Webnovel Author: A_Dragon_Fantasy - Novel Collection

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The writing Quality is very good compared to most web novels with few typos here and there, so no comment on that. No comment on update stability to, it pretty good. Sigh! Mc 's personality... Don't even get me started, he is literally psychopath, cold, cunning and calculating, his dialogue with other characters aside from System can be summed up within 300 words, this book literally follows the law of power. Most of Mc's interaction is with the female system, who for some reason of hot🔥. Which I think is a ruining point, as how can Mc and the system have a physical relationship? Also, Mc literally has 'skill' do become invincible for 2 minutes, why does he need to use so much strategy? Half the charter is literally wasted in strategy and thinking not to mention side character, they are literally the embryo of foolishness. I get that their action is real and justifiable naturally however you didn't gave them much screen time for us to feel them. For instance, Ling Fei could have been better well written if we got to know more about him even tho, he was just fodder introduced for us to learn about the world setting, Mc's tactics, powers, and hierarchy. Also, you tend to focus on micro rather than macro, most people don't know complete psychology, body language, and premium English speaking ability to decode your character thoughts and metaphors... Like some interactions are smart beyond need. Also, Mc's lack of sympathy and morals... Mc should have saved Heaven fall scet because he had shared the night with saintess of the sect and not because he and his family was insulted. Most the time Mc literally has straight face. like make him feel fear sometimes, he is in front of an absolute powerhouse yet he sips his tea while keeping his composure. Also, you making his family mysterious as the story progresses is not needed at all. At first his family was the judiciary and now they also carry assassination... You were lucky because you have written the maid ( shadow guard ) on a mysterious basis that this was possible but don't put so much mystery on the main character or his family. We just know he has powerful bloodline, family, and body physique yet all are unknown at the moment while his powers are all sealed. All, Mc does is make strategy, moves ten step ahead of the enemy, and manipulate them. Like when Mc knew, the harem member was absurd by her father, Mc should have slaughtered the father and sect instead of manipulating them whole and keeping them as dogs. I am really not a fan of cold, cunning, sharp, staying in shadows, and making plan types of villains. He is powerful, he should fight everyone head-on. So, it's a 1star from me.