No one would ask questions in a sense like that. Maybe ask if he learned before or if he wanted to go pro but no one is gonna see a fighter and be like oh he is an assassin or something like that.
The problem? Sparring at a gym or an underground fight club would draw attention. If he improved too fast, people would start asking questions. He needed to be careful.
Marvel: A Man with a System
Movies · Ryder_Blackthorne
angry at himself*
After he got in he went bed and lied on the bed. He calmed himself down without getting angy on himself for his stupidity.
Marvel: A Man with a System
Movies · Ryder_Blackthorne
It is OP, stop crying like a lil bih and move on.
What happened? First 5 chapters had little to no mistakes and now chapter 6 and 7 have multiple with some being extremely jarring. Like how in the paragraph above. You start out in first person and weirdly switch to third person.
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Marvel: A Man with a System
Movies · Ryder_Blackthorne
It’s literally been 5 chapters. Even if he adds one of it ends before 100 chaoters then it isn’t worth reading.
Oh no!!! He doesn’t have a computer!!! He is about to die 😱
A whole lot of stuff happening for nothing to have happened. I like details but this is a bit much.
He made his way up to his unit, unlocking the door and stepping inside. The familiar dim lighting, the slight creak of the wooden floor—everything was just as he left it. He placed his shopping bags on the small dining table and let out a deep breath.
Marvel: A Man with a System
Movies · Ryder_Blackthorne
lol that’s today.
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Unique Gamers Travels
TV · ArtoriaPendragon_
Wouldn’t Elephant or Rhino be better if you are going for strength? For fantasy Dragons are always top tier even above Pheonixs.
"System, I choose Tiger and Phoenix as my animagus forms. And yes, please equip the resurrection stone, and also bring out the cloak for me" Said Talia. She chose the tiger due to it being one of the strongest animals out there, and it being her second favorite non fantasy animal, just behind lions. She chose phoenix for obvious reasons, their resurrection, apparition, beautiful singing, immunity to instant death gazes, phoenix tears, and what she anticipates to be resistance or downright immunity to fire.
Unique Gamers Travels
TV · ArtoriaPendragon_
The paragraphs are too cluttered. The Pov switch was weird and the system and stats look terrible and clunky. No parentheses to separate or help with keeping the system clean. Also it feels like you are always talking to us, which is weird asf. I want to read a story, not read about a guy talking to me.
Naruto: Reborn as Gaara!
Anime & Comics · NikaTheHonoredOne