Jamilur_Rahman

Jamilur_Rahman

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2022-12-21 đã tham gia Global
Huy hiệu 4

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Jamilur_Rahman
12 days ago
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The story seems good but the narration can be better. The mc is speaking like he knows what is going on inside everyones head. You should use other person's view to showcase their reactions. Use more dialogues.

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Jamilur_Rahman
17 days ago
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please fix the chapters

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1 months ago
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Raven trait : I like the spotlight Luna: Student council

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1 months ago
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Ezekiel freed the slave Diana and now fighting

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