'"I'M A GIRL!??????"—is what I wanted to say, but all that came out was: "WAAAAAAAAAAAH!!!??"
Anime & Comics · Door_kun
Bro is not Thorfin
Without glancing at him, I replied, "Disappointed? Yes. Fear? No... Why must I fear death? After all... Death is not the opposite of living." My murky eyes remained fixed on my lifeless body lying on the ground.
Anime & Comics · Door_kun
"I-Impossible…" Vegeta held his stomach as he dropped to his knees in pure disbelief and pain.
Anime & Comics · CaptainBoyHole
Property tax, the cost of ingredients, maintenance, employee wages, the business tax, employee benefits (If there are any) and any repairs and renovations means this cafe should have gone under if it only makes 150,000 a year. (Unless it's financed by the MCs family)
In a year alone, the cafe earns the lady nearly 150,000 dollars!
Anime & Comics · NoNameDeity
Dolian rambled on and on, and as if he didn't notice it, started to belittle Dhep's stature as a man with an arrogant tone. Hearing Dolian's smug and 'know-it-all' tone seemed to have bothered Dhep as he refuted Dolian's statement after being barraged with a series of taunts as if he was possessed, "But I don't like girls all that much in the first place!"
Anime & Comics · NoNameDeity
This guys stuff is always fun to read so five starts. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
This one, just like everything else I write is a random collection of thoughts I came up with while washing dishes put onto paper with no filter.
The entire story is filled with references to other fictional works and random moments that were funny in my head. If you want an actual story, read sum else cuz this ain't it.
Not bad. The Grammar is fine, and so is the basic sentence structure making it readable which I can't say for 75% of the works on here. The world background is already set up so to get lower than a four you would have to actively try and fuck it up. The story development is fairly quick but that's fine as UBW is filled with a lot of bullshit that could be easily skipped. Character Design... could use some work. Dialogue is fast and without substance, instead of reading as two characters having a conversation it reads as two people running lines with each other. Someone will say something, someone else will say something and move on without expressing any emotion, or tone. The question and exclamation marks will only take you so far before it all starts to blend together in a banal mess of conversations that feel more like dialogue options from an Oblivion NPC than two people actually talking to one another. Plus, (And this is a personal opinion) it's really ugly when there are sound effects to demonstrate what characters are doing instead of something like - ("She broke down into sobs, staining the front of my shirt with her tears") Or ("Our conversation was abruptly ended by the ringing of the lunch bell") But otherwise it's a fine fic.
What country do you live in where school starts at 3?
As we continue to live peacefully away from the public eye, there's been an interesting development: we've entered school, and now we're kindergarteners.
Idol Daughter's Dimensional Group Chat
Anime & Comics · Door_kun