Kioni_Best

Kioni_Best

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2023-04-10 đã tham gia Bermuda
Huy hiệu 7

Moments 8
Kioni_Best
Kioni_Best
1 years ago
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Of course the King likes magic that’s how he took the throne with Cyan’s help!

Kioni_Best
Kioni_Best
1 years ago
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Laps should be “lap”

Kioni_Best
Kioni_Best
1 years ago
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Iris only has one lap

Kioni_Best
Kioni_Best
1 years ago
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Please correct your use of the word laps…in every case you write laps it should be lap.

Kioni_Best
Kioni_Best
1 years ago
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“Being” is unnecessary in this sentence and makes the reading cumbersome. Please remove it and stop using it.

Kioni_Best
Kioni_Best
1 years ago
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They were last intimate months ago, when Iris had her first heat.

Kioni_Best
Kioni_Best
1 years ago
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The first part of this novel was edited well but unfortunately this is no longer the case. Stop using laps the correct use is lap here and the last 3-4 times the word was used. Laps are what you run on a track. You sit on someone’s lap.

Kioni_Best
Kioni_Best
1 years ago
Commented

You have a extra “at” in here

"That she is!" Aurora answered smiling at brightly at me which I returned it back with a nervous smile of mine.

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