Hi - again, "piqued my interest" vs "piped" - hope this helps, as I'm not sure of the platform you're using as it may not pick these things up (e.g. as "piped" is spelled correctly, it's possible Word or whatever you're using didn't pick it up). You're doing great so far, I'm really enjoying the story!
After effortlessly taking the life of those three grown men, he had dropped on his knees and begged for mercy, promising his life to me while expressing regret and revealing how he was forced to walk in his father's footsteps. That had piped my interest a little and I engaged him in a little conversation after that. Because I knew how much I needed important allies, after discovering and confirming that he indeed had the skill of a beast, I decided to spare his life.
Carnivals: Claimed By The Deranged Alpha Prince [BL]
LGBT+ · Bree_Airee
Hi Author - did you mean "rasped" where you wrote "rapt"? I'm not sure how editing works from a writer's perspective, hence the question. Hope you don't mind if I point out something I may see here and there?
"Hurry." I rapt, fishing out a pack of cigarettes and lighting up a stick. In the background of the call, I could hear his fingers moving in a flash across the laptop.
Carnivals: Claimed By The Deranged Alpha Prince [BL]
LGBT+ · Bree_Airee
Lucius should feature in the Facebook group called "This Cat Is Jolene" (because he is trying to steal Xinxin from Noir, at this point - LOL).
Lost in contemplation, Gu Luoxin was startled by the black cat's next words, spoken in a leisurely tone with a hint of a purr. "And then… what do you say we go on a date around the town?"
When the Wild Beast is Trapped in the Nightmare Cycle (BL)
LGBT+ · delanasiwarka
This comic has an exceptional story arc and fantastic artwork, and was thoroughly entertaining. I'm super impressed and highly recommend it if you enjoy this genre.
Absolutely fantastic. I'm so glad the live action also did the story justice.
It's his character that really makes it... if Blaze had no one to rescue, there'd be no need for the entertaining shenanigans with all the baddies! Hopefully Jules learns some self-preservation soon, else Blaze will be exhausted. 🙈🤣
It's Jules we're talking about, of course he doesn't have the slightest idea. Somehow, it was like he had no sense of danger. For someone who's always in the midst of messes, he sure as hell has a very horrible sense of judgment.
Carnivals: Claimed By The Deranged Alpha Prince [BL]
LGBT+ · Bree_Airee