I know this is the author's first story probably or something of that measure but this is the first few chapters and you're already having some little inconsistencies that are minorly annoying come back and fix them if you can
can we talk about how Rush this is like how long does the course of this happen over a couple months a year this is way too fast he gets her back after not seeing her her memory is messed up and somehow she pushes out a child excuse me absolutely not not realistic but even then it's way too fast we need a timeline for this because this seems like this happened in a matter of months or less than a year of them being back together no attempt to rekindle a relationship or nothing just rush into it no author you need to do better even if you're meaning to end this novel soon that's way too quickly without any details or nothing just boom there's a baby
that's like my guy's first time finally using the skill in this whole story thank God
it's all good
why not just get rid of the chapters when you know they're the wrong ones like at this point this is twice now technically three times because you put one chapter in the wrong spot fix it man
okay the spelling and grammar is beginning to drive me up a wall and the forgetting details it's becoming nerve-wracking at least review these first chapters again I mean I know you're further along in the story but please fix the errors in the beginning
The advantage of his intelligence at this point doesn't he have like a five in intelligence He's basically an idiot fix that because that's not right makes no sense for him low intelligence and yet act like it's a big intelligence it's not at this point he's got like a five in intelligence makes no sense
One time I woke up as a snail and saw the end it creeped me out then I woke up and it was a dream
See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola
where the heck did this locket come from
Reincarnated With Three Unique Skills
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