lynn_oka

Thanks for the chapter :)

thanks for the chapter, I feel like it is turning into to much of a power fantasy for my taste but I will still read more :)

Thanks for the chapters!

I am glad you took no offence, I was a bit anxious. That is perfectly fine, I hope it finds its way into the story some way :) I will be glad to continue reading regardless, thank you for sharing your work!

Okay, I have to say some things about this chapter. I actually like it turning gory and related heavy themes. The main character assaulting a child is not something I am fine with however, without (emotional) consequences at least. Also this rage is not something I would like to see often, maybe it was caused by the soup tho. Also less pointless cursing would be something your novel would benefit a lot from in my opinion. I feel like a lot of interesting interactions or observations don't happen or are cut short because she just starts cursing and raging for pages. I really like your writing and also her character design, but I really think for the sake of immersion and progression it would help a lot to tone it down to a certain level. Anyway, I enjoy reading your work a lot and hope you are not discouraged by my critisism. I hope you take it with a grain of salt since you are still the author and doing great work which I could'nt. This is just my take at things which keep this from being the perfect read for me. But still, you are doing a great job, thanks for the chapter and please keep updating :)