摘要
A woman felt her life didn't have meaning and was missing something, she envisioned a more exciting future in which she had a goal to achieve.
Coincidentally, this came in the form a bolt of lighting which sent her into the newborn body of a spirit beast with True Dragon heritage, into the world of cultivation where the strong eats the weak. Whilst awakening inside an unfamiliar world and body, she was pondering her newfound situation a robotic noise interrupted her thoughts indicating that the beast cultivating system has activated.
Bloodline purity? Legendary bloodlines? Talent?
Her system can provide it all.
Armed with the knowledge of being a race in which is hunted by other beasts for its bloodline or enslaved by other cultivators, she knew the only way to keep safe in this chaotic world is getting stronger.
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As someone that reads a lot of translated novels, I'm pretty tolerant towards bad grammar, poorly formatted sentences, weird usages of words and poor writing in general, but reading this novel made me want to scream. It's a shame because I like what's going on in the story and I really want to keep reading, to know what happens next, but I just can't stand how badly written it is. There is constant redundancy. Transition words and other unnecessary words are everywhere. I guess I'll just give an example. This is from the prologue, which is already better written than the regular chapters: "Dana always felt like that living such a ****** life was not meant for her and that she wanted something more, something which could make her blood boil. She didn't fulfil her parents wish in going to university getting a law degree and taking over the family's law firm, and it led to her current status as women in her mid-thirties who hasn't developed a serious relationship once in her life. Although being beautiful has gotten Dana many suitors over the years, as she could never make herself to settle down and start a family as it comes at the sacrifice of her current adventurous lifestyle to cease, which for Dana wasn't something she was willing to accept." Now look how many fewer words there are while retaining the same meaning and level of detail: "Her parents wanted her to get a law degree and take over the family's law firm, but such a ****** life wasn't meant for her. She wanted something more, something to make her blood boil. Despite being beautiful and having many suitors, she was never willing to sacrifice her adventurous lifestyle to developed a serious relationship. Even now, in her mid-thirties, she wasn't ready to settle down and have a family." The worst thing about all of this is that the author's comments (that I've read) are perfectly legible. You're obviously competent enough, so why are you making me sift through garbage to get the story? I can't comment much on the character, plot and world development because I couldn't make it past chapter 6, but so far they seem fine. I hope the author doesn't give up. P.S. 'so' and 'therefore' mean the same damn thing. Stop putting both of them right next to each other at the start of a sentence.
This is brief review of the story so far. There isn't much to grasp due to the book just beginning. I've rated the story 3/5 to give a boost and as a baseline so it's neither bad nor good. Unfortunately, It may devolve over time as the story is another one relating to systems. Not all system novels are bad but... yeah? System novels in general are poorly written and executed. The start of the story is meh, but then again, nothing happened. So this has the potential to be great if the author doesn't rely to heavily on spamming system paragraphs through chapters.
I honest lay would score lower if possible on some of these ratings, but its low enough to see how I feel about this novel. After reading this I now know not all ratinags mean good books. This story suffers from such cliché writing tropes, and lacks in basically everything. Also autocorrect is kinda a nightmare with this tablet. Main Character: The main character is the bain of my existence, she's arrogant, prideful, and very unbelievable. At the beginning she can't even kill a human even though he was trying to Enslave Her, yet at the same time she can kill hundreds of animals without a care in the world. However, later in the novel she kills tons of contestants even though they did nothing wrong. She also is kinda bipolar (even though she's usually scoffing at men or annoyed) as getting more types of "purities" would change her personality, sometimes? Her greedy phase was the most insuffersble, as it becomes her driving point for way too long. Thankfully the anther stopped it, but the damage was already done. I do have more to rant about, but I'm not going to make this any longer. Side Characters: Not much in here, Dana doesn't hang out with people that much to any people in early chapters. But the system is one the best characters in novel, it was a good contrast to the main character, sadly they don't show up very often. If I'm correct there's this guy in school that Dana sorta helps, but he made so little impact or apperance. The teachers, they weren't interesting, at all. I think Dana that women teacher say some drama which probably ended up with some dead men. Somewhere on 50 or 60 Dana gets dispells, and I thought FINALLY I I don't have to suffer as badly anymore! But one might as well be a ghost and the other one was a lustful masochist demon thing. JUST what I've always DREAMED OF. Aka they suck. Updating: They or i think He updated quite frequently, but he went on hiatus so, 3 stars for dumping it. Better than ok but not great. Story Development: The story of plot is almost nonexistent till more than half way in the novel (the 77 chapters). I guess her leveling up and infiltrating human territory could be plot, but its all boring. Whats the main plot point you ask? Sorry I didn't read it, at that point I was skipping and skimming chapters, and given the Beast Cultivating system it wouldn't change a thing. Character Design: I don't have much to say here really. In not going to accuse the author of making no character design but I just done remember anything. Well other than MC being Super Hoooot, yet for some reason despite being an Frost dragon have black hair (just a nitpick). World Background: The world is your standered medieval fantasy world nothing fancy. That and the alarming amount of predatory men, seriously every background character wants to rape, bang, or kill Dana. The first people/men she encounters as a human talk about raping her. And how could I have forgot the Insane amount of times im reminded about her being Hoooooot. Plus the way men in this novel are protrayed is an embarrassment and like how SJWs very the world. Women are spiteful and hate Dana for her Hoooooootness. Both genders will be nice time to time for the plot or to be a stepping stone for the protagonist. If you read this entire thing I appaude you, coungrates I have wrote something worth reading unlike this book. To the author if you even read this, I don't hate you of course your story's just really suck. Im not a professional so I can't give you counstructive criticism. But if this is your passion keep writing, it gets better. Trust me drawing is also quite the drain sometimes.
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The English is horrible. The info stuffed down your throat in the first seven chapters (pre prologue) is pointless and could've been easily introduced in one.
Awesome story and the frequency of the updates is better than other stories I can’t wait till the mc will find a good match that she can’t completely overpower or is to strong for her to retaliate against.
Love the novel, other than some minor issues this book is a gold mine. Issues include minimal world background, and inconsistent and dichotomous characterization. Other than that, I want more!!
It's awsome. :D \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/ \O/
At first I was like, ahhh is this gonna be another one of those people raising beasts that are really OP, but the person themselves are weak af? But then, when I realised the MC herself was a dragon I was like YAAASSSSSS. So in my opinion everything's great, except the UPDATES.
I really like the MC here. We have honest to god character development, which is insane to me. It's fun watching the MC go from sparing people to plotting their demise. It's also funny that she's incredibly out of tune with the world. Concepts like 'face' have no meaning to her, so she gives it exactly no fucks. She's the perfect mix of personality traits, almost feels like an actual logical person. Arrogant when she can be, humble when she needs to be. I hate reading those stories about some godly badass reincarnating into the body of some dreg with no power... AND STILL ACTING LIKE HE'S A GOD. Even worse when everything just works out for them regardless, it's so stupid. And the romance.... or should I say lack of it. Thank buddha for that, I haven't read a single story with a female MC that didn't make me want to claw my eyes out. Defo give this one a read.
I like this novel very much, get me hooked from the start yet after some time author stopped updating novel timely it made me sad as I like this novel very much. As such I hope one day the author can once again start updating timely. Overall a good read made carve for more
I only read this because I'm a sucker for female protagonists as well as non-human protagonists. Unfortunately, there are WAY WAAAAAYYYYYY too many grammatical errors. Plot holes are frequent. The story is super rushed at times. Dana is too arrogant/prideful/cunning to the point of perfection. She retains zero personality from her past self which is extremely disappointing. The cultivation levels are also extremely and swiftly overcome. It almost seems like a joke. I'm also not a big fan of the system design. Having a shop is just stupid. I'll keep reading but only because female non-human lead combines my most loved leads.
Great story but could do better with spelling like definitely not defiantly. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
I love it i love it so much (°∆° i have been reading it for the past 2 days now becous i am really doing details and stuff and i loved it so much keep doing what you do best writter
dropped at chapter 11.Why would she spare cultivators that try to enslave her??? Seeing this kind of stupid logic, wont bother with the rest of the story.
Hey, I just wanted to ask if everything was going ok? No you don't know me, at least as far as I know, but I've read both mystic and beast system and liked them. I'm not searching for an update or anything just wanted to wish you well and thank you for what you created, so good luck well wishes and thanks for the chapters. P.S. I left this as a comment before I thought about leaving it as a review, so it might pop up a few times.
This story develops really fast. The main character, in my opinion, is not very consistent. There is not a very clear plot, and she unrealistically gains strength too quickly.
I like this novel a lot. As story progession is going on a good direction and characters developments are also timely. So I hope u can keep up updating novel . Nice work,thanks for the such a good novel
Good story execpt it's hard to imagine some points .....,..,....................................... ...................................................... ............................,..........,......... ...............,................................. ..................................................... ...........,...........,........ .......................,..,.........
this is a great novel, at first i had my doubts knowing the novel has a system but until this point the mc hasn't really abused the system or more like the system isn't easily abused, anyway im enjoying the journey and the perspective of the mc it's quite unique. Hopefully the author won't abuse the system int he future
卷 0 : Auxiliary Volume
卷 1 : Volume 1 - Azure Continent
- 1 Prologue 5 years ago
- 2 Chapter 1 - Rebirth as a Frost Wyvern 5 years ago
- 3 Chapter 2 - Beast Cultivating System 5 years ago
- 4 Chapter 3 - Features Of Beast Cultivating System 5 years ago
- 5 Chapter 4 - First Encounter, First Kill 5 years ago
- 6 Chapter 5 - Training in Devils Peak 5 years ago
- 7 Chapter 6 - System Store and Rank Six Body Refining 5 years ago
- 8 Chapter 7 - Battling Golden Monkey King 5 years ago
- 9 Chapter 8 - Ninth Rank of Body Refining and Distressed Human Cultivators 5 years ago
- 10 Chapter 9 - Fall of Evergreen Clan and Sighting of Frost Wyveryn 5 years ago
- 11 Chapter 10 - Forming Beast Core and becoming a Rank 1 Qi Circulation Realm Spirit Beast! 5 years ago
- 12 Chapter 11 - Battling Qi Circulation Cultivatiors 5 years ago
- 13 Chapter 12 - Angered Azure Emperor and Rapid Increase in Strength 5 years ago
- 14 Chapter 13 - Confronting First Prince and Houtian Cultivator 5 years ago
- 15 Chapter 14 - Reaching First Rank Houtian Realm and Unlocking Human Form! 5 years ago
- 16 Chapter 15 - Naked in the Forest 5 years ago
- 17 Chapter 16 - Exploring the Capital 5 years ago
- 18 Chapter 17 - Entering Skyclad Academy 5 years ago
- 19 Chapter 18 - Headmasters Former Sect's Secret Technique - Ice Lotus Arts 5 years ago
- 20 Chapter 19 - Becoming a 2nd Rank Houtian Cultivator and Comprehending Ice Lotus Arts 5 years ago
- 21 Chapter 20 - Dumbfounded old man Zhao and Proposition towards Kaiden Evergreen 5 years ago
- 22 Chapter 21 - Truth of the Fall of the Evergreen Clan and Seeking ways to Improve Bloodline - Earth Wyrms 5 years ago
- 23 Chapter 22 - Stopping at Bright stone Town and Lustful Young Master Lan 5 years ago
- 24 Chapter 23 - Battling Earth Wyrms 5 years ago
- 25 Chapter 24 - Big Increase in Cultivation and Unrest in Azure Continent 5 years ago
- 26 Chapter 25 - Meeting with the Noble Families 5 years ago
- 27 Chapter 26 - Desperate Old Man Zhao and Rank 3 Life Extending Pill 5 years ago
- 28 Chapter 27 - The Fall of The Azure Emperor 5 years ago
- 29 Chapter 28 - Crowning of a New Emperor 5 years ago
- 30 Chapter 29 - The Three Empire's Alliance 5 years ago
卷 2 : Volume 2 - Xinghai Continent
- 31 Chapter 30 - New Continent, New Challenges 5 years ago
- 32 Chapter 31 - Narrow Escape 5 years ago
- 33 Chapter 32 - Elemental Sect Recruitment - 'Talent Test' 5 years ago
- 34 Chapter 33 - Stage One of the Talent Test 5 years ago
- 35 Chapter 34 - Being Put Forward to do Martial Skill with Prince Cheng and Princess Hui Ying 5 years ago
- 36 Chapter 35 - Creating a Stir within the Elemental Sect 5 years ago
- 37 Chapter 36 - Ruthless Elder Wi 5 years ago
- 38 Chapter 37 - Gaining Another Master 5 years ago
- 39 Chapter 38 - The Tragic Fate of Yueqin Wen's Daughter and Joining the Elemental Sect 5 years ago
- 40 Chapter 39 - Attending Lecture 5 years ago
- 41 Chapter 40 - Impressed Head Elder Yang and Yearly Sect Gathering 5 years ago
- 42 Chapter 41 - Visiting Library 5 years ago
- 43 Chapter 42 - Conceited Noble and Selecting Martial Skills 5 years ago
- 44 Chapter 43 - Spending a Month Hunting and Cultivating 5 years ago
- 45 Chapter 44 - The Dark Reality 5 years ago
- 46 Chapter 45 - Unravelling 5 years ago
- 47 Chapter 46 - Battling the Blaze Wyrms 5 years ago
- 48 Chapter 47 - Close Door Cultivation Within Volcano and Treasure! 5 years ago
- 49 Chapter 48 - Great Progress and New Reward From System 5 years ago
- 50 Chapter 49 - Arriving at the Entrance of Secret Realm 5 years ago
- 51 Chapter 50 - Entering the Secret Realm 5 years ago
- 52 Chapter 51 - Horrific Fate of the Foolish Trio and The First Inheritance 5 years ago
- 53 Chapter 52 - Trial By Fire 5 years ago
- 54 Chapter 53 - Great Change 5 years ago
- 55 Chapter 54 - The Truth Revealed 5 years ago
- 56 Chapter 55 - The Lustful Snake 5 years ago
- 57 Chapter 56 - Facing the Guardian of the Swamp 5 years ago
- 58 Chapter 57 - The Dryad 5 years ago
- 59 Chapter 58 - Facing a Gigantic Shark 5 years ago
- 60 Chapter 59 - The Final Guardian 5 years ago
- 61 Chapter 60 - New Friends, Old Enemies 5 years ago
- 62 Chapter 61 - The Fate of Princess Hui Ying 5 years ago
- 63 Chapter 62 - Opening the Most Mysterious Inheritance Within the Secret Realm 5 years ago
- 64 Chapter 63 - Heavenly Treasures of the Secret Realm and Information Provided by a Mysterious Expert! 5 years ago
- 65 Chapter 64 - Saint Bloodline 5 years ago
- 66 Chapter 65 - The Horde of Arrogant Young Masters 5 years ago
- 67 Chapter 66 - Exiting Secret Realm 5 years ago
- 68 Chapter 67 - Culprit Behind the Battle 5 years ago
- 69 Chapter 68 - Yueqin Wen meets Lavendia and Maia 5 years ago
- 70 Chapter 69 - Returning back to the Elemental Sect 5 years ago
- 71 Chapter 70 - Commotion Caused Upon Entering Elemental Sect 5 years ago
- 72 Chapter 71 - Closed-Door Cultivation and Mayhem caused by Lavendia and Maia In Dana's Absence 5 years ago
- 73 Chapter 72 - The Two Factions 5 years ago
- 74 Chapter 73 - Revealing Strength Within Arena 5 years ago
- 75 Chapter 74 - Lavedia’s Recount of the Past 3 Months and Anxious Yueqin Wen 5 years ago
- 76 Chapter 75 - The Culprit Behind the Suppression of the Elemental Sect 5 years ago
- 77 Chapter 76 - Arriving at the Heavenly Noble Sect 4 years ago
- 78 Chapter 77 - The Scheme Unfolds 4 years ago
- 79 Chapter 78 - The Sect Gathering Begins 3 years ago
- 80 Chapter 79 - Knocking out the Competition 2 years ago
- 81 Chapter 80 - Uppercut from Hell 2 years ago
Hi everyone this is my first novel, so it might be some errors here and there so just bear with me... I do read comments, so feel free to share and I will take them into account throughout the novel.