese novels where there is always '' heaven and earth shattering'' used in every fight.
Chapter 119. Should tag this as Slice of Life, there is no overarching plot, the characters are the worst(including the mc), his goal is equality but he can’t achieve that as he refuses to do anything about it, author has also somehow made a spineless mc that is still somehow alive in what appears to be an anarchic medieval world. Dropping it before the mc further continue to frustrate me.
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I love the direction of this story. There are many things that the author has skipped over but overall not too many plot holes. It seems that the author has taken the time to put in something for everyone, from fantasy, to romance, even adding modern elements to the story that make this novel unique. There are few mistakes with the grammar but its still easy to understand and there are much less than some others I've come across. Overall I'm looking forward to reading more and once polished up a bit would love to buy the book and would hope that a series is made so I can continue being drawn into this world.
so this book takes a grrat spin on the idea of an advanced aresnal instead of straight up summong op weapons he slowly builds it up also mature chapters are clearly labbeled if you want to skip so thats is also good. This book makes my day the author is friendly and all in all the main character is well designed
揭示劇透 ...... not bad jaijauajajjauejej1ohwowj1ijsiqbeinwiqb1iwbejneidnwkndienjdjejeuj1jwheuiqnwineoein1ienenkeiwjjwkwneoneoejoekeoneoejekeklwowjqijwjsujsishqsihdosjsidu9ejwjsjdjidiehjdiwjajaj
It's developing really nicely.......................................... .................................................................................................................................................................................... ..
Thanks for everybody that has supported me so far. Listening to your feedback has been helping me improve, even if it's not immediately noticeable. I'm going to try to be as judgmental as possible for this review but feel free to leave a comment below to inform people if I missed something. I'd like to start off the review by telling people what they can expect from this story. It begins as slice of life/light fantasy story with some slightly darker scenes sprinkled in. The main character starts off as a scatterbrain. There is no obvious villain that the main character needs to defeat to accomplish some lofty goal like saving the world so his goal in the beginning is just to survive and get stronger. There are no RPG elements like levels or stats but if there were then then main character's luck stat would be maxed out. I think the current rating--3.4/5 stars--is pretty accurate. I'm an ******* when it comes to writing so, even if the grammar is easy to understand, it's not perfect. My characters, locations, and events are often hollow because my descriptions aren't as good as I'd like them to be. There are some serious complaints that people have with this story and I'd like people to know what to expect going in. I've had to read the story more than anybody else so I'm aware of them and I'm trying to fix them while not retconning anything. ——————————— Problems with the story: ——————————— The pace is too slow or too quick at times. The MC is very bland at the beginning. The MC thinks about sex too often. The MC doesn't use the system enough. The MC makes some very dumb decisions. The story revolves around one area for too long. The characters' names do not have a common theme. Side characters seem to disappear at times. Guns only appear 94 chapters in. There are more problems than these but those are the biggest ones that I think people might need to overcome. ——————————— I plan to keep this story going for several volumes and 300+ chapters so hopefully by the end of it I'll be able to create a better story. This has been a fun learning experience so far and I'm going to keep going until Gren's story is complete. Thinking up the characters and trying to figure out what they're doing is enjoyable and I like reading the comments left on each chapter. ——————————— Writing Quality 4/5 -1 star for the lack of quality descriptions Stability of Updates 5/5 I haven't missed a scheduled chapter so far. Story Development 3/5 -1 star for pacing problems -1 star for lack of development Character Design 3/5 -1 star for hollow characters -1 star for terrible names World Background 3/5 -1 star for lack of explanations -1 star for keeping story contained to one region(so far)
Interesting story, seems to be based on the novel Bringing Modern Weapons to a Fantasy World by Tomahawk at least the story is similar . 😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊
Interesting story; the protagonist is quite perverted; the story has a lot of dark elements, and interesting girls. The only thing is that the development is somewhat slow.
I was extremely hopefull at first then for like 10 chapters he does nothing but have *** talk about *** and think about ***. I swear its like watching/reading a ****. Not to mention the fact that the system is so fucking overpowered its annoying. I bet when he does get guns he will just use them to get some more girls for his harem. Just so you know im not a hater I just cant stand this story, and I have read and liked some pretty crappy storys before.
K this is a really great nook its updated at a great speed for a non full time offer amd furthermore the stories idea is great it is a unique idea and definiyely a story you should give a chance also the main vharacter is quite interesting.
I felt betrayed. As a lover of guns vs magic novels thi novel kinda sucks..the author must rename the title bringing medieval weapons....what a waste of space.
I believe that overall this a good book and you should give it a try. Though keep in mind that this is a HAREM. 😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊
Bull**** 70 chap and no guns quite contradict to title, and as expected as most original tryhard novel, fak chick fak chick and fak chick, gonna throw this **** off my library
70 chaps and no f*cking gun... And he doesnt even think about it like he's more into sword and other weapons ... He's collecing many 'exotic' girls who he fell in love the first time they met... What's the use of the system? Just change the title author I have read same stories like bringing a badasz weapon in a fantasy world and your story is a let down....yours looks like a novel w/ a badass mc An OP mc but no, nothing really interesting happened The title and cover is totally a trap⊂(￣(ｴ)￣)⊃ CLICK BAIT(๑و•̀ω•́)و(๑و•̀ω•́)و
The title "Bringing the Advanced Arsenal to Another World" The first firearm is built in chapter 94 and only starts getting used in combat in chapter 95. Bruh😂😂😂 Why build it at chapter 95 should made it in chapter 100 to make it epic.