That was a great police-thief chase.
Wow...
"FUCK!" The girl cried in shock as Liam's body hung lifeless out of the car, the blood spraying all over her and the front seat.
Sci-fi · Theothecolossal
Great start!
Great story! The grammar is impeccable. As for the worldbuilding, I can't say much as only four chapters have been published. All in all, it is a story with a lot of potential.
Oh! The sentinel Scanners really seem amazing. It is just that no other character has been introduced, and even Doctor Marlowe wasn't actively described. But, thanks for the chapter.
Okay...
Nice start! The magic system and fights are also good. The story has some potential and I look forward to future chapters. I love your cover pic by the way.
The fight was very short but still nice. The quibbles between Thorne and Galen is hilarious too.
Haha!
Galen chuckled at the spectacle unfolding before him, "Perhaps I've taken over part of your brain?" He continued making fun of Thorne, enjoying the chaos.
Fantasy · Malakai_Darkstar
Great story! The grammar is good and there are only a few mistakes in between. The author has done a great job of designing the characters. Our protagonist, Cade, is a guy who for the moment is struggling to make ends meet. The story only has three chapters published, so I can't say much about worldbuilding. All in all, it is a story with a lot of potential.
Shadows of Decryption; Secrets Unveiled
Sci-fi · Theothecolossal