Yes it is better to just put the characters name, or you can use a different format on how the characters talk, though it's your choice.
But besides this the fic so far is pretty good.
Please don't use Me: ___ because it makes it like some sort of self insert
Do you mean White Beard because Black beard has not come to be yet, as I think teach has not yet betrayed the White beard Pirates.
"With Doc Q here, Blackbeard must be close by," he thought, his focus sharpening. Kitaro's main target was Blackbeard.
One Piece: Take the Uchiha Clan to the Grand Line
Anime & Comics · Coreal
Now i'm just imagining the 3rd group slowly backing away as if nothing happened.
Salas' intent had been simple: if the imperial faction hadn't made a move, the Spirit Hall would have stepped in, leaving the blame on the royal family and the Heaven Dou Royal Academy.
Douluo; Zhongli Adventures in Mortal World with Paimon
Anime & Comics · Yui_20
lol
(TL Note: Uhhhh...)
HI3: I Don't Want to Be a Valkyrie
Anime & Comics · Emiya_Official
it's "little sun of Konoha" or "Yellow flash" cuz the way you put it made it seem like Minato is a girl.
The terrifying experience, a mix of 21st-century horror game tactics and the virtual reality of a more futuristic mental network, made Minato, the 'flower of the leaf,' truly experience the ultimate fear of a horror game.
What the hell is making games in the Ninja World?
Anime & Comics · PirateKing24
aww cute
"A... a thousand years?! (っ °Д °;)っ"
I Don’t Want to Be a Heroic Spirit
Anime & Comics · WiseTL
What the heck is this?! A Chunin Exam?!
I turn this Otome game into Fighting game by mistake...
Fantasy · Nuts_hunter
"Can you tell me now—who kissed you?"
NIKKE: The Apocalypse Arrives, But the System is 100 Years Late
Anime & Comics · SenatusTheta