摘要
Stephen Tine is a 12 year old who is smart to all hell, he is a hermit, shy and very timid around other people but the one time he decide to offer help to a group of people, turned something he had speculated to reality.
It all starts with the Cullens having car problems
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its badly written, grammar doesnt exist! tralallalalalalalalallalallallalallalalalalallalalalallalalalalallalalalalalalallalalalallalalallalalalaalalalallalallalpalalalapall
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It's not a very interesting story. In the beginning, there was a lot to uncover in The Past of the Main Character. And I think that was done in an incorrect manner everything was just slapped on the face of the Cullens like begging for attention or pity Not to mention the unrealistic acts of the main character Like him being able to find out about vampires and shapeshifters even when the governments can't Characters are not very fleshed out either there is always a feeling of disconnection the readers cannot truly come to care about what happens to a character Not to mention everything just gets brushed up quickly that we don't really have time to sink in the reality of the story The thing is this story is like a man went "what would happen if I was a crippled child with murdered parents in the world of twilight" and this was produced Not to mention a lot of writing mistakes happened and it was not eloquently typed out that i can't take it seriously
You should proof read your writin before publishing as some sentences make no sense or words are spelled in correctly also some of the plot is confusing
I honestly can’t tell if this story was written purely to troll or not. The best way i can honestly describe it is tokyo revengers meets twilight and then crank up the edginess by about 10x.
The story explains and correlates well with the story Stephanie made. Main character fits in with the story well without being random and thrown in. Overall wonderful so far!
Belle histoire esquil y aura une suite cars ça fini vite quand même certes il et une sorte de prince Volturi mais il doit y avoir plusieurs force dans twilight.
Is he ever going to full function over his body if get turned into a vampire because in my option it might be boring if he can’t even defend himself tho I really like your story so keep it 👍
I don't understand a thing? So mc is 12 but has a cane and is a chain smoker who can drive. I am confuzzled. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .