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I thought tag said Anti-hero so where is this ??? Grammar is like MTL translated. Very mushy washy bleeding heart mc with no Anti-hero personality.
MC that baby****ting Naruto, as always ShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShitting
I love the plot and great character development for the MC, Kenta. I truly hope you continue the story and I am looking forward to your updates. I would like to also address writing quality to perhaps give others some things to consider. In this review, I gave you 5 stars in writing quality for several reasons: 1. Your profile states that you write to practice English. In that case, I use a different set of standards - as long as its easy for me to rearrange a few words, replace or add a few words in my head as I read, its great.. You wrote well enough to give excellent context clues to make that possible. I consider it an A+ job. 2. English is the hardest language to learn due to all our "exceptions to the rule" in grammar. I got that little fact from my language professor so not my opinion. I took 2 years of Spanish in high school and then 2 semesters at University and nope, I can't write it all and only remember the word for cat and bathroom. Why? I have no idea especially the word for cat because I've never had one nor pet them. I also took a year of French right after Spanish. It was so hard. I drove my French teacher nuts because if I forgot the French word, I would throw in the Spanish word. Okay, yes - I have never achieved my dream of being bilingual but it wasn't without trying. My point in sharing all this is to show it is hard to write in a second language and if writer's waited until they got everything perfect, we would miss out on a lot of great stories/novels/books to read! Oops! I'm going to stop now because I wrote way more than I intended. Just know - it worth reading and thumbs up to the writer!
keep going i really liked <3 keep going i really liked <3 keep going i really liked <3 keep going i really liked <3 keep going i really liked <3
what the hell!! what's wrong with those people who gives 5 star ratings!!??!! the story is barely readable, it's like reading a machine translated story.. please check your chapters before posting!
História começa com um bom ritmo e envolve o leitor. E não tem o problema de pegar o MC e só jogar uma porrada de poder sem explicação uma ótima historia.
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-----------------------------------------------------------If i had to give you a positive its the canon divergence isn't too much or too less a negative would be its confusing with he or her on haku.
I love this novel and the way the characters interact with each other. There are some parts where its hard to understand because words that shouldnt be used are. I will say this it is good and about the grammar as you can see Im not the best either. Good luck to the author.
i find this a nicely put together story.decent all rounder so to speak i have givin my thoughts now for filler. lllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllokay okay okay good good good good good story story story story story okokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokkokokokokokokokokokokokokoko
It's a good novel and I love how you write the story it's great 👍 but can you do one update a day because your story is good 😊 man 👌 But you don't update some times so it is slow for as the riders 😕 But l still love the book it's ok if you can't update often do to your life staff but can you make it 3 or 4 a week 🙏😬 thx 🙂
It’s a good start the grammar is bad but i can steamroll right through that beside that I think this noble has a lot of potential all I ask is don’t make him to op.
Not sure if I am the only one who can't understand the story at all.!? The grammar is just too bad. Sometimes, even after reading the same line like, 3-4 times, I still can't understand it. I still gave 2 stars because I only read like, 2 chapters or so... and I didn't want to give the minimum stars just because author's first language isn't English.
This Review it's in Spanish. Habrán paso que aquí viene un desvergonzado a dar sus 5 estrellas a su libro porque puede... Pero justo cuando esta por colocar su calificación de 5 en su propio libro, llega un lector que descubrió su casa e intenta agredir al autor porque su libro no tiene aire de que tendrá harem. Pero el Autor tenía una tarjeta defensiva de 3 estrellas que al recibir un posible ataque se activa y manda su manada de chihuahuas a arrancarle el dedo gordo del pie al lector agresivo. A lo lejos una silueta con pelo puntiagudo que se revela contra la gravedad logra oler a alguien uso una tarjeta de monstruos. "Me huele a un posible retador para un duelo" Él dijo eso para después dejar salir una sonrisa retorcida porque en ese duelo también hará trampa.
grammars so bad its like some cat found at ball tree in house yard rescued ladder with great speed. happy made me than sir have pie. apple no cherry cat loved.
good start and love this novel hope the author will improve his/her writing and release more chapter and have more words at lease 5 chap a day with 5k words/chap (*ゝω・*)ノ(ゝω・)(ゝω・)
I am sorry but in the end I don't see what makes him special, what makes him the main character of this fanfiction. Is it because he is an Uzumaki with large chakra reserves and high talent for fuinjutsu? Every Uzumaki had that. So what can he do? These early chapters don't make me want to read anymore of this as he has nothing special. Anyways, that x2 learn speed or what that was is pretty lame... I actually forgot his other perk...hmm, what was it?
i will be waiting for more chapters as i see potential in this novel Ather47 Ather47bbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbb
You've all red the naruto fan fics, but this time with a shocking twist.... it's illegible. Aaaaand that should be 140
And I thought mtl was bad, completely illegible. It would have been more understandable if you wrote in your native language and Google translated, that's how bad the grammar is. Doesn't even deserve 1 star.
I thought tag said Anti-hero so where is this ??? Grammar is like MTL translated. Very mushy washy bleeding heart mc with no Anti-hero personality.
MC that baby****ting Naruto, as always ShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShittingShitting
I love the plot and great character development for the MC, Kenta. I truly hope you continue the story and I am looking forward to your updates. I would like to also address writing quality to perhaps give others some things to consider. In this review, I gave you 5 stars in writing quality for several reasons: 1. Your profile states that you write to practice English. In that case, I use a different set of standards - as long as its easy for me to rearrange a few words, replace or add a few words in my head as I read, its great.. You wrote well enough to give excellent context clues to make that possible. I consider it an A+ job. 2. English is the hardest language to learn due to all our "exceptions to the rule" in grammar. I got that little fact from my language professor so not my opinion. I took 2 years of Spanish in high school and then 2 semesters at University and nope, I can't write it all and only remember the word for cat and bathroom. Why? I have no idea especially the word for cat because I've never had one nor pet them. I also took a year of French right after Spanish. It was so hard. I drove my French teacher nuts because if I forgot the French word, I would throw in the Spanish word. Okay, yes - I have never achieved my dream of being bilingual but it wasn't without trying. My point in sharing all this is to show it is hard to write in a second language and if writer's waited until they got everything perfect, we would miss out on a lot of great stories/novels/books to read! Oops! I'm going to stop now because I wrote way more than I intended. Just know - it worth reading and thumbs up to the writer!
keep going i really liked <3 keep going i really liked <3 keep going i really liked <3 keep going i really liked <3 keep going i really liked <3
what the hell!! what's wrong with those people who gives 5 star ratings!!??!! the story is barely readable, it's like reading a machine translated story.. please check your chapters before posting!
História começa com um bom ritmo e envolve o leitor. E não tem o problema de pegar o MC e só jogar uma porrada de poder sem explicação uma ótima historia.
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-----------------------------------------------------------If i had to give you a positive its the canon divergence isn't too much or too less a negative would be its confusing with he or her on haku.
I love this novel and the way the characters interact with each other. There are some parts where its hard to understand because words that shouldnt be used are. I will say this it is good and about the grammar as you can see Im not the best either. Good luck to the author.
i find this a nicely put together story.decent all rounder so to speak i have givin my thoughts now for filler. lllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllokay okay okay good good good good good story story story story story okokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokokkokokokokokokokokokokokokoko
It's a good novel and I love how you write the story it's great 👍 but can you do one update a day because your story is good 😊 man 👌 But you don't update some times so it is slow for as the riders 😕 But l still love the book it's ok if you can't update often do to your life staff but can you make it 3 or 4 a week 🙏😬 thx 🙂
It’s a good start the grammar is bad but i can steamroll right through that beside that I think this noble has a lot of potential all I ask is don’t make him to op.
Not sure if I am the only one who can't understand the story at all.!? The grammar is just too bad. Sometimes, even after reading the same line like, 3-4 times, I still can't understand it. I still gave 2 stars because I only read like, 2 chapters or so... and I didn't want to give the minimum stars just because author's first language isn't English.
This Review it's in Spanish. Habrán paso que aquí viene un desvergonzado a dar sus 5 estrellas a su libro porque puede... Pero justo cuando esta por colocar su calificación de 5 en su propio libro, llega un lector que descubrió su casa e intenta agredir al autor porque su libro no tiene aire de que tendrá harem. Pero el Autor tenía una tarjeta defensiva de 3 estrellas que al recibir un posible ataque se activa y manda su manada de chihuahuas a arrancarle el dedo gordo del pie al lector agresivo. A lo lejos una silueta con pelo puntiagudo que se revela contra la gravedad logra oler a alguien uso una tarjeta de monstruos. "Me huele a un posible retador para un duelo" Él dijo eso para después dejar salir una sonrisa retorcida porque en ese duelo también hará trampa.
grammars so bad its like some cat found at ball tree in house yard rescued ladder with great speed. happy made me than sir have pie. apple no cherry cat loved.
good start and love this novel hope the author will improve his/her writing and release more chapter and have more words at lease 5 chap a day with 5k words/chap (*ゝω・*)ノ(ゝω・)(ゝω・)
I am sorry but in the end I don't see what makes him special, what makes him the main character of this fanfiction. Is it because he is an Uzumaki with large chakra reserves and high talent for fuinjutsu? Every Uzumaki had that. So what can he do? These early chapters don't make me want to read anymore of this as he has nothing special. Anyways, that x2 learn speed or what that was is pretty lame... I actually forgot his other perk...hmm, what was it?
i will be waiting for more chapters as i see potential in this novel Ather47 Ather47bbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbb
You've all red the naruto fan fics, but this time with a shocking twist.... it's illegible. Aaaaand that should be 140
And I thought mtl was bad, completely illegible. It would have been more understandable if you wrote in your native language and Google translated, that's how bad the grammar is. Doesn't even deserve 1 star.