No worries I’m just trying to make it a worth while read I have no plans to give up on it.
I like the idea, but I’ve already given him his wings I could try to work it into a different plot point maybe, but that would be spoilers thanks for reading.
Heres the reveiw I’ve enjoyed it so far thank you.
True, but I don’t see the qunari killing a potential weapon over him being disrespectful, also that’s just going to be how he speaks, for now, it will change a little over time from experience but he’s young right now, and unless he respects them he won't talk to them with respect. Thanks for reading and any tips are appreciated as I’m trying to get better.
Thanks I’ll try it out next chapter
Tell me if you don't want the brackets around the thinking or self monologue I can just write it without
Video Games · Zeinex
Thank you for your review and I appreciate your advice.
Just imagine him with gold irises and thats what he looks like
Video Games · Zeinex
I was tryinging to make it to where it comes to him naturally, but now that I think into it deeply your right and i’ll try my best to improve on it,there might be a rewrite for the story once I improve this was just supposed to be my first try at writing thank you for your feedback
I see where your coming from, I’ll try my best to improve on it thank you for the reveiw and tips.
Definelty my favorite story so far on this plat form. It’s just my opinion and I think this story deserves it so far.
DC/Young Justice: Colors
Anime & Comics · Geo_Ruler