Arshavian

1 years ago

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Even if you wanted to show human perspective, creating brand new character in the middle of the story and making him new protagonist is definitely not the way you should have done this. If you wanted to make story with two main characters, they should have been introduced in the beginning together. Now we have Artur - a character that nobody cares about, a character we know nothing about (apart from being Nevare brother) being introduced as a second main character only to show the war from a human point of view. Honestly, if you wanted to point out how the war affected people, you should have just added some minor human characters and keep the plot focused on orks, even more so when there would be so many changes in their kingdom now. Like most readers, I think I expected to read about Moku, orks and their journey in the world, and like most people I don’t want to read the whole volume unrelated to them. I really liked your story, but I won't be reading it anymore. I wish you the best in the future.

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