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It's hard to read, with a lot of errors. It feels more like a stream of consciousness, without breaks than a story. He talks with an obviously 'cute' system in his head - in reality, a completely unnecessary entity, made to be cute, but is instead cringe-worthy. Their interactions are chaotic, aren't moving a story, which pretty much annoys me. It's a pity - I would really love to read a story set in TDG, about breaking seals created by assholes gods. Sadly, instead of focusing on the story, the author writes nonsensical banter with a 'cute' system, trying to be cool. It goes for paragraphs...
Dont get me wrong i like the story its just the grammar could be improved a lot. Have you tried running it throught something with an autocorrect feature as you proof read it. I feel that would increase over all chapter quality immensely.
Do not drop, more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
Continue with the good work.............................................................................................................Continue with the good work.............................................................................................................Continue with the good work.............................................................................................................
Type your review here. Please write your review as detailed as you can. Your review would be very important to the story (at least 140 characters).
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Gogogo Continue :D ....................................................................................................................................................
Uh was looking forward to reading it but the novel till chapter 50+ is just pure body cultivation ? The whole point of TDG was the spiritual demons cultivation and it took him so long to even touch that barely and the mc actually likes Nei li? He is one of the worst mc ever made and you make him out to be decent ? T.T Disappointing
Story with many new places and characters with cool backgrounds, thats a big plus in itself BUT the grammar is the total issue which itself is a ig minus like Dan Tian (or usually Dantian) becomes Dantan like wtf do you mean Talk(Tan) Core(Dan), while words like You're was needed but you used it as Your which is a grammatical error and it is the same with There which was being used as Their, same pronunciation but meaning is different. This may seems bad but a person does not trully mature without criticism hitting them hard.
I haven'tt start reading, aside from the infoni get its harem Then it was five star Pls ning'er and the alchemist woman and shen xue if possible Pls give me some spoiler or answer Anyway pls dont drop it author Also make him always stronger than nie li and demon lord lol
(ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ ✧ﾟ･: *ヽ(◕ヮ◕ヽ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ ✧ﾟ･: *ヽ(◕ヮ◕ヽ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ ✧ﾟ･: *ヽ(◕ヮ◕ヽ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ ✧ﾟ･: *ヽ(◕ヮ◕ヽ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ ✧ﾟ･: *ヽ(◕ヮ◕ヽ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ ✧ﾟ･: *ヽ(◕ヮ◕ヽ)
Making the frequency of new chapters regular is better even if the chapter doesn't always contain a lot of action After all readers love to rread stories that are long like if you have a bank account or a dosage of chapters daily .
Best TDG Novel i have ever read.Continue with the good work.............................................................................................................
Best TDG Novel i have ever read.Continue with the good work.............................................................................................................
I enjoy this book. And I hope the Author sticks with this novel and eventually finishes his Own Version of TDG, And For Anyone Who Enjoys Comedy you will Enjoy all the Bickering That Goes on.
I enjoy this book. And I hope the Author sticks with this novel and eventually finishes his Own Version of TDG, And For Anyone Who Enjoys Comedy you will Enjoy all the Bickering That Goes on.
I'm was hoping that this novel was good but it is really a disappointment, have a lot of basic errors like Datian became datan and Nie Li became Nie Lie, dude you don't know even the name of the mc of the original, and the mc of this novel is pathetic he don't know what grow is, 5 years doing the same error and even staying in the bed recovering for a week because he nearly died because he want to show up, yep this guy is a idiot, the author thing that the mc is funny but he is just cringe.
It's great to see another TDG fanfic in the fray, as I think that there are not enough fanfics of TDG! I have yet to read the story, but I hope that you do the series justice and whip out some amazing fanfic plot! *Also please no harem, that ****'s horrible*
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It's hard to read, with a lot of errors. It feels more like a stream of consciousness, without breaks than a story. He talks with an obviously 'cute' system in his head - in reality, a completely unnecessary entity, made to be cute, but is instead cringe-worthy. Their interactions are chaotic, aren't moving a story, which pretty much annoys me. It's a pity - I would really love to read a story set in TDG, about breaking seals created by assholes gods. Sadly, instead of focusing on the story, the author writes nonsensical banter with a 'cute' system, trying to be cool. It goes for paragraphs...
Dont get me wrong i like the story its just the grammar could be improved a lot. Have you tried running it throught something with an autocorrect feature as you proof read it. I feel that would increase over all chapter quality immensely.
Do not drop, more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
Continue with the good work.............................................................................................................Continue with the good work.............................................................................................................Continue with the good work.............................................................................................................
Type your review here. Please write your review as detailed as you can. Your review would be very important to the story (at least 140 characters).
knzkvnkldhihgiafhajfihiytiqylfjasgfasvb,vbzxvbzvjkdkgoieqyeotyeqyteqhdsgldhglhlhalbvabvlahhfiqyriyeqiyfoieqfhdlvdbvcbvlahfoyrywqifjldbvlvasahfiywocbv,bc,vb,bvjdfgeoureoihlew
Gogogo Continue :D ....................................................................................................................................................
Uh was looking forward to reading it but the novel till chapter 50+ is just pure body cultivation ? The whole point of TDG was the spiritual demons cultivation and it took him so long to even touch that barely and the mc actually likes Nei li? He is one of the worst mc ever made and you make him out to be decent ? T.T Disappointing
Story with many new places and characters with cool backgrounds, thats a big plus in itself BUT the grammar is the total issue which itself is a ig minus like Dan Tian (or usually Dantian) becomes Dantan like wtf do you mean Talk(Tan) Core(Dan), while words like You're was needed but you used it as Your which is a grammatical error and it is the same with There which was being used as Their, same pronunciation but meaning is different. This may seems bad but a person does not trully mature without criticism hitting them hard.
I haven'tt start reading, aside from the infoni get its harem Then it was five star Pls ning'er and the alchemist woman and shen xue if possible Pls give me some spoiler or answer Anyway pls dont drop it author Also make him always stronger than nie li and demon lord lol
(ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ ✧ﾟ･: *ヽ(◕ヮ◕ヽ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ ✧ﾟ･: *ヽ(◕ヮ◕ヽ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ ✧ﾟ･: *ヽ(◕ヮ◕ヽ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ ✧ﾟ･: *ヽ(◕ヮ◕ヽ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ ✧ﾟ･: *ヽ(◕ヮ◕ヽ) (ﾉ◕ヮ◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧ ✧ﾟ･: *ヽ(◕ヮ◕ヽ)
Making the frequency of new chapters regular is better even if the chapter doesn't always contain a lot of action After all readers love to rread stories that are long like if you have a bank account or a dosage of chapters daily .
Best TDG Novel i have ever read.Continue with the good work.............................................................................................................
Best TDG Novel i have ever read.Continue with the good work.............................................................................................................
I enjoy this book. And I hope the Author sticks with this novel and eventually finishes his Own Version of TDG, And For Anyone Who Enjoys Comedy you will Enjoy all the Bickering That Goes on.
I enjoy this book. And I hope the Author sticks with this novel and eventually finishes his Own Version of TDG, And For Anyone Who Enjoys Comedy you will Enjoy all the Bickering That Goes on.
I'm was hoping that this novel was good but it is really a disappointment, have a lot of basic errors like Datian became datan and Nie Li became Nie Lie, dude you don't know even the name of the mc of the original, and the mc of this novel is pathetic he don't know what grow is, 5 years doing the same error and even staying in the bed recovering for a week because he nearly died because he want to show up, yep this guy is a idiot, the author thing that the mc is funny but he is just cringe.
It's great to see another TDG fanfic in the fray, as I think that there are not enough fanfics of TDG! I have yet to read the story, but I hope that you do the series justice and whip out some amazing fanfic plot! *Also please no harem, that ****'s horrible*
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