literl010

Grammar and spelling are great, far above the average novel on WN, and the blend of worlds in this unique AU is intriguing. Characters are pretty good and act rationally within the plot. It's too early to comment much on the plot, although there are a lot of chapters, it's still very early due to the short chapters. The AU mix has given a nice twist on the standard MHA story progression, and I hope this continues. However, I don't find the story very satisfying. As mentioned, chapters are very short (<1000 words), combined with the slow pace, and lack of a consistent release schedule, results in a poor reading experience. I'm also not a fan of how the smut is written. The first instance had a full 5 chapters dedicated to foreplay with no conclusion. A later scene does end properly, but again, has 2.9 of 3 chapters dedicated to the build-up. It's all an anti-climax. It's technically well written, and has promise, but mainly due to the chapter length and inconsistent updates, I don't find it enjoyable. I'll probably stack up chapters and come back in a year, if it hasn't been dropped.

It has the harem and smut tags, what were you expecting? It's like giving a pizza place a bad review because you don't like pizza.