Coyle

Coyle

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Coyle
Coyle
1 years ago
Posted

I think this story can be something great, however, there is a big problem in this tale. The author puts too many unnecessary descriptions and info dumps. (Ex: Chapter 1) we don't need to know all of that right at the start. Also, the writing style isn't very appealing to me (maybe because it shows the emotions and motives of everyone, which seems great in theory but isn't at all. There is no mystery.) That being said, the story seems to be progressing rather well and I'm sure that with time, the 'problems' I pointed out in this review will change. Please continue with the great work, author!!

Coyle
Coyle
1 years ago
Replied to AMonarch

Thank you for the review!

Coyle
Coyle
1 years ago
Replied to AceAmbrosia

Glad to know, thank you for the review!

Coyle
Coyle
1 years ago
Posted

While this is not the type of novel I usually read, I liked it. There were errors in the grammar but nothing that ruined the experience too much. (But if possible, please find a proofreader.)

Coyle
Coyle
1 years ago
Commented

I found this pretty enjoyable. Please give me more chapters!

Coyle
Coyle
1 years ago
Commented

He is dumb

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Coyle
Coyle
1 years ago
Replied to Coyle

I'm not sure if mam is also correct tho

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Coyle
Coyle
1 years ago
Commented

Btw the correct word is "Ma'am"

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Coyle
Coyle
1 years ago
Commented

at this rate she will end like this:

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Coyle
Coyle
1 years ago
Commented

nah

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