😅 That means Webnovel Spirity Awards 2022** I will be moving my novel to participate in that! It will be on webnovel app/site itself, I'll leave the link to that one in the synopsis of this book :))
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Hey brother! I'm thinking of moving this story to WSA22, So I'm gonna remove this... I wish I recieve your extended support there! I thought I should inform you as you are expecting from me (thanks for that ✨) So yeah, after recieving your reply, I'm gonna delete this...
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Thank you for reading it till now, I will restart it soon ::)
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Fantasy · 20DrachenAuge
Okay! I'm gonna read until the last and see for it myself! Haha ::)
Ly really is amazing, not losing rationality in her mind and what not! So, are you! Your writing is really good, but you can adjust those paragraph like splitting them into 2 or more? That would make it reading more engaging! Your narration is surreal, and you might just tone it down a little bit, and let the characters explain it themselves! Yeah! Keep writing! ::)
Managing some punctuations, splitting some paragraphs will make it even better! Try to edit them!!!!
That was engaging! Felt like it ended too quickly, haha... But yeah, I found a little awkwardness in your writing style, which improved may prove you best! And why the 5 stars? Becoz I know you would improve your style! Keep Writing!
It's beautifully written! (Excluding some grammatic errors here and there). I'm cheering for both You and Emma! Jason is such a sweet heart. And yeah, the chapters can be longer. You are making a break where the mood actually develops, it makes it feel really short. So work on that!! Good Luck!
Try dividing the paragraphs and add some actions to the speech ::)
Thank you So Much!
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