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The writing is very fluid, the characters are likeable and realistic, the story advances in a calm and not rushed way and the world get's introduced step by step befitting the situation. It is really a perfect fit for an actual Book I would buy, only downside is, it's been 3 months since the last update, I really hope the Author will continue this story. Until then this will have a warm place in my library. :3
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I am here! I love your book it's great and cool and easy going it's great 🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤😁😁😁😁😁😁😊😊😊😊😊😎😎😎😎😎 love it man
For starter, the story is the same reicarnator novel with the protagonist born with hyper-intelligence, super comprehension and all magical capabilities. However we are not center on continuous fights to become stronger, protect the loved one or revenge, it is a slice-of-life novel in a protected environment with loved ones and the protagonist behaves for the most part in a childish way. This creates a light reading, but at the same time there isn't the problem of repetition of the idea from others that is representative of the genre. Regarding the writing quality, there are some problematics. First of all in the last few chapters, the introspective thoughts of the protagonists are in new paragraphs separated from the rest of the chapter with the asterisks. This creates a problem with the continuity of the reading, usually the separation of the paragraphs with asterisks is done only when we have a complete separation in the narration with a jump in different a location or time. Moreover, always regarding these 'inner-thoughts paragraphs', it is understandable that you want to write what should be in reality talking to herself, so to create a better effect I think a modification in the punctuation should be needed, the problem is that also I don't know how to do that. As you are writing I understand what you mean only after a re-read of the paragraph sometimes. I don't mean to eliminate these parts, which are important for the story, but a better writing can increase the readability of the story. Other than this points I don't remember any other problematics with the english in the novel. On the point of the story development and world background, there exist some deficiencies, which, if they are resolved, could improve the novel. First it is the lack in world-building. I don't want an entire chapter of only world-building but during the chapter in which she read in the library, sometimes it could be inserted inner-thought regarding the continents, countries and history. This can be written using different chapter, especially from the 9-th where she starts to teach to the prince. About the story development, the problem is the characters usage. In particular the princes (they are two or three? I remember two but in the yesterday chapter they were three), they can be a great source of story. We have children of different social strata that live and grow together, so they interactions and plays with the other members of the caste can cover chapters on chapters, this is a component of slice-of-life which is essential to a story like this and its absence creates a vacuum in the narration. In fact you are limiting the narration only to the interaction of the king and the protagonist, all the other characters, like the mother, the queen and the princes, appear for few phases and are relegated to the background. In the end I like this novel and I will wait every time for the new chapter. I hope my comments haven't destroyed you, I only hope they can be a source of ideas to improve the new chapters (and you shouldn't listen literally to everything that I say, because everyone has different ideas and mentality). Thanks to these fullfilling chapters.
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact kenreview@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
The writing is very fluid, the characters are likeable and realistic, the story advances in a calm and not rushed way and the world get's introduced step by step befitting the situation. It is really a perfect fit for an actual Book I would buy, only downside is, it's been 3 months since the last update, I really hope the Author will continue this story. Until then this will have a warm place in my library. :3
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I am here! I love your book it's great and cool and easy going it's great 🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤😁😁😁😁😁😁😊😊😊😊😊😎😎😎😎😎 love it man
For starter, the story is the same reicarnator novel with the protagonist born with hyper-intelligence, super comprehension and all magical capabilities. However we are not center on continuous fights to become stronger, protect the loved one or revenge, it is a slice-of-life novel in a protected environment with loved ones and the protagonist behaves for the most part in a childish way. This creates a light reading, but at the same time there isn't the problem of repetition of the idea from others that is representative of the genre. Regarding the writing quality, there are some problematics. First of all in the last few chapters, the introspective thoughts of the protagonists are in new paragraphs separated from the rest of the chapter with the asterisks. This creates a problem with the continuity of the reading, usually the separation of the paragraphs with asterisks is done only when we have a complete separation in the narration with a jump in different a location or time. Moreover, always regarding these 'inner-thoughts paragraphs', it is understandable that you want to write what should be in reality talking to herself, so to create a better effect I think a modification in the punctuation should be needed, the problem is that also I don't know how to do that. As you are writing I understand what you mean only after a re-read of the paragraph sometimes. I don't mean to eliminate these parts, which are important for the story, but a better writing can increase the readability of the story. Other than this points I don't remember any other problematics with the english in the novel. On the point of the story development and world background, there exist some deficiencies, which, if they are resolved, could improve the novel. First it is the lack in world-building. I don't want an entire chapter of only world-building but during the chapter in which she read in the library, sometimes it could be inserted inner-thought regarding the continents, countries and history. This can be written using different chapter, especially from the 9-th where she starts to teach to the prince. About the story development, the problem is the characters usage. In particular the princes (they are two or three? I remember two but in the yesterday chapter they were three), they can be a great source of story. We have children of different social strata that live and grow together, so they interactions and plays with the other members of the caste can cover chapters on chapters, this is a component of slice-of-life which is essential to a story like this and its absence creates a vacuum in the narration. In fact you are limiting the narration only to the interaction of the king and the protagonist, all the other characters, like the mother, the queen and the princes, appear for few phases and are relegated to the background. In the end I like this novel and I will wait every time for the new chapter. I hope my comments haven't destroyed you, I only hope they can be a source of ideas to improve the new chapters (and you shouldn't listen literally to everything that I say, because everyone has different ideas and mentality). Thanks to these fullfilling chapters.
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact kenreview@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.