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Even though your novel is ***** and immature, yet I find the the story is actually good... Well, for my worries, don't slaughter the original one piece... But I don't mind if there is changes that isn't too drastic... well, anyway, peace out...
The gamer manga ... gasp vant believe its about this go han jihan Àaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaassssaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa 140....... 140....... 140....... 140....... 140....... 140.......
Can u give extra chapter like 14chpter ah week its really ah good novel pls...☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺and its interisting for other reader for ur novel..
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The story can be written and found everywhere there is person with bit of imagination. I support this story but characters and writing style is a novice level. I can read properly, don't know who is talking, what's his motive. Everything is just like it happens and we just accept it as it is.
this is great one for onepiece fun-fiction i hope u all like it dakingfvoianwgoinWGIOnAOIGNoilANMgoiamzoikwgawfawsfafagfvagWFFWafwsFWSGFhbedhbzh
I haven't read any chapters yet but I do know this will be a good novel because he is reborn in the one piece world. ..............................
ok nice plot and good imagination. Its started to get interesting, but why is chapters length got shorter and shorter plz note it and make it a stander length chap next time and correct the chap no and title of 8 and 9 chap
I love it the story has great potencial and its really entretaining i looooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooveeeeeeeeeee it
5 star for this. -,-) Ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora
the story so far(chap 7) seems interesting, i like it and would like for the mc to work independently from the strawhats, like make him have his own crew, give some quest to find the one piece, and don't give him a lot of devil fruit they are rare, like extremely rare, maybe every 50 to 100 chapters he by chance or plunder whatever, finds one, but not always get it's power, also i seemed to notice that you rushed the last chapters, the event were going so fast,so slow down a little, another point is that he is wasting his stat point while he could train for them, your story is great by the way keep on working
like the story so far, the mc shoild do some grinding, and how does heget weapon skills of higher lvl just by picking them up? well best of luck to the author, keep up the good work dont lose motivazion or inspiration
Well, if it a one piece story line. Dont crashing it down with the main plotod one piece, like some novel dat put bleach power at one piece world. He literally killed some luffy exp, so I hope he'll be like "im passing just to get some ketchup"
TRUCK SAMA KITAAAA!!!!!!! Beep beep!!! *vrroooommmmm* _____________________________________________________________________________________-____________-___________________
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Even though your novel is ***** and immature, yet I find the the story is actually good... Well, for my worries, don't slaughter the original one piece... But I don't mind if there is changes that isn't too drastic... well, anyway, peace out...
The gamer manga ... gasp vant believe its about this go han jihan Àaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaassssaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa 140....... 140....... 140....... 140....... 140....... 140.......
Can u give extra chapter like 14chpter ah week its really ah good novel pls...☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺☺and its interisting for other reader for ur novel..
揭示劇透 The story can be written and found everywhere there is person with bit of imagination. I support this story but characters and writing style is a novice level. I can read properly, don't know who is talking, what's his motive. Everything is just like it happens and we just accept it as it is.
this is great one for onepiece fun-fiction i hope u all like it dakingfvoianwgoinWGIOnAOIGNoilANMgoiamzoikwgawfawsfafagfvagWFFWafwsFWSGFhbedhbzh
I haven't read any chapters yet but I do know this will be a good novel because he is reborn in the one piece world. ..............................
ok nice plot and good imagination. Its started to get interesting, but why is chapters length got shorter and shorter plz note it and make it a stander length chap next time and correct the chap no and title of 8 and 9 chap
I love it the story has great potencial and its really entretaining i looooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooveeeeeeeeeee it
5 star for this. -,-) Ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora ora
the story so far(chap 7) seems interesting, i like it and would like for the mc to work independently from the strawhats, like make him have his own crew, give some quest to find the one piece, and don't give him a lot of devil fruit they are rare, like extremely rare, maybe every 50 to 100 chapters he by chance or plunder whatever, finds one, but not always get it's power, also i seemed to notice that you rushed the last chapters, the event were going so fast,so slow down a little, another point is that he is wasting his stat point while he could train for them, your story is great by the way keep on working
like the story so far, the mc shoild do some grinding, and how does heget weapon skills of higher lvl just by picking them up? well best of luck to the author, keep up the good work dont lose motivazion or inspiration
Well, if it a one piece story line. Dont crashing it down with the main plotod one piece, like some novel dat put bleach power at one piece world. He literally killed some luffy exp, so I hope he'll be like "im passing just to get some ketchup"
TRUCK SAMA KITAAAA!!!!!!! Beep beep!!! *vrroooommmmm* _____________________________________________________________________________________-____________-___________________
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