Superman kills, remember that! Not just Snider's Superman, but comics Superman also kills, if he can't reson with you he will F-ing kill you.
Futa, REALY!!... you disgust me!
Killed her off because you did not knew what to do with her... writing!!
Why did you deleted the chapters?
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And it is also not very cohesive.
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I haven't even read this fanfic but a criticism must be shared, paragrafphs, too damn larges! Peaple nead to breathe my boy!
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More than three months and still silence, is this novel dead, finito, acabada, dropped?
Work more on describing the environments, the characters' personalities and their thoughts, increase or double the size of each chapter and don't rush so much trying to get to the next important point in the plot, take your time there, this way your fic will improve at least a little bit.
The problem with first-person points of view is that while the character narrates or if there is a general explanation involving the character's state, ability, mentality, etc. his or her will always seem out of place because this is something that takes place in a third-person narration. So having the character cohesively narrate something he shouldn't seem strange and out of place.
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original Froom Blood and Ashes. (A God of War Fanfiction.) PT BR.
Language PT BR. Boy finds himself lost in nothingness, Boy meets girl, Boy discovers girl is dead, Boy does not discriminate because he also died, Boy and girl meet ROB, Boy agrees to reincarnate in the girl's body by ROB, Girl (boy) gets new body and gear, Girl (boy) goes on an adventure. .................... If it wasn't already clear, this is a genderbender fanfic! I'm not trying to be rude, I'm just pointing it out because I don't want any confusion, some people don't like that, like me who don't like fanfics or novels with pokemon harens and edgelords. Everyone has their own taste, the important thing is that I understand you, you understand me and we all understand each other, no conflicts here. ................ The cover isn't mine.3 Chs 76 sưu tầm
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