Hikari Okami: Kitsune Series

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MoonBirth

A story about fox demons? Sign me up! The story begins from Hikari's perspective and how he came to be sealed by the evil Onmyouji (powerful priests). We then shift to the protagonist's (Miyako's) point of view as she sees him in her dreams and he beseeches her to help him. From the get go, Hikari finds himself drawn to the girl and even surprisingly jealous, but he doesn't understand why. There aren't many chapters released but there's a lot of Japanese terms and descriptions which the author also offers an English translation to them as she writes. Tip: I'd suggest writing a glossary in every chapter for all the Japanese words being used. Keep writing, author! We, the people want to read more. ~

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MishaK

It is an interesting story! Loved the genre! I haven't really read such stories earlier. Keep up the hard work and keep updating. Characters are cute!

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UnjustlyUnderpaid

The plot of the story is being developed slowly but well so far. Although I’m not exactly sure where things are heading, they do seem to be reaching an interesting point. The writing is pretty good with only a few errors here and there that won’t effect the story much, there are many Japanese terms used in the novel, which makes some parts hard to understand, but the author explains most of these words pretty well. While the design of the Mc is pretty decent, some of the side characters have emotions that just don’t feel real. While this is not for all of the side characters, there were definitely some that I saw that made me stop and just say, “That’s not how feelings work.” The world background has only a bit of explanation but that may be because I I’m early on in the novel. There isn’t much known about the world other than a few ****** facts but I think more may be revealed in the future. After all Rome wasn’t built in a day. I hate to say it but the update schedule is erratic and almost random. There seems to be no pattern and it is hard for me to say how whether or not someone should expect frequent updates from this novel.

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AquaLunaris

Your story is very well written with great details that I can easily visualize the image you're trying to convey. I like how you use Japanese words and terms, gives me a Japanese vibe. You might want to find an editor to make the story flow smoother, I feel like something missing in your writing but I can't quite place it. Keep up the good work!

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Reinesse

the sentence structure is very nice and there were almost no error. this isn't usually my genre but you executed your story properly. nice one, dude. keep it up.

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JunkieOverThe_Moon

Ur novel is awesome!!!! There's no mistakeat all and the shirt chsptwr, light romantic feeling and japanese setting really make wish for more. Keep up the good work, author-san!!!!!!!

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Little_Koi

Great work, promising love story, japanese terms can be confusing some time but we understand the majority, I would have liked an explanation more detailed on what is a youkai at first and kitsune even if i know it means aproximatively demon and fox. Anyway it is interesting, next challenge would be to write the future fights.

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Nightmare_Taichou

This is a well-written story, so engaging, so well described ― the characters and the world in which they live, and there were little to no grammar errors. Worth adding to collection.

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MedusaDiva

I finished reading it up to now and added it to my fav i really would like to see what happens next i would recommend u to use ... because this actually makes someone want to know what will happen next its a factor to increase attention when someone just uses. It feels like the part is finished i hope u understood this oof

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SinB

Really good, you have little to no spelling erros and little grammatical issues. Though I think you have something wrong here. The period should go inside the quotation marks, not outside. It looks kinda weird to me. You only do if you're having a citation. Like "The Stanford prison experiment had gotten out of control" (14).

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ZGearCecil

Great Novel. Thank you for the Meal, It has been well received. 『いただきます』『いただきます』『いただきます』 『いただきます』『いただきます』『いただきます』 『いただきます』『いただきます』『いただきます』 『いただきます』『いただきます』『いただきます』 『いただきます』『いただきます』『いただきます』 『いただきます』『いただきます』『いただきます』