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Watch how our good friend Bael spreads his desire over Loli’s and conquers the multiverse
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Full of nonsense! so many plot hole i have ever read on this site, so many dumb decision MC make, its not even funny what choice he made, just turn off your brain reading this!
It’s just a copy of phoenix in DxD but worse, while in the original you could understand the characters here they are full of plotholes. in phoenix in DxD she has a reason to fight Ophis she was a goddess of chaos and had learned to fight for thousand years but here he’s just a random guy who reincarnate and the first thing he do is go fight a loli who has just born because she didn’t give him the time of the day. Plus he has massive ego saying things like ‘you dare’ or ‘this king’ I cringed.
so farr this Fanfic is awesome. But please don't Ruin this Ff like when Someone insult please kill them or disable that person. Also It would be even more awesome if our MC will not act like a Real hero and goes save people. (He can help and save people from the chat room but other nahh) (Like this comment if you wanted this too)
you just copied all the ideas from another ff the phoenix ff and just changed some things and thats it and now you ask for ideas now that you copied all that is to copy and that from another bad ff . ( sorry for my bad english)
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this best dxd fanfic I ever read so author don't drop it pls pls [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
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i think i read this same writing on phoenix in dxd but diffirent species it sure the same a lot....? i dont know if this author just copy that story even it's not finished or he or she just magically thought of same idea?.
on this page there are more than 100 dxd stories as in the name of god they all make the same mistakes and release the same stupid things
first try at this fanfic, hopes that the quality is consistent (or even better).............................................................
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other then the updates being random i am loving this novel. more please i beg of thee!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Sigh...You made MC too much OP and yet he is one who is running behind the girls rather than them getting attracted more towards him, that's the problem in nowadays fics authors make mc stupidity powerful while their goal is to bang woman and become their chained dogs. Though the writing quality was still good so a star for that, a star for being a shameless man(you know why).