I’m definitely looking forward to this game
I would probably compare the processing room to something other than a tropical place though, because its initial description seemed cold and dreary, which is not at all like the tropical areas of the world. Characterisation of the new characters is interesting. Glad to see the story picking up a bit.
I like the light hearted humor of the story so far. I would’ve liked more build up to the big reveal/discovery of the main character’s powers though: a more detailed glimpse into his everyday world, and maybe a little specifics about how his friendship with his old friend ended—basically a more immersive introductory experience. I can’t deny I’m intrigued though and am interested to read further.
The writing was good—pleasant enough to read with just a few lapses in grammar and a few awkward word choices. The beginning with the hitchhiker and the missing girls provided an interesting opening but I don’t see the value or purpose of these details at the end; literally it was like I was reading a series of events (like the description says) but those events weren’t really dependent on each other and barely connected at the end. Though I felt the story lacking in execution and plot, it has overall an intiguing premise.
What I was thinking Or you can just say “of bad repute”
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A Hitchhiker, A House, and Sausages
Horror · Sigheti
I like the description of the houses moving. I really like personification of inanimate objects.
The residence appeared so seceded that it almost seemed as if it had been ostracised from the other residences in the neighbourhood; as if the houses themselves spent the last few decades slowly creeping away from it.
A Hitchhiker, A House, and Sausages
Horror · Sigheti
The word works if he distinguished it FROM something, like if he distinguished the hills FROM the road meaning he spotted the hills as a separate structure from the road.
It was on his way to Eaton Secondary School that Charles Corbyn first distinguished the bleak yellow protrusion aside the dusty field road. It was not much of a car; at least not alike the cars people prided themselves with at West-Eaton, but a vehicle that was in a low-grade but adequate state. It must still have been another mile ahead of him but even with the rolling of the landscape one could look quite far ahead. They weren't hills. They were too small to be called hills. But they were the only protrusion in the otherwise flat scenery and thus the locals had proudly dubbed them the Eaton Hills. Beside, along and beyond stretched fields of grass and wheat and barley, and calm, cud-chewing bovines lay languidly beside the grids of barbed wire. A line of pines ran along the horizon, suggesting a forest, silhouetted against the grim, cloudy heavens. It would rain later on, Corbyn knew, and he would rather be on paved road when it did. He had no desire to be stuck in the mud all afternoon.
A Hitchhiker, A House, and Sausages
Horror · Sigheti
Thanks for commenting
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original Two Windows
As he slowly realizes he is not alone in his mind and body, Martin discovers there is a malicious entity within him capable of selfish cruelty. In his attempt to unify his fragmented identity, his journey gives him a glimpse into his traumatic past, and eventually allows him to come to terms with the irreconcilable nature of the personalities battling for control within him. "I see myself slowly changing. Into what or who, I don't know. I'm acting differently, saying things I never would. People I've never met approach me like a friend and, before I can think, I respond as if I know them too. When I look in the mirror, I see a different face. At first, I thought it was a trick of the light, but I'm becoming dead certain it isn't me staring back anymore."6 Chs 4 sưu tầm
Me too 😅
"Roar!"
Beauty and the Beasts
Fantasy · Dreams of White Tresses